The First Chapter has been Fixed! · 4:34pm Jul 29th, 2013
Well, mostly, anyway. I've made a large amount of edits according to the feedback I received from you peeps, and I hope the quality of the chapter has been improved accordingly.
Now it should be at least mostly readable, so go check it out again if you haven't seen it! The plot hasn't changed much, but there are a few extra tidbits of information here and there that I think will help to explain a few things.
And now, on to chapter two! I feel like I can take on the world right now!