Warmongers news and proofreader search · 6:21pm Jun 13th, 2013
As you can probably tell, I've unpublished the last chapter that I've added to the story. I did this because several readers brought to my attention that numerous plot holes and flaws existed in this chapter. Upon review and introspection, I found myself to be in agreement with them and deemed the last chapter lacking and poorly executed. It has been scrapped and will no longer be canon with the story at the current time.
I am currently looking for a small number of proofreaders/editors for this story, around two or three. This would help me greatly in production of this story as it would be of great use to get feedback before publishing the chapter(s). So, if you enjoy the story and would like to offer some constructive criticism and feedback, as well as possibly contribute some ideas, let me know. Just leave a comment below or send me a PM and I'll get back to you as soon as I can.
Thanks guys,
-NocturnalLoner
I hope you rething Luna character to something more favorable. I mean in this chapter I coudn't feel simpathy (please correct me if I writen down this last word wrong) to her. When I read the chapter and remembered thet she is treatened by her sister I whas like "woah karma is a bi*ch eh? Luna?". Serously wtf whas she thinking?
I am treatened by my sister ho whant to get me out from the picture so she can be on full power what shoud I do?
a, Secretly ally my self wiht here enemys (the humans) thaking as much resource secrets and pony power as possible damaging here power/army/country as muich as possible to get the odds to my and my allys favor so I have a good chance to survive and rule the ponies.
OR!
b, I do as much war crime as possible to my sister enemys making them hate me as much as my sistery cuting myself off to ally my self wiht them and by doing this I help my sister and serve my self on a silver plate to her to grab all the power to her self and killing me in the procces?
Hmmmmm so hard to choice. Oh I know I go wiht plan b thet woud work in my favor right? DERP!
So yeh please rework Luna character from a war crime causing douche to somepony we all woud like to have as a ally.
1142499 I will. I got rid of this chapter completely as that was one of the many flaws I somehow overlooked like an idiot. When I introduce Luna in the story officially, I will be sure not to make her actions contradictory again.
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It's completly okay everybody make mistakes and so far I love this story Can't waite for the next chapter but please rework Luna personality to a less khmm Brutaly character please.