The sky was bright orange as Lauren and Spike were in the garden; there were a few guards around to keep an eye on them. They scanned the garden and back to the two who were drawing away, all the while talking to each other.
“Have you ever had an imaginary friend?” Lauren asked.
Spike stopped drawing the third picture of Rarity to put a claw to his chin. “I think I have once, during the time when I learned how to organize Twilight’s huge book collection. For the life of me, I can’t remember what I called him but I do remember how I saw him.”
Lauren looked up, “What did he look like?”
“Well…” Spike thought for a moment after he put down his pencil. “He was really tall and red. I think I imagine him something like a pony and a gryphon. A Hippogriff, was it? It’s been a very long time so I don’t remember too much. Why'd you ask?”
“I was just thinking, where do imaginary friends go when they’re no longer wanted by the kids who made them?” she asked, returning her attention to her drawing for a moment.
“Beats me, where do you think?”
“Hmm…” Lauren stops drawing herself to think about this question. She looked up back to Spike, “Do you think that I don’t know, there’s like a… Heaven? No, that's not it... What’s another word for orphanage?”
“Foals home, an institute for unwanted kids, a foster home-”
“Yeah, that’s it! Is there a foster home for imaginary friends to go to?”
Spike gave her a confused look, “That’s a rather odd question. I don’t know really if one even exists.”
Lauren looked back up to a particular row of windows where the throne room is. Every now and then, she would catch a glimpse of a shadow or a face that would be looking down at them.
“What do you think they’re talking about?” Lauren asked.
“Probably something important,” Spike shrugged. “It’s kinda taking them longer than usual though, you’d think they might be out by now.”
“You’re telling me. Say, can I ask you something?”
“Go ahead.”
“What’s this place called again?”
“What you do ya mean?”
“This land, kingdom, place, what is it called?”
“Equestria,” Spike deadpanned.
“Huh,” Lauren tilted her head to the side. “That’s odd.”
“What?”
“You know, ever since I came here, I was wondering something... guess I might be wrong here.”
“What about?”
“This place, it somewhat reminds me of the show ‘My Little Pony’, except the longer I’m here, the less related to the show it is. Like in the show, the place where all the ponies live is called Ponyland.”
“Ponyland? Really?” Spike asked, raising an eyebrow.
“Yeah I know, it’s a stupid name I agree, but that’s what it was called in the show. It had Bright Valley with all the ponies, and Flutter Valley that’s home to those little ponies with butterfly wings.”
“It kinda sounds like the Breezies to me.”
“The what?”
“Uh, never mind. You know, your drawings aren't that bad,” he commented, pointing at her drawing.
“Eh, they’re okay I guess.”
There was a silence for a moment until Spike asks, “So… What do you want to do when you grow up?”
“Well… I want to make movies. The cartoon kind. I want to make movies that are kinda like what Disney used to do; I want to make movies for everyone to enjoy.”
Spike tilted his head, “What’s a cartoon?”
Lauren was taken aback at this, “You don’t know what a cartoon is?!”
“Never heard of it, what is it?” Spike said, shaking his head.
“Are you serious? A cartoon is like a drawing but it moves and talks and it tells a story. And they show it to you in movies or on T.V.”
Spike was giving her a weird look, “Okay then.” Just then, Spike’s stomach rumbled. “I’m a little hungry. Hey, I got an idea! You like donuts?”
“Yeah?”
“I know a good twenty-four seven donuts shop that’s not too far from here. I've got some bits on me, so how about we swing by over there real quick?”
“I don’t know. What if they come out asking for us?”
“I promise, we’ll be there and back in no time. It won’t take long at all.”
“Well…” Lauren thought for a moment; she was in the mood for a little snack. “Just real quick?”
“Yeah,” Spike said while getting up, “Let me grab some bits first then we'll go.”
_*_
Inside the throne room, the sounds of surprise, shock, panic, anger, agitation, confusion, and more panic rang inside the great room like the voice box of a badly played instrument. The noise continued until Luna silence them with a powerful, “BE STILL!!!”
The six ponies stopped, at least, for a moment. “She’s your mother and neither of you told me?!” Twilight shouted.
“Twilight, neither of us could have predicted, nor given a notice that she was to come back,” Celestia told her student.
“But ain't she a bit too young to be 'yer Ma?” Applejack asked.
“I confess,” Luna answered, “I didn't expect her to come here as young as she is. In fact, the last time we saw her, she was at a reasonable age. But somehow, she came here as a child. Even before she was at the age where she created this world.”
“But isn't there some sort of law of paradox or something to prevent such a thing from happening?” Rarity asked Twilight.
“I don’t know. To my knowledge, this has never happened before. At least, I don’t think it has.” Twilight’s mane sprang up a few cowlicks.
“Uh, question.” Rainbow raised a hoof in the air, “Does Lauren know that she made all of this or that you two are really her daughters?”
Celestia shook her head, “We ended up deciding against it. She’s too young and we fear it might send her into a panic.”
“I think I understood why Discord ran off,” Fluttershy said. “If this is her past self, and Discord might have given her the wrong impression, maybe…” She squeaked. “Oh no! W-What if we've given her the wrong impression? What if she doesn't like us at all so she might change us, or… or…” Fluttershy looked out the window that overlooked to the garden. “Um… Where’s Lauren and Spike?”
“WHAT?!” Both of the alicorn sisters screamed out in shock. Everypony within the castle no matter what they were doing had dropped to the floor to cover their ears. In the throne room, the six mares did the same while the stained glass windows vibrated. Quickly the sisters looked out the window to find that their mother and the baby dragon have vanished.
“WHERE IS SHE?! WHERE DID THEY GO!?” they both shouted in unison, adding several cracks to the windows.
Looks good. keep going!
Nice reference. Especially the Wilt one.
I love the story so far
5326407 I know the reference with the Foster Home for Imaginary friends. But what is this with the Red Hippogriff?
5326447 ...Red and tall.
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5326458 Now I get it. Thanks.
5326459 No problem!
That should be,
Saying they asked, is... well... this.
It makes it seem like they're not yelling, but asking in a calm voice. Just a little reminder note.
Foster's home for imaginary friends :nostalgia:
It's getting better and better! I was soooo right, this IS going to be one of the best stories around!
Only one little side-note:
I think they (Celly and co.) might have gotten in such a frenzy a little bit too fast.. or maybe not.
Anyways, to me it appeared to be a little rushed because it missed a great part of their conversation.
Maybe you should keep that in mind for the next chapter. Aside from that this chapter was gold!
Spike being the one giving her the idea for Foster's, not knowing who she is, that's .. I don't have words.
Will there be another shoutout to another of Lauren's works?
5326540 Now we need a reference to Powerpuff Girls.
5326614 Hopefully in the next chapter^^
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love it
stay classy
Wow you seem to be putting out these chapters rather fast!
Don't burn yourself out though please
This may be an overused comment, but:
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You can calm down, I'm sure she's just fine. If you really think about it Lauren eventually leaves Equestria and returns earlier in time, but older, to be Celestia & Luna's mother. If Lauren followed something like Star Trek's Temporal Prime Directive, Lauren would not say anything about showing up later in time, but younger. Because you wouldn't want to screw up anything young Lauren would do that would help older Lauren build the magical land of Equestria.
Having read through all five chapters, I can say a couple of things for certain. First, I love the premise of this story. I'm definitely looking forward to how you'll expant on what you have so far. On the other hand, it's littered with so many grammatical mistakes that I'm having to reconstruct sentences in my head as I go. I would recommend having an editor really dig into this. Unfortunately, while I get what you're trying to convey (which is more than can be said of some writers), rampant grammar issues make for breaks from the immersion that are jarring. Find somebody that can really take the time on editing for you, and it will make the story that much better.
Wait til they run into some of the background ponies. I would like to see Lyra react to her
5327529 Lyra would probably slice off Lauren's hands and say that it's hers
Just kidding
With Lauren meeting them before she created them, won't this create some sort of paradox that would cause her to not create them or some other paradox thing like that?
I would like a Foster's Home for Imaginary Friends image macro now.
Congratulations, you've lost your creator! How fucked are ya?
5327686
Self-fulfilling prophecy, kind of like Que Sera, Sera or when Stewie and Brian create the Big Bang.
5327686 three words Meet the Robinsons.
And how did Lauren or Spike not hear the Royal Canterlot Voice?
5327686 This IS the 'dream' that leads to the creation of Equestria.
Misconceptions just always happen in Equestria! Deal with it!
I love the Foster's Home for Imaginary Friends reference!
5329276 I KNOW RIGHT!!!!!!!!! IT IS SO MIND BOGGLINGLY AWESOME THAT I HAD TO LOOK IT UP!!!!!!!!!
SO AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!
Love the quick updates by the way.
Awesome!
Some G1 stuff:
I'll tell you some more stuff..
"Where did they go?" I would have thought that was obvious - they've become bored and have gone to find some fun, fun, FUN! Discord, although he probably will never know about it, would have approved.
Missing the more accurate line where Lauren would say her friend Craig from school brought up the subject of a foster home for imaginary friends. Still a cute reference though.
Ah references to other cartoon shows.
Nice.
Their own fault for not letting Spike in on the secret meeting...
"What do you think they are they talking about Spike?"
"*shrug* Beat's me, I never get invited to their private meetings anyway, you'd think if it's something important they'd at least tell me to listen in as well... meh! Mares are weird... except Rarity, wanna grab some donuts? I know a good place!"
I saw instantly where this was going and i loved every moment of it
The sky was a bright orange as Lauren and Spike were in the garden. There were, of course, a few guards around to keep an eye on them. They scanned the garden and back to the two who were drawing away, all the while talking to each other.
“Yeah, let me grab my bits first then we'll go.”
“I confess,” Luna answered, “I didn't expect her to come here as young as she is. In fact, the last time we saw her, she was at a reasonable age. But somehow, she came here as a child. Even before she was at the age where she created this world.”
“What?!” Both of the alicorn sisters asked in alarm, quickly looking out the window to find that their mother and the baby dragon have vanished.
Nice ref to Foster's Home for Imaginary Friends.
XD the Fosters. reference
You know, since this world still exists after she came, this means everithing already happened