Electro Swing Editing Progress Report 2: Thank Celestia It's Getting Easier!

Chapters Revisited: 10/61 Changes: Chapters 4 and 5 Substantial rewrites.
Chapters 6 - 10, Mostly cleaning up wording.
It seems we're through the worst of it.

Whew. Been working at a quick pace this week, trying to squeeze in editing anytime I can when I'm not exhausted. Trying to get this done as fast and accurately as I can, but it's still a rather tall order. Thankfully I'm closing in on the point that I can more or less just read and stop when I hit a snag rather than going over every single frikin paragraph.

I'm happy that I'm 1/6th of the way there number-wise, but my chapter lengths exploded later because I stopped trying to hold myself to a stricter 5K word limit. I still aimed for at least 4K words a chapter, but they all pretty much ballooned after chapter 32. Not many later chapters that are under 6K words. Fortunately, post 32 was where I'd pretty much hit my stride in writing, so I don't think those will change much at all. Anyway, onto the summary of changes.

Major Changes:

1. Fixed Athena's introduction description. She still had the described appearance of a normal minotaur before I committed to giving her the Undertale Goat-Minotaur subspecies. It's fan fiction, so why not?
2. Fixed various instances of Vinyl's nickname being spelled Vi. The correct pronunciation is like the word "vie" (vʌɪ).
3. Rewrote any internal thoughts as descriptions. Italics already does enough heavy lifting in the story later on, so best to avoid them.
4. Fixed a few out-of-character moments for Fancy and Athena.
5. Lots and lots and lots of simplifying. Early on, I had a habit of making lots of conjuction sentences with "(phrase), and/but (phrase)" structure trying to avoid simple sentences. I had the opposite problem of repetitive sentence structure trying to keep the wording interesting.
6. Probably plenty more, but I've checked 7 chapters in the span of 7 days.

See you in the next blog,
- Rego