A Few Minor Fixes and POV issues

Okay, so I went back and made some corrections. Mostly, I just fixed my HTML slips and I added Cadence back in the end of chapter two because I noticed I forgot to mention her with the group.

It was brought to my attention that the POV is a bit of a mess as it tends to tell it from Luna's POV a lot of the time but then switches depending on scenes. I didn't try to fix that. Since it's not my professional novel or anything, I figured a few flaws like that could slide. However, I did have trouble establishing everyone. Chapter 3 should be a little easier to follow as it's mostly told from Voodoo's POV, since he's telling the story in Chapter 3.

I'm going to have to take a bit to rethink how the story will go in light of Lauren Faust's shared information. Overall the story can still go the same, but small issues did come up and I'm wondering what and how much to change and what to just keep and say "screw it."

I've been wanting to share this story but, with the two chapters I have, I don't feel it encompasses the atmosphere I want. It's not impressive. I'm hoping that changes in future chapters since the cast does become more focused and centered. But why so many OC's if they aren't important in the first chapters? Well they'd be playing parts later on as the story does go back and forth from present to past. Each past story is being told by someone, be it Voodoo, Mardi Gras, or Antiquity.

Chapter 3 will be titled "Quagga" which is pronounced "Kwa ha." It's the word for zebra, is the name of an extinct species of zebra, and is the sound a zebra makes. Since the story in Chapter 3 focuses on explaining who and what have been debating if the flashback scenes would be featuring the zebras speaking in rhyme. On the one hand, that's been established so far that they speak that way. However, they adopted "Second Tongue" to communicate with ponies who did not speak their language. So I had toyed with the notion that Young Voodoo would no speak in rhyme because he's technically speaking in his native language and what we are reading is a translation of what he is saying. However once he speaks with ponies, he's probably speak in rhyme [why rhyme, I'm not sure yet. It probably started as a joke and stuck. I'll figure it out]. Besides...rhyming is hard for these guys lol. I can't imagine telling the whole chapter like a Dr. Seuss book.

Anyway...if there are still some mistakes...well, I'll just fix them later. As for the third chapter...just be patient. I've been working on revising my novel for the publisher, and I write scripts for a cartoon weekly, AND I do artwork projects as well, AND I have college homework to keep up with. So, it'll just take some time between all that and SOME sort of relaxation to get the time I need to think and write.

I have also been toying with a crossover fic idea. I'm in some role playing groups on DeviantArt. In one game, I play Pitch from Rise of the Guardians and I play Zecora. We were working on a plot that mostly involved pony characters. I feel corny for it as I've never written crossovers and writing fanfiction already feels funny as I've not done is since 2000. However, I was thinking of trying it anyway just to kinda test the waters. I also have another idea for a Rarity fic mostly just for shits and giggles. I dunno. One thing at a time I suppose.

Anyway...that's that... So...back to work I go!