Equestria needs a Doctor: Rewrite (Update) · 4:14pm Feb 10th, 2014
This is further update on the clean up of Equestria needs a Doctor. The good news is that it is going much faster than anticipated. I had to go through the first five chapters again but I'm all the way up to chapter 9 now. Below is a list of changes including the new ones.
- When Vinyl Scratch mocks Dash by calling her a fillyfooler, Dash no longer states that she is bisexual. She instead claims that she is straight. This is to keep continuity because in "How to Tell Your Friends You're Dating a Changeling," a main premise of the story is that most ponies believe a made up lie that Dash is gay, when in actuality, she is straight.
-The scene where Ponyville sees the Doctor for the first time has been altered. When Octavia catches a glimpse of the Doctor, she doesn't answer Berry Punch but keeps staring at the Time Lord. Instead, a passing Cloudchaser screams changeling, name dropping Question Mark (the League + HTTYFYDAC) in the process. This was done to reinforce Octavia's attraction to the Doctor, while at the same time creating a small link to later stories.
-When Celestia is freaking out over the state of her country, it is much more obvious that the problem is because of a large gender divide that may be approaching again. This used to be so bad that mares outnumbered stallions 80/20.
- On top of this, the gender divide stated by Rarity has gone from 70/30 to 60/40. When I wrote that statistic initially, I was basing it off solely on how many more mares than there were stallion in Ponyville. Seeing more of Equestria since then, I feel 60/40 would be loser, but can also still be considered the beginning of a problem for the country.
- Instead of the Master not existing at all, the pony Doctor will state he is an old foe that he defeated countless times and confirm his death before the start of the Time war.
- Any mention of the changelings settling into pony society has been completely removed and replaced with the mention that there hasn't been any sight of them since the invasion.
- Lyra's conversation with the Doctor during the Doctor and Octavia date has been slightly altered.
- The formatting for the story has been overhauled to match the later stories in the carnageverse.
- Some of the Doctor's (Time Lord) dialogue has been changed to make it sound more like the Tenth Doctor than just any generic Doctor. This was an issue initially with some people. The pony Doctor wont be changed as he was meant to be closer to generic Time Pony.
- Speaking of which, the term Time Pony no longer exists. The pony Doctor is also referred to as a Time Lord and Gallineigh is back to Gallifrey.
Again, everything has been done for the purpose of connecting the story to the carnageverse, general clean up of grammar, and because the sequel is just around the corner.
Here's a funny Doctor Who video :D
