Ze Critisism! I Vant it!

Hey there guys! Citrus Fizz here! This blog is for a few guys in particular, those who dislike my story. Now, I won't go and try and make you feel bad for your choices and tastes, you don't like my story, and I can respect that. However, I wanna know why. If you have the time, please, comment on why you think the story is bad. Like my description says, I'm open to constructive criticism, so I would really appreciate your help. Is it flat character design, plot holes? Please, by all means comment on this blog as to how I could do better. It really is helpful to me. Thank you, and thanks for reading!