Cool Story Idea · 3:36am Jan 14th, 2013
Here is a neat idea I came up with while bored. Tell me what you think and if you would prefer this over that sci-fi story.
The Handgun.
Premise- The story takes place from the point of view of a handgun. The gun is a simple Colt 1911A1. It will follow this gun as it tells it story and trek through Equestria with its owner. It will show some sort of will and will talk with its owner. The idea is that it is sentient in a way. It will also control the owner to benefit its own ends. As soon as a person picks it up, it controls them.
Here is a bit of an opener I thought of:
Cold. Cold is always permeating this crate. It is rather nice though. Beat the heat from a while back. The inside of this crate is rather dull though. I always liked to think I was high class though, not the rift-raff of those shout-y, vulgar AKs that you constantly see. They always liked to hog the show. But where are my manners? I'm Colt M1911A1, Serial number B199293. You can just call me Colt though. Seems easier. I am really just waiting for the next idiot to pick me up.
I'm guessing that you are wondering why I can speak. That is actually a rather strange question, really. Well, not the strange in the fact you are asking seeing as that is a legit question but the strange in the fact I am sentient. My name used to be Zack Delco. I became trapped in this... gun due to my own greed really. This guy... well, unicorn anyway loaned me some money a while back. Not a lot but a nice amount. I owned a gun shop in the day. In Atlanta I think. My business was starting to go under and no bank was willing to give me a loan. That is when a unicorn by the name Fat Loan came a long. Offered me the cash and, of course, I was dumb enough to take it.
Needless to say, things didn't go so well. He came into my store with a couple of big bouncer types and started pushing me around. I panicked and grabbed my gun. Bastard took the gun from my hands with his magic and the two bouncer-types grabbed me. He came up and threatened me, of course. I honestly think it was because he was lacking in the undercarriage if you know what I mean. After making his balls feel big enough, he sent my brains against the wall. I don't remember much until I woke up. All I could see was the grooves like you see in a rifle barrel and what looked like light at the end of a tunnel. Little did I know, I was looking down the barrel of the gun I now was like a eye. Weird, but fate has a way of getting weird when mixed with unicorn magic.
It seemed like an eternity later, a cop came along and picked me up. I then possessed the poor bastard without knowing it. I was honestly confused. I took over his senses and such. Another cop asked if I was ok and I just played it off. What would I do? I stumbled over into a bathroom like the night of my 21st birthday and looked in the mirror. I was a fucking cop! I couldn't believe it. I looked down at the gun that was in my hands, the murder weapon if you will. I was beyond confused. It kinda reminded me of waking up somewhere you had never been before. Maybe like waking up with amnesia I'm not really sure. I walked myself around town for a while before finding my way towards a store that specialized in magic. Maybe I could get a better answer there? It was better that nothing.
I made my way in and talked to a Zebra. You know the ones. Not the ones from Africa, mind you, the Equestrian ones. told me about how I was know a 'spirit artifact' or something. I know possessed the gun. The cop was my host body until I found another or just could sit dormant in the gun till I found another host. Great. I was essentially a fucking parasite. No better than a tapeworm, really.
Well, that is my story so far. I can feel the crate coming to a stop. Let's just hope some idiot picks me up.
Truly original, go for it. It seems real nice to see how a gun would understand a situation.
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Well, it isn't so much the gun as the 'spirit' aka Zack. Just saying. Got bored and thought this up.
709831 same difference, if you can't do the sci-fi, do this instead. Back-ups for everything except women and lives.
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Anyway, what do you think of the style? I tried to write this more from the mind of the character than the halfass job I did in DD. Also, what are some tags you'd like to see?
709840 I can clearly see both an AU and a human tag for this, so there's that. I can possibly see a dark tag for those days when the gun... make you kill others. Maybe the soul can give a snarky remark here or there, that's a bit of comedy. And I guess that's it.
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Alright. So far I can see a dark, human, and alternate universe tag. Not sure what else to add or what characters to. So far all I know is that it is going to be a revenge tale for the most part. A better title is in order as well.
709854 How about... 'Down the Barrel' as a title? After, the dialogue said that the spirit looks through the barrel of the Colt M1911A1.
As for characters, let others handle it for you, I've given all I can think of.
Here's a picture of a golden Colt for ya...
airsoft.tiger111hk.com/images/productimg/we/pistol/WET-1911A1-GOLD-BR-GRIP1.jpg
Just because. Will wait for the next set of stories.