* video game narrator voice* Story needs editing badly! In all seriousness, you have mixed several words up, one example is using "dawn armor" instead of the correct "DON armor. Dawn is a time of day, don is the action.

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This is only my second attempt at a story and I know I suck at grammar always have probably always will. I'm more than willing to accept help editing. Another thing this was a three to six-hour spur of the moment write.

9622425
Ah, I'll go a little easier on you then.

Quite a headscratcher considering this got front page.

While I found the story similar as the many starts, I really enjoyed the displacer. If you don't mind, can I use your merchant in my fiction as well? I usually ask permission to make similar or even take some merchants to a story focused in a friendship between a displaced character and his merchant.

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>Displaced
>Quite a headscratcher considering this got front page.

I think you just answered your own question.

9622615
No, I don't mind but He's not a Merchant but The Gambler. He plays any number of games with the Displaced. As he is a Gambit he main uses cardgames to trick the 'player' but any form of games with steaks are will work

9622647
Well, I can use something similar to that, It's because the lore I did was totally different from the usually displaced fictions, mine is a bit more focused on the Greek Culture and etc... But thanks for giving me permission, I will not use the same character, but it will be a similar one.

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THANKS FOR ASKING

9622629
Except not ALL Displaced story get frontpage, I think its more like it's views raise quickly because it's getting views from people who hate the displaced even though they have the choice to avoid reading it. Obviously this story has some grammar issues and it got frontpage despite that fact, thus why i'm scratching my head. You don't see any of my stories getting front page and all of them are Displaced.

9622669 I’m saying that the majority of Displaced fics get high views and ratings for the sole reason that they’re Displaced. Honestly, it’s quite astounding that more haven’t infected the featured page on a daily basis.

9622683
Except not all Displaced get highratings. For example, the two you've made that mock the cliche and bad side of the Displaced fanbase have gotten alot of dislikes and they're, of course, Displaced.

9622685 Surprisingly, the general masses of the Displaced fandom are able to detect sarcasm and subtextual hatred for the genre when they’re metaphorically curb-stomped into it. Who knew?

9622690
Honestly, all fanbases or a group get the same treatment, it doesn't matter how pure, even if its just porn and fetishes.

9622629
Full stop.

Crossover fics are generally popular, displaced fics are technically crossover, displaced fics are then, popular.

You cannot tell me you've never read a crossover fic, period. Whether it's from MLP or otherwise.

You also cannot tell me all crossover fics are bad. I can't name any really popular ones off the top of my head, but I know I've got plenty in my tracking that I personally enjoy and think are written well, and that's only in the MLP fandom.(Thought of one while I was writing the next part, Fallout Equestria is well written, enjoyed by a lot of people, and it's also a crossover fic)

And finally, if you don't like displaced fics just don't read them when they show up. I don't like mindless smut and intense fics like the fallout ones, and yet they ALSO get on the featured list often, and yet you don't see me commenting and downvoting every single one because I dislike smut and fallout fics. I just ignore them.

Dimensionally Mis[alced

Oops. Do believe you meant to put a p there and not a bracket

In truth I have never seen black clover or heard of it till a coworker of mine mentioned it a few weeks ago is it any good and where can I find it?

Not bad, but lots of grammar errors I see.

9622816
Yea my grammar suxs, but I more than willing to take advice

9622819
Probably a good idea to find people to do proofreading for ya. Some proofreaders wait till the chapter you submit is completed, whereas some others prefer access to the chapter as it is mid-creation.

Love the story. Never seen black clover I heard about it.

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thxs

This story remind of one fanfic where the human in it cosplays in power armor from fallout 4 with minigun in hand and intervenes is some pony-griffin war.

9623488
Sounds familiar, Can you link it?

It's this one of the stories that the main character get like almost every power you can think of

9655113
No, it's not. I don't plan on Asta getting I bunch of powers. In fact, I plan on keeping him how he is.

9623488
That sounds like an awesome story to read. What’s its name?

9622425
I recommend getting a google docs set up and use its spell checker functions, this was hard to read with all the errors. I use it for slowly going over my own chapters once I've finished them for major errors.

I'm going to continue reading in hopes the writing gets better, but I suggest going back over all your chapters and clean them up.

On the final night a week before the con, I was done and go thing that I ordered the contact and wig online months before. The only thing that I was missing was Asta’s Five Clover Grimore and his giant Demon-Slayer Sword and his smaller Demon-Dweller Sword. Asta was a contradiction in his world. His world was full of magic and magic wielders but he was the exception because he had no magic power at all. But he could use anti-magic. I always like the outcast or oddballs in this way.

I think you meant good thing not go thing

“Here you are Mon Ami,” He gave me the swords and the Grimoire. “And as promised everything else in the stall as well,” Before I could say anything everything I’d laid eyes on was gone. “But I’m afraid can’t give you a list at this time, So you’ll have to find out what goodies ya have after you wake up. Have a nice trip,” He then hit me over the head with his staff and everything went white. Everything was white, I felt as if I was falling. Everything was hot very hot then I hit something very very hard. I soon opened my eyes to find I was in a massive crater. My head was pounding as if someone had hit me with a metal stick. I rubbed the back of my head and felt a small lump and it stung when I touched. Then I noticed my wig wasn’t coming off it wasn’t even there. I then felt my clothes. They went the same material I’d used to make them, heck I didn’t even make them but they were still cool as all hell. I quickly looked around to see if I could find my phone to call the cop but it was out of sight out of mind, NOWHERE TO BE FOUND.

Halfway through second paragraph I think you mean they weren't not they went.

Okay, so right off the bat I can see a few problems technically that pop up a few times: ommission of words (usually the little ones, like "say" or "to") and homophone trouble. The various shades of "there" in particular seem to give you trouble. The general checklist for finding out which is proper goes like this:

1. Is it a place? Then it's there. "I'm going over there."
2. Does it belong to someone? Then it's their. "Their house is on fire."
3. Is it a person?/Can it be written as "they are"? Then its they're. "They're just watching."

Otherwise, not much to say so far. Reading on...

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Unfortunately my spell check was screwed up sometime ago and I can’t fix the there, their, and they’re problems. I do my best in trying to make the system work for me but this is only my second story I’ve written on my own burr it’s still phenomenal ly more successful than my first. Later chapters are a bet worse on the proofreading as my laptop is pretty much out of commission for most of the day except for three hours in the evening.

This night was somewhat unsettling. My stars were shining and my moon was where it should be but I could shake this feeling as if something had come from somewhere into this world. Some unknown but yet longing to make friends. That's when I saw my sister coming to me from down the garden path.

This is a red flag, let’s hope this fic doesn’t fall into cliche.
Can someone tell me in advance if this is a fic with a “Hero of harmony, knight of moral, overly naive, pure heart, knows no wrong, unnaturally pure protagonist”

You should fix your spelling

I wonder what other anime weapons did he get? I can imagine the list I'm going to make of all the references from each weapon/tool from that grimoire.

So... Please tell me your following along with the manga and such. You will add new things from Black Clover as the series goes on right??? Oh man I'm so tempted to try and write something like this...!

Ahh yes a good old displaced story,I haven't read one of these in a while.I hope it's a good one.

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You can find a good amount of it on funamation. In dub, it usually updates every Sunday.

Había decidido ir como Asta de Black Clover este año.

Autor-san, no se olvide que para hacer un buen cospley de baka asta, tienes que ser bien enano, porque si eres un Asta alto, entonces no puedes parecerte al verdadero Asta