Lots of proofreading still needed. But, still good. What's that armguard thing from?

You forgot that the magic absorbing sword is deadly for magic users to touch because unless you are its original owner only a person with no magic can touch it and not be drained dry.

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I'm was actually saving that part for a little later

Grammar mistakes all around... please proof read it at least once or twice before uploading. I love this story, but these mistakes almost made me shut down my pc and go read a book instead... ( DONT MAKE ME DO GOOD THINGS!)

Great story, can't wait for the next one!

“Yea, spill the bean Aj,” Pinkie popped up from behind Rainbow with Rarity next to her.

Bean's

“RAINBOW DASH THAT’S ENOUGH!” Fluttershy was no in Rainbow’s face. ‘Damn. That’s uber sweet and really hot. No bad thought.’ “It was just a sleep spell. I was just asleep for a few hours.”

Now in rainbow's face not no

“To answer your question Rainbow, Ah punched Asta cause Ah was upset and I blamed him cause Ah thought Shy was hurt,” Applejack interjected.

Ah doesn't need to be capitalized

“Honestly. I can to Rarity,” I stabbed the sword in the ground behind me. Crossing my arms I leaned up against the blade. “But the still doesn’t give them the right to kidnap me and try and take my sword,” I huffed. “ All they had to do was ask and I would’ve been more than happy comply.”

You need to use too instead of to.
And it should be try to take my sword.

So.... Rainbow punch him into a crater and he does nothing but a soldier follow orders and he goes all chuck norris ? Why ? Because Rainbow is female and he can’t hit females ? Or is it because she is an element of harmony and he pussys out ? I don’t mind him being a pacifist, but then don’t make exceptions to make him look cool, don’t pull the Woman can’t be touch even do they try to kill you shenanigans.

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it's because she's Fluttershy's friend and he does know who she is

From which anime or game does this equipment come from?

‘I call myself a wanderer because I never stayed in one place for longer than a month unless I had to. This is partially due to my work as a stunt man and also due me looking for any signs of my older brother. It’s one of the main reasons why my relationship with my parents was so strained. I refused to accept he was gone and wanted to find him. Even if he’d disappeared eight years ago. I also liked to go to the comic cons near me. Partially for fun partially cause my brother liked them and partially to look for clues about him. Oh, back to the guards.’

Oh his brother was displaced.

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Both of Asta's brothers are displaced. The story for his older brother is my first story and the story for his younger brother is my second newest one

This was so well written for the first couple chapters. Did the editor quit or something?

'I think I’m going to have to keep a lookout for you, Pink one,” I leaned away. ‘She scares me.’

'I think I’m going to have to keep a lookout for you, Pink one,” I leaned away. ‘She scares me.’

i fear no man but that thing it scares me

So one of his brothers is the FREAKING GOLDEN SAGE???

and the other brother?

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The other brother and youngest of the three is the Smiling Monster of the Everfree