Time for a Rewrite!

So I published the new story. And that's all well and good. But, I'm not quite satisfied with it. Therefore---Rewrite incoming!!!

As an overview of what's been going on, I posted chapter one of the Shadow of the Colossus/The Last Guardian inspired crossover fic. I have a second chapter fully written out as well. The response to it has been positive, but muted. Honestly, that's not a big deal. Very little gets much attention before an EQD posting. But there's my problem, you see, how can I honestly put this story forth as my best work when I am simply not satisfied by it? Thus, a rewrite session it is. I won't delete anything, but I may not post anything new for a little while either. Just an FYI.

Thanks to the several :D people who give regular feedback! I will be curious to see whether you guys prefer the relatively straightforward storytelling format (like the currently published first chapter) or if something more artistic/cinematic will appeal to you a bit more.