*SPOILERS* Review to "Memories We Never Had" by HiddenBrony · 10:07am Jun 14th, 2013
Wish I could say much about this story but there really isn't anything to go on for my first finished review of a story.
We start out with Applejack, Rarity, Fluttershy, and Rainbow Dash sitting around Rarity's home just talking after Fluttershy says a joke.... Fluttershy says a joke? Really? This didn't make any sense to me at the time. Then, I find that Opalescence has taken a liking to Rainbow Dash. At the time of learning these, I didn't know what was going on. Not much was said in the summery to go off of and nothing was really going to on to point me in the right direction. It wasn't until halfway through the chapter did I find out the answers to my questions. By then...I was bored.
This takes place after the Mane 6 get their cutie marks swapped and all hell breaks loose because of it. Turns out that they liked the jobs that they did even though it went against their original cutie marks. Now, this isn't a bad conflict, in fact, it's quite interesting to say the least. But when nothing was done to resolve the conflict or even do anything about it but gripe and whine, I find that to be poorly executed. All that happened was Fluttershy says a joke, Twilight arrives from Canterlot, the girls explain to her their problem (which took a while), and THE END. No resolve. There is a second chapter to what should've been a one-shot, but that only explains how the girls feel while they do the jobs the cutie marks gave them.... something that should've been explained before along with the conflict.
The original chapter ended with a weird note as well. If you notice, I didn't say Pinkie Pie was there at all. No, she was at Sweet Apple Acres doing Applejack's job. It ends with, suddenly out of the blue, her and Big Mac kissing. No build up. Just kissing...and send them on home. There was no plot to this at all and nothing else happens
I believe this story could be a really interesting one if the author goes back and adds an interesting plot to it, give it a story to give the conflict some credibility. Because a lot of sloppiness was put into this, I have to give this one a 2/10.
Thing is, I want the author to go back over a redo it. It would be such a cool concept and maybe even heart wrenching and I love moments like that. It just doesn't click here with me.
JMlovinlife
