Icarus · 11:29pm Mar 20th, 2012
So, I've had some thoughts. Comments and reviews on Icarus have made me reconsider. I think they might be right.
People said they felt cheated by it, or disappointed. At first I put it down to haters gonna hate, but now I realise that in the idea of "Icarus" there is potential for something bigger that at first I didn't imagine.
So - I've taken it down. If you really, really liked it how it was, then I can reupload it. But I won't do that until I've had another go at it, and then I will put a link to the original in the description of the new one. I promise I will try harder, and do better. I'll be home from uni for the Easter holidays coming up, so it might be finished some time after then.
Sorry if it seems insecure. But it's my story, and I want it to be the best it can be. For now, feel free to read through my shorter stories; people seem to like them more.
Hmm. Up to you bro. Thought it was pretty solid a story. I critiqued a few loose ends, awkward parts, and plot contrivances myself but I felt overall the story structure, pacing and concept was a good one. If you are wanting to give it a facelift, all power to ya. One thing I would say you shouldn't change, add more of if you want, but don't change, is the feel of the shipping. Natural, warm, not sappy in the least. Love minus melodrama.
38219 I'm glad you thought it was generally all right. Other people didn't think so, but anyway, I can still do better.
I uh... only read the first part/chapter and part of the second part/chapter. =/
so, i can't say anything beyond that.
What I read was great. Felt the problem got too big too fast, though. You foreshadowed it just fine, but still felt a little big in such a short time.
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I thought it was really good.
Overall, I felt Icarus was a good story. Kinda fast-paced, but solid and had a cool concept.
But, if you feel it wasn't enough as it was, well, that's your call. Every story certainly can go through another round of rewriting, editing, and polishing.
Anyway, all I've really got to say is that I look forward to it being published once again. I actually think it's really awesome for you to go and try to take the story an extra mile; I don't think every author would decide to do that.
And finally, best of luck to you with this.
As I had said previously, the story overall was good. Strong concept behind and quite well delivered, so the basis of it is good.
It just think that you finished it too soon, that there could be a lot more effort behind it and there are a few loose ends which I think are rather important... like Trixe just vanishing and whenever or not what Icarus said was part of the truth at all...
Looking through my art folder. Hey, this reminds me of that scene... http://sonicrainboom93.deviantart.com/art/Sleeping-Or-Something-lol-262146324
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39896 Good find. I wasn't actually thinking of that when I wrote the scene; but I am of course familiar with the picture, since it's the cover art for another of my stories.
Also, how the horsefeathers did someone just track Icarus? I took it down.
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Hmm. I've only read a couple of your stories. I might not have realized. Just found it while browsing my folder.
There are other similar pics but that's the only one where one of them is sleeping.
Weird on the tracking thing.
Ah, sadly I read the first chapter and was intending to catch up on the rest when it was complete, so I can't comment in any great detail - I will watch out for the revised version, however.
I thought Icarus was a really good story, and it had to be if EQD put it on their site.