Time for an Update! · 12:19am Apr 11th, 2013
Hello everyone! Not too much going on right now. I am happy to announce that I'm really getting into my new Rainbow Dash story "Making the Rainbow Shine". It took a little time, but I'm really connecting with Rainbow Dash and the story has been moving along nicely. Currently I've got 4,496 words so far. Originally I thought that maybe this one-shot would reach 10,000 words. Well, after starting it, that estimate has gone up considerably. I'm now projecting a length of roughly 12,000-14,000 words, give or take a thousand.
I've started this story out a little differently than some of my other 2nd-person human x pony stories. This time I have a flash back in the beginning that shows you meeting "your" mare. I also include some brief back story (not as much as I did in "More Than Their Customer") but it should be enough to give you some idea about "your" relationship with Rainbow Dash as well as some of your experiences in Equestria. In addition to this little blurb, there will be little notes about your time in the pony world as the story goes on. I feel doing it this way will keep things flowing at a nice pace, rather than bombarding you with a huge chunk of back-story all at once.
One other thing this story has going for it is this. I think I've finally got a new approach for really spicing up my dialogue, so my characters sound more emotional as they talk. I was given some good advice in a comment on my new Twilight story "She Will Always Be Your Twilight", plus I've been reading some other stories on here, and getting some great ideas toward improving my dialogue. Now, I can't promise the cheesiness will leave their words, but hopefully the added emotion will help. Besides, I know many of you enjoy the excessive fluff of my love stories, otherwise, you wouldn't be here. lol
This new story should be a very good one when all is said and done. It has a similar storyline to that of "Her Gentle Hooves" in that there is a love scene near the beginning, as well as near the end. I'm also hoping to add a little more sensuality to the love scenes in this story. From the fan art of Rainbow Dash I've seen, I think she can pull off sensual in a very sexy way, and that's considering that she is quite the tomboy. Though one thing I'm tackling in this story (besides her - lol) is that even though she comes off as a dare-devil and a tomboy, that under all of that, there is a mare longing to be loved and treated right.
Well, before I go, I have some more Rainbow Dash art to share with you. Thanks as always for your support! Take care!
- Jaydex
I love her "Come Hither" eyes in this pic!
To quote Sweetie Belle in this one - "I really like her mane!" Plus, Rainbow looks so beautiful, even though there is a strong anger in her eyes.
This one is titled - "Can I Sleep With You Tonight?"
Man, I will never know how you are able to pump such huge amounts of words
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I sometimes wonder the same thing myself.
997825 Haha, you truly are a wonder sometimes, Mr. J
Yay! I can't wait for this fanfic! I know it's going to be so good :)
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I sure hope it will be! =D
I am definitely checking this story out once you are done with it!
It all sounds really cool Jaydex! I had a feeling you would be updating a new blog, and here you are! Adding some new back-story to "you" does sound like a good idea, given that it's natural to be curious on who this person is that could have tamed someone like Rainbow Dash
. I suppose that goes for any "you"....you want to know as much about their relationship as possible, instead of just rushing to the loving, as much as we want to see that 
Pet! Dashie... :)
Flat out on the bed within her cloud house, utterly insensate and more relaxed than she'd ever felt in her life, Rainbow Dash groaned softly as her human struck at her again and again, and again with the one weapon she had no defense against: his hands. His hands... oh, Faust his hands! He wielded them so effectively; every comb through her mane, every scratch behind her ears, every touch upon her wings, body and even her hooves - the parts of her body she usually hated having others touch - was a crippling blow to her pride, her ego, her tom-colt machismo... and she loved it! When she was home, here in her room with her human, the facade she wore - 'The Rainbow Dash' - could be set aside; she could let her mane down so to speak. Gentle grooming, massages, preening, hooficures... her human could do it all and she would shamelessly allow him to do it all. Just then, a stuttering gasp escaped her as those wondrous fingers worked a feather from her wings which had been bothering her for weeks on end... and then he pressed gently against that spot between her wings and she whimpered in ecstasy before he moved on, working to massage away tension in places she didn't even know she had. "Th... Thks..." she murmured - or, at least she thought she did. She couldn't get her tongue to work properly, so insensate with pleasure was she. "Don't mention it, Dashie..." her beloved murmured. "Sometimes you do too much; you're not Supermare, you know..."
The price for heaven was to act like a pet for him sometimes, and again, she did it gladly for him. Truthfully, during those times there was always the battle - 'Rainbow Dash the Tomcolt' would not submit easily - but in the end 'Dashie' always won. Those damn hands of his... mmh... oh they helped... by Faust they helped! Dashie adored being dressed to kill in the latest fashions; Dashie adored being touched, stroked, and hugged as much as possible; Dashie loved to be held and cuddled, loved playing simple, non-competitive games, loved to go for 'walkies' in her riding tack and utterly adored being fed simple things from his hand, or nosing into his coat pocket for a treat. Dashie didn't have to be strong for her human; she could be the weakest mare imaginable and her human would always adore her. She knew, however, that she couldn't keep doing this in secret forever. She would have to reveal this secret side of herself to her friends one day; they already knew she was happier and far less abrasive; they just didn't know why. But what would they think should she tell them about... about this? Her reputation would be ruined! 'Shut up! Shut upShut upShut upShut up...' ... And then all thought was lost as her human rubbed and massaged along her sides just so... Rainbow Dash would tell her friends about Dashie... one day. But not today.
(There's the Rainbow Dash that we know - who would never on her life agree to being a pet for anyone - and then there's 'Dashie', a foal/filly-like persona that began to develop when Rainbow Dash tried being a pet one day at her beloved's gentle suggestion. Rainbow Dash let go and at that moment - that utter release of control, that showing of implicit trust to allow another to assume total responsibility for her, to care for her completely - the alter, Dashie, was born; the more they acted as owner and pet the more Dashie grew, until above snip...)
Rainbow Dash fic by Jaydex is almost here?! FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRK!
Thanks for the pics... really good ones too.
Man that last pic of Rainbow Dash, I would say "Yes you can"
As I always say I look forward to the story
now then if only I can figure out how to make my stories better so I have reason to make them 
I do have a plan for a 2nd person story view involving either Sweetie Belle or Applebloom and sorry to bug you about this I just kinda need to "say" it and get it off my chest 
Omigoshomigoshomigosh this is soo aweeesome
Can't wait for your RD story
Love the pics. to
Haven't read the story, but I already know that it will be AWESOME.
I can hardly wait.
I see I'll probably have to include this along with Brighten and Total Eclipse as the fics of yours to get finished.
(You x Chrysalis...)
The carapace of a changeling isn't hard and cold. You know that; the fact that you're sleeping in your bed with the Queen of the race - and that her carapace feels like warm, soft leather - proves it, beyond a shadow of a doubt. You've got a hand over her ponylike barrel and she's snuggling up into your touch because she honestly can't get enough. A chuckle escapes you as you remember the first time you touched her. It was totally by accident; you and she were passing each other as you both went through the hallway of your small Ponyville cottage; you to work on what would eventually be the basement and storage room of your home and she outside. It was an accidental brush, the softest touch of human hand to alien carapace, and she'd shrieked and jumped as if shocked by a live wire, because she'd never experienced anything like it before. Insectoid as they were, changelings as a whole weren't big on physical contact, thus your touch - the sensations it had generated within her nerves - had startled her. After analyzing the sensations she'd felt, a few days later, she'd asked you to touch her again, and so you had. Eventually, she'd grown to adore your touch and had turned into a real cuddle-bug, always nosing her way under an arm or looking to cuddle when the days were rough. And rough they had been at that start of it all.
Changelings feeding on love is true but the way they do it - sucking it out like some kind of vampire - is all horse shit; it's all stories made up by those whom would demonize your beloved and what's left of her race. The truth is, Changelings don't work like that since love isn't a tangible thing; instead they feed off the psionic energy generated by the emotion, drawing it in from the background; ergo the more sentient beings there are wherever a Changeling resides the more powerful they'll be able to get. You... you utterly adore your beloved Chrysalis and thus, powerful indeed she has become. She wasn't the one who'd impersonated Cadance and attacked the wedding; that had been a usurper of the throne; one drone who'd glutted on stored love to become powerful than had gathered an army of like-minded fools. Truth is, poor Chrysalis hadn't even been able to enter the city; one look at her appearance had branded her a demon in the eyes of the Canterlot Elite and she hadn't even been able to get near the Royal Palace, let alone beseech the Princesses for aid. The Badlands of Equestria - where she and her hive had lived - were a blighted desert; nothing lived there and thus there was no love. Thousands of her beloved people were dying every day but that blasted land was the only place the Changelings might call home; the hideous appearance of her people gained them niether sanctuary nor friends in other lands; thus poor Chrysalis had made a final attempt to come to Equestria and beg for aid.
And she had failed. It was shortly after you'd taken her in... that she felt the last of her kin die. She'd been utterly insensate for days, bumping into walls, eyes glazed over, unable to comprehend a thing; it was as if she'd suffered a crippling stroke. Your touch had brought her out of it, but then she'd attacked you, screaming and cursing and fighting and blaming. You understood. Oh, Faust, you understood and your heart wrenched within your chest as you realized she wasn't blaming and hurting you; she was doing it to herself. All you could do was be there for her, though the long sleepless nights, the suffering and tears, the times when she'd stay up night and day calling, calling, calling for any of her hive whom might hear her alien crooning-clicking-warbling. All for naught; in the end she'd given up, crawling into your shared bed and weeping softly, the sound of her two-toned cries hurting and haunting you to this day. You'd held her close, vowing to do what you could for her... and you did.
*Travel to Badlands w Chryssie and end up finding about 5-10 still living changelings; you get em back and Chryssie makes a lil hive in your basement where it's comfy and warm!*
999136 Whoa...nice...I mean awesome.
its warm and CUTE
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So a new approach for really spicing up
That,I can hold up my wait.
Well,Jay no bits forShy and me
You know Bits Block
This update here... it is pleasing me.
I'll be having a hell of a weekend.
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And I'll be some ponies didn't think she could be anything other than shy. 
WHAT?! A bits block, even with her giving you that sultry stare? Aww man, I don't think I could ignore Fluttershy if she kept looking at me like that.
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I just hope you'll like it!
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At least you'll have plenty to read.
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I sure hope it lives up to your expectations!
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Classic Rainbow Dash line! Awww yeah!
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I trust since Sweetie Belle or Apple Bloom will be the star of your fic that this will be an Everyone rated story.
That's okay, get it off your chest.
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That's what I said when I commented on the post of that pic on Deviant Art.
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You're welcome! Glad you enjoyed the pics and that you're so looking forward to it! Rainbow is really growing on me. I can hardly wait to get back to work on the story this evening.
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Love it! Pet Dashie, that's going in the folder!
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But yeah, I hope I do her character justice, including the areas of her character that we've never seen out in the open before. Man, no matter how I word that, it still sounds iffy. 
Oh well. Time for bed, I think. Then later this evening, back to it. Oooh I can't wait! 
Let's just say, if you can impress Rainbow Dash, you at least can get your hoof in the door.
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I hope you'll like it. Though I'm confident that Rainbow is going to help pull off sensual with flying colors, just like the colors in her mane.
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I don't know about this weekend. Hopefully I can finish the rough draft this weekend. But I'm only on the first love scene. I still have the core of the story to write and then the conclusion, which will entail a second love scene.
999328 Well it kinda will have either teenage version of then or adult versions I actaully made a thread last night in the group 2nd person stories about it and so far I'm confident I can do a great job writing it
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This short is going into the folder too. It certainly is food for thought and has my wheels spinning from my own ideas, stirred by your brief but warming tale! 
Even got me in the feels, like they usually do. 
Another master piece, and not completely unlike the story I have planned for my human x Chrysalis story. But I will be most likely making that one a 3rd person, so I can properly develop Chryssie's character.
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Well then, keep me posted! I'd enjoy reading it, especially if Sweetie Belle is the star! She's such a cutie!
999334Oh, sorry. I didn't mention that I haven't finished reading your other two stories. And I'm going to the country side for the weekend. That means, I'll have plenty of time to read them and many more.
Also... I like where it's going.
999328 Your the best love story writer I know.
Your the only love story writer I know.
999328 Naturally.
(Continuing 'Celestia tells Luna about being a pet'...)
After their brief tussle upon the office floor, Celestia and Luna crashed on specially designed cushions and then inquisitively, the Lunar Diarch asked, "Aside from all that, sister... what else do you do when you're a pet for Daniel?"
Princess Celestia blink-blinked and then - a blush suffusing her features - she softly whispered, "S-Sometimes... Sometimes he... rides me..."
At this soft, hesitant admission, Luna goggled her jaw dropping, "Ruh..." she choked, swallowing thickly, "Ruh... Ruh... Ruh..."
Celestia giggled, covering her mouth with a hoof, as she replied, "Yes, dear sister, he rides me..."
"Ruh... Ruh... Ruh..."
"... Yes, sometimes in the way you're thinking... mmh..."
"Ruh... Ruh... Ruh..."
"... But mostly, he rides upon my back..."
At this, Luna snapped out of her shock. "You let him ride you... like a... like a...?" she stuttered.
"Yes" Celestia replied, giggling again, "like a domestic pony from his world. We have a special set of traditional riding tack that we had custom-made just for me. He puts it on me oh-so-slowly, and then we'll canter about the palace, or the fields outside. It's..." here she trailed off, before starting again, her eyes alight with memory. "It's a release Lulu; the giving of control totally over to another being, having to trust that being to not abuse you; the knowledge that I can just let go - be a simple pony - and know that Daniel will care for me utterly and never hurt or abuse me in any way... it," she panted softly, licking her lips, relishing the thought, "it's... intoxicating, Lulu!" Lost in memory - unaware of her sister for the moment - she continued. "Sometimes... it would be so easy Lulu, to give it all up and become a pet pony forever. No more worries... no more responsibilities... Just the saddle upon my back, the wind in my mane as Daniel rides me... and then the warm bath at the end of the day followed by a rubdown and then... th-then... mmh..."
As Luna watched, half in awe, half in wonder, Celestia - overcome by some ancient pony instinct - stepped towards Luna 'till she was nose-to-nose with her beloved sister and then made a sound, deep and primal; she blew through her nose, "Are you a friend?" In the spur of the moment - not really knowing what she was doing, yet beckoned to do so anyway - Luna returned the blow, "I am your friend/sibling." At this, Celestia nickered quietly and nuzzled her beloved sister's coat; Luna did the same and then - guided by the old, old instincts, the two sisters nuzzle-nuzzled each other and began to groom...
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Another adorable short. A very interesting concept. After all her years of ruling, I don't doubt that Celestia would like to live a more care-free life. It's what I'm hoping to portray in "You Brighten My Day".
And Luna's response to Daniel riding her. Priceless. But Luna shouldn't have too much to be jelly about. David is more than a devoted lover to her. Maybe he doesn't do the pet role-play with her, but he treats her oh so tenderly, and still at times finds himself noticing that she likes the types of attention ponies like on Earth. (Just a little bonus preview of what's to come.)
The reason I adore writing snippets about the MLP ponies as pets so much is not just because it's adorable, but because I love the idea of sharing our world with a race like them, a symbiotic/partner race to stand by and with us; that we shouldn't and will never be alone again.
.... And in my vision I see a world wherein My Little Pony was taken to the best of ends, wherein Princesses Celestia and Luna work in tandem with our governments to build a better world, wherein famine, war and hunger are negated through harmony, friendship, love, joy, and magic.
Wherein the great magi-reactors looming over every city provide free shared clean, green energy; where the Great Herds of Earth Ponies can be heard singing a rousing song as they along with human gardners tend the Everfields where the 'green' foods are grown for all. Even meat when it can be cloned again and again...
Unto the heavens from the ground, and within the skies can be seen mighty Earthship and Cloud Cities, solar and magically empowered glass, stone, steel, cloud and crystalline buildings wherein humans live with each other and their pony 'pets' or lifemates. Looking through a window to the clear skies you'll see pegasi and griffin couriers delivering mail and packages along with the regular Earth Pony and human Postman even as Unicorns work with human builders to help reinforce and ward structures against natural disasters.
Dragon Bankers and Jewelers can be found, too, along with changelings working at your local hospital or nursing home, giving and receiving love to and from those whom need it most. All are happy and free; you might even catch a look into the multicultural schools; seeing pony foals enraptured by human stories, or human children entranced by the myths of Equestria told by ponies who lived them.
And no, children, you know you can't have tomorrow off work due to snow because your local Weather Pegasi have scheduled clear skies; you can see pegasi foals zipping by 'chasing' the Earth Ponies and Unicorns going to work in their maglev cars until a griffin police officer chides them again for doing something so silly. ... You can see a griffin craning his neck contentedly within a massage parlour as humans preen and align his feathers; he turns to look dumbly at the insensate dragon beside him who is getting his cracked hide oiled. Further down you'll see humans working on ponies there and ponies working on humans with hooves or magic.
Be sure to check out the upcoming Hoofball, Cloud Sculpting, and Cricket Tournaments, too with mixed teams and watch the night skies as well; this Hearts-Hooves-and Valentine's Day Luna's got something extra special planned for interracial couples; check out the local cinemas, too, where - for the first time - the legendary duo of Indiana Jones and Daring Do team up for a film of high adventure and hoof-biting action!
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(Oh, I could go on and on....)
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No wonder you're one of my followers and like my stories. It seems we have the same dream or at least the same love of Humans bonding with the Equestrians. What a wonderful world you envision. I too would find great joy in such a world.
I can't explain it completely, but there is just something beyond magical about these ponies. They make me happier than I've ever felt. Even during my roughest, most frustratingly enraging nights at work, I don't stay angry for too long. My mind calms, I think of them, and before long I forget why I was mad. My job still bites, but they make it bearable.
And after a long hard day at work, I so enjoy coming home to see my plush ponies or smaller figures sitting on my computer desk. Their smiling faces and bright eyes, really brighten my day.
I hope I can continue to write stories that help you feel almost like you're in this world of yours or if nothing else, the world of Equestria.
Thank you so much for sharing all of these wonderful pony shorts with me. I greatly appreciate it!
1001006
My gosh, that sounds like heaven on Earth, or Equestria
My goodness, what a wonderful world that would be
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... only a small part of such a world. Like any world it wouldn't be constant happiness and harmony all the time, but beneath this utopia there wouldn't be any dark shadows (unless it's Luna scaring the children on Nightmare Night!); what you'd see is what you'd utterly get. Like anything it wouldn't be a 'perfect' world. But it'd be a damn sight better than the one we live in now.
There's always the fear, however, of globalization; that is, our tech and culture gradually subsuming/overtaking that of Equestria. There would need to be firm boundaries set to avoid something like that. Celestia would have to put a hoof down at some point during the early years and say, "Right. We can have human tech/food/clothes/customs, etc. up to a point but then that's enough!" But then... if Celestia restricts human stuff you'd probably have pony smugglers getting it in anyway; likewise if Equestrian goods or whatever were restricted human and pony bootleggers would get them to you...
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As he delicately ran a hoof over the shining paintwork of the Gardner Douglas Cobra replica, the pony Speed Demon whistled in awe. "Damn, man... how the bucking hell did you get something like this here? I thought Celestia restricted these..."
As he carefully made some final adjustments to the engine, Grease Monkey turned to his human assistant and grinned. Then, returning his attention to Speed Demon, the mechanic-pony answered, "Me and my bud here, we smuggled it over, one piece at a time. Also helps if you classify it as a 'cultural artifact', or part of your house... heh-heh... Anyway, what you think, man...? She's fully serviced, loud, and has loads of power fo' loads of fun at the track. She's been modded a lil' fo' ponies of course; you can see that by the bigger driver and passenger seats. Got a hoof-conversion kit out the back if you're interested..."
Speed Demon - whom could barely stop himself from drooling at the thought of owning this beast - gave a shaky nod of his head as he replied, "You bet your greasy mane I'm interested! How much?"
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(True crime - drugs, rape, murder, kid/foal-napping, etc) would be very, very low on my world; ponies and enlightened humans take a very dim view of that and it isn't done anymore; the only 'crime' here would be the bootlegging/importing of 'restricted' or 'illegal' human and pony goods, like this for instance...
"I can't always be strong..." Celestia said through her tears. Holding her as she wept softly, Daniel nodded into her mane as he replied, "Of course you can't; that's why - when the days get rough - you've got to just let go. Rely on others; depend on others. When you can't be strong, love, we'll be strong for you."
(After ruling for so long, methinks Celestia would have real trouble "letting go" so to speak; perhaps this could be brought up in your story with a scene where poor Celly is clearly overworking herself, or not allowing Luna to help and she and Daniel have a very emotional argument about it; she ends up in tears in his arms and confesses this - that she has trouble stepping back and relying upon others...)
999328 The "sultry stare" I or me in the bit wouldn't even notice it at all, really I'm that naive to see that.
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I'm already thinking of doing something of a similar nature. It's one of the many aspects about Celestia I want to address. If you remember from chapter 5 of my story this line:
I've already got her reluctant about bothering others, which in itself is a sign that she doesn't want to ask for help. Yet she does open up to Daniel about the woe she feels at having no one to turn to for comfort. I will certainly be addressing this further. And thank you for an inspirational blurb to get me thinking more on this! After my Dashie story, I'll be working on chapter 7 of YBMD.
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.....You really really should consider writing a fic about such a world: you seem to love this world-building you have going on, and maybe only because it seems so utopian, I certainly like the sound of it. By all means, keep going
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I love the idea of relatively harmless 'bootlegging/pirating' of goods being the only crime in this world...now what about other kinds of goods? Like guns and weaponry?
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Guns and other weapons would be heavily restricted for military use only and even then sparingly if at all. The uni-corps has mages with all the human military now; don't need to actually kill someone when you can heavy-tranq them and then deal with them fairly later. Hunting of animals is utterly forbidden! DO NOT EVER try to hunt. You will make Animal Warden Fluttershy angry. You won't like her when she's angry...
Crimes. If you do it you will aid the one you wronged. Steal bits and the amount of money you stole will be docked from your pay, or you'll work and your pay for the amount you stole will be given to whomever you wronged. Steal an item; you will buy a replacement for what you stole. If it's a big item, or some other crime... Be prepared to become a servant/butler/gardener/worker for the one you wronged, for the rest of your life if that's what it takes. This is to teach "this is wrong" and to discourage crime. Never to humiliate or shame a criminal. Who knows... you might just end up making a friend, or becoming part of a family. Remember the words from the Golden Record: "To teach if we are called upon..."
For the worst, of worst, of worst crimes... (a tiny bit of TCB here, sorry) the Princesses can permanently turn a human into a pony foal to be "raised again" and given the ultimate second chance; likewise a Pony Criminal can be permanently made human. But as I stated, that's only for the absolutely irredeemable crimes; when there's no other choice, and it's not something done lightly, there's no happiness or glee; there's much heartache and emotion for all involved...
Heavy are the Heads that bear the crowns...
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Frankly, if the worst punishment is rebirth, that sounds more then lenient....I'm curious if you'd still have your memories of your 'past life', though I guess the answer is yes - after all, it's not like it's time-travel....your body is simply transformed into a child, and you have no choice but to live out a new life as a human or a pony, so essentially the person you were before, is dead. If you didn't carry over the memories of your 'past life', it would be difficult for you to learn from your mistakes...though perhaps it's better that you don't remember, and the slate is wiped clean.
I've honestly never ever read a single "The Conversion Bureau" fic before...that's one collection of fics that I honestly just never got into thus far, and I honestly know absolutely nothing about it other then the name, and what I can assume from, well, almost nothing
. Yes my words sound really silly: questions however, like the type I posed above about memory, are undoubtedly brought in in TCB fics all the time. Hmmm, I'm suddenly curious about reading a few 
1006442 I ninja edited that comment whilst you were posting this...
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I certainly like the idea of successful rehabilitation programs....prisons are antiquated, and criminals are instead made to learn and repay their debt: they are recognized as the sentient beings they are, and are given every chance they deserve to have a happier life....even something as big as 'rebirth' is done for the sake of love, and wanting the criminal to have another chance a better life and not necessarily out of pure spite and punishment - but out of wanting for them to have a chance of living a life not out of crime, even if it means the person has to start from the very beginning.
Do want.