Tada! · 1:23am Nov 27th, 2023
Chapter 2 of To Bellenast was a pile of garbage.
So I completely rewrote it from scratch. 
It’s much shorter now, it has better pacing, better characterization for everyone involved, less pointless exposition, less clumsy narration, and a couple pieces of foreshadowing for things later in the fic, which were present in the original draft, but which I failed to execute properly.
Perhaps most importantly of all, it now portrays Crystal in a manner that is vastly more consistent with her character as it has evolved to be in the rest of the story.
Go read it if you’re interested in seeing that part of the story again.
Maybe re-read Chapter 1 again beforehand; I’ve changed some things in that one to make it less horrendously clunky.
But don’t read Chapter 3 or 4 again, because e-fucking-gads, those chapters are atrocious. They’re next on the revision chopping block.
