Reviews are in. · 8:13pm May 6th, 2012
Okay, got the review back from ponychan and it went about as well as expected (lots of mistakes). I'm now working on rewrite of Chapter 1. The Pinkie and Discord scene is being removed (for good reason) and something like it will show up in a later chapter where it fits better. I was informed of my major problems with punctuation, I'll be working on that as well as a few other problems I was told of.
All in all this is going to be a very good thing. It's going to take a day or two to get Chapter 1 redone but after that I'll be able to focus on actually writing Chapter 2. And, hopefully I'll be able to better avoid these problems now that I know what they are.