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this is sad, i wrote a quick spur of the moment story about pinky pie and it was loved (except the poor grammer) than i go and publish the story ive put alot of work into and created an incredabole plot for and its shunned. lesson of the day, writers, avoid OC's, they are hard to incorperate into a story properly.

Comments

[Coal]

So far I've only quickly read the first two chapters of it but I don't think it's the fact that you're using an OC is the problem. What I thought while I went through it quickly was that it jumped around alot, and that Wings' personality was hard to pin down. what I mean by that is he was dreary and depressed on eminute, feeling that everypony in the world thinks he's "mad" and the next he's giddy over getting to fly a new plane. The way it's written makes it a little hard to read but I feel that the basic idea can be used. ( Although I already know where the story is going )

[psycho pony guy]

damn you coal, comeing here on my blog and insulting my stories, (and I know you dont have a , i have a and a beard to boot) but i wasnt good at writeing back then, hopefually my new story im working on will be better...