6th May. Random thoughts, music and pony. · 2:56am May 6th
Currently feeling:
Artist
Over-explaining
This has to be the most common writing issue when describing actions.
He ignores me and, with his other hoof, reaches for the handle and turns.
It's not wrong, but what on earth else is going to happen when someone reaches for a door handle? It can be inferred that he wanted to open it by turning. Also, in action scenes like this - extra words kill the tension.
Gonna have to sleep.
I really thought I had the fic this time.
What could have stopped me publishing
*looks down*
Oooh... yeah
So I'm still about as focused as an 14 year old whose just discovered her first online pony journal 
'Unnecessary Qualifiers'
Qualifiers tend to limit a thing eg
Eventually I begin to realise that I’m not dying
Both "eventually" and "begin to" here emphasise that the subject did not immediately think they were going to survive, thus 'qualifying' 'realisation'. Only one is needed. 'That' is also unnecessary. I also missed a comma, because writing are hard.
Eventually, I realise I’m not dying.
so much cleaner
Another thing to be cautious with, when writing is unnecessary determiners, like the possessive determiner "My"
"I head for the exit but, scrabbling with my slippery hooves"
It's not the end of the world, but 'my' only slows this down, and clearly it's an action scene, so the sentences should be sharp and fast.
I give up
Writing is too hard
All writing, not just fics.
This is the last of 'the writing' I shall ever do
Subsequently, I will communicate orally only
And I won't even use words
As words are now my enemy
I will grunt and hoot
And then people will lock me up in a zoo, because they will think I am an ape
And then the zoo will close, because all the reviews are negative because I am a terrible ape
And then the last person who fed me will die
And I won't even be able to say thank you
And then...
Wait. Why the hay are you still reading this?
Maybe if I acted like a normal human being people would keep talking after I post in Discords
Oh, hey there needy bitch voice. How are you today?
Everyone hates me.
Hah, you big silly. Nobody even knows who you are!
What?
Or cares!
What!?
Yep, it's true.
Well, that's terrible. I mean I have so much to offer...
Oh yeah? Like what.
Just so much stuff about me, y'know. All the 'me'.
Do, you like needy bitches, though?
Ew, other people.
Precisely. Until you learn to love other people, they won't love you!
People won't love me? That's terrible.
Hah! You are friggin hopeless.
(just to clarify. Needy bitch voice is my name for an internal monologue that goes "Why hasn't X replied? Why hasn't Y replied? Why haven't they commented? Why, why, why....)
Writing are hard. Har har har
Editing are very boring. Bar bar bar
I wanna publish this fic...
But I suck and can't write 
WARNING MILD PROFANITY
Yay for friends!
But now I have a question: how to not to be a needy bitch
Me in the middle of finalising a fic: woah that story would be perfect to review!
Hoof meet face.
guys, I think I am actually addicted to Ethans' music D:
I thought to myself now:
"Wait, why do I feel sad?"
"Oh! That music isn't playing."
So I put it on and felt better.
That is addiction.
Unlike most addicting things, though, I can happily recommend it.
WARNING: SUDDEN PROFANITY
Hey there. Just me, abrony, pretending to be a writer while omitting the subject of a sentence like a 3 year old.
"Say after me toddler Abrony: 'Ih' and 'Tuh'. 'It!'"
"Gah?"
"No. 'Ih' and 'Tuh'."
"Buh."
"No. 'Ih' and 'Tuh'."
"Wuh?"
"Oh, nevermind. Some day you'll learn."
30 years pass
"FUCKING PUT 'IT' IN THE SENTENCES, YOU FUCKING FUCK!"
I like writing. It means I can have a pony wedding.
I have not read enough fan-fictions about pony weddings!
Me about to post a spoiler.
Y'know what, for once I will restrain myself.
Read my bebe when it comes out!
Grinding my teeth so as not to cry. Crying is weird.
(Nothing serious. Just writing sad stuff )
GUYS!
WRITING PONY TO ETHAN TOAVS' MUSIC IS SO FUN!
"Don't make me feel those horrible words!" ~ psyche
"Silence, slave, the fic must be published." ~ brain
Fluffin' brains. Fleshy tyrants!
Wait, who is writing D:
A common word I have to edit out in my writing are unnecessary adverbs that specify time like "now" eg
He is panting more and more now.
It is tempting to highlight the passage of time like this when there are developments in the verb - eg in that case his panting was increasing (no need to spoiler this hopefully), but actually the 'now' is inferred, and adding it after just disrupts the flow of the text, I think.
So beware 'now', when used as an adverb of time.
WARNING NSFW REFERENCES AND VERY SLIGHT SPOILERS FOR A STILL UNPUBLISHED STORY
It's funny the details, some big, some small that change at the editing stage.
In the naughty story I'm writing, I hadn't described the characters' bodies, and who cares about saucy stuff happening to characters that aren't described. So I worked that in.
But a more striking change was that the narrative accidentally made it look as if my feminised char disregarded their best friend, meaning there was no pay-off from the start, where they are portrayed for the first chaps as very close. That was just an oversight - it wasn't my char's fault, it was my fault, because I'd forgotten about her (sorry Jazz!). So I wrote that back in. Just a couple of thoughts about the friend. So much better, I think.
Another minor thing, is that describing sauciness with... um horsey chars... needs a decision on how much horse. My answer, for me, is always no horse. Firstly, because the mechanics of sauce are boring at the best of times. Secondly, because how do you relate to a person with, say, a tail? Have you ever been intimate with such a person (don't answer that). So talking about him or her flicking their tail, somehow diminishes the impact. But my char has a tail... so the reference to it becomes analogous to a person wearing a tail. You can't move it, but you can angle your butt... and you get the picture. Feeling the need to alter that description for the sauce was new.
There's also all the boring grammar errors, and sequencing errors. Fortunately, the latter weren't too horrible, even though I wrote this one in a rush. Doing that is a dull as for any editing work.
WARNING NSFW
YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED!
YOU KNOW I'M GONNA TALK ABOUT A GROSS THING.
JUST SO YOU KNOW
OK
WELL
HERE GOES
YOU COULD JUST GO AND WATCH SOME NORMAL PONY, YOU KNOW
LISTEN TO MUSIC
YOU WANT TO SEE GROSS PONY?
WELL ACTUALLY IT'S NOT NECESSARILY 'GROSS'
JUST SOMETHING PEOPLE DO
OK, YOU MUST BE SERIOUS IF YOU'RE STILL READING, SO HERE!
Taking it in my hoof, I lift the wonderful, yet strange, taut, tumescent thing gently to my face, smelling its musk and feeling its length, which up-close, is considerable. Hardsoft, like a cucumber, sensitive and yet firm and powerful.
AMMA TALKIN' 'BOUT HIS DICK
Yup, still writing the clop editing these is so wild. You have to describe and yet not describe the sauce. It's definitely the toughest bit to write. And also writing it... can be a lil distracting
I 
this fandom
PLACE APES
The Hollywood duckspeak is doubleplusgood today. Great bellyfeel. A+++
(Reference to newspeak in George Orwell's 1984.
While known for political commentary, what he said about language is even better!)
OK, now I am converting every time someone says Bruh, to Brush
EVEN BETTER
When a pony is cutely angry at brushing, I will call their response "Bruhsh"
Bruhsh
Artist
WARNING NSFW
Writing about kissing a guy.
Can't think of anything else to say
Edit: hmm is 'vulnerable intimacy' tautologous?
mebbe semi-tautologous.
you would inevitably be exposed to something that is close?
hmm
might cut it in subsequent edits
ALSO:
"Writing about kissing a guy...."
sentences starts with "Rather than kiss, I brush..."
Bruh
