This story is a sequel to Marking the Generations – Part Two
Marking the Generations is a reimagining of the later stages of the Make your Mark series. Follow the adventures of Sunny, Hitch, Izzy, Zipp and Pipp as they make a new friend in Misty and meet two ponies from a past generation.
Twilight Sparkle has always done her best for Equestria. As her reign finally ends, she realises her final decision to safeguard Equestria will have consequences. However, let it not be said that Twilight Sparkle ever left Equestria to its own devices.
Calling on Starlight Glimmer and Sunset Shimmer. She transports them through time to assist the new generation to identify the Elements of Unity and defeat the evil she was unable to alone.
In part three of four, Opaline's plans are kicking up into a higher gear as Sunset Shimmer inexplicably appeared at the door of her castle. Whatever plans Opaline has for her they are surely going to be a Nightmare for her new guest.
Will our heroes find the door to Misty’s Key? Will they find the Dragon Lands to warn the Dragon Lord about the Dragon Stone and help Sparky finally recover? Will they find the Elements of Unity and defeat Opaline?
All are questions that are waiting to be answered within.
Excellent job on the start to this story. REALLY appreciate the effort going into the brief dialogue, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Definitely appreciated Discord going to that effort and talking to what I'm guessing to be a member of the main group (I'm guessing either Misty or Sunset given they would be the only ones that would be likely to be missing a piece of memory concerning relatively recent events, though I admit that I could be wrong) concerning missing pieces in their memories.
And, on to the next chapter.
All right. Another well-done chapter with great dialogue, characterizations and future chapter set-up. REALLY appreciated the effort going into the search parties for Sunny and Sunset (though the brainwashed Peach Fizz ended up messing up part of it with planted evidence) as well as the check-up from Haven, Kendi mentioning a theft of some artifacts (and POSSIBLY other things, but we don't know that yet), the discussion of Sprout and Sunny's arrival at the Brighthouse explaining her whereabouts and now wondering where Zipp, Izzy and Sunset were. Of course, Sunset has apparently recovered from that brainwashing (at least temporarily), but ended up trapped in one of Opaline's prison bubbles.
VERY MUCH looking forward to more of this.
Yes, finally part 3
This. Is. AMAZINGG. I’m kinda sad that I didn’t get to read it when it came out though. I feel bad for Sunset, but maybe, just ma-aybe, she could use the power of willpower to like, get back to her senses. Or maybe there’s still a part of her inside? Like with Peach Fizz when asked about her friends in Part 2.
(Also, how did you get the vertical line that you used for texts? I’ve been trying to find out how since last month )
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More chapters releasing soon.
As for the line for a text it's a 'quote'. Hover your mouse over the formatting tools and it will tell you what each is.
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Whenever I try doing the quote-
Not the:
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I think it works differently within comments to chapters. It's certainly the Quote option I used there.
Speaking of, just proof read and released the next chapter.
OH MY GOSH I swear, some voodoo magic is going on here Wait- How did Opaline get Fluttershy’s hair- Okay, this is weird, and I see stalker vibes coming from Opaline. I feel like Opaline is gonna do magic to do something like Chrysalis did when she made the Mean 6.
Another well-done chapter with excellent dialogue, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Definitely appreciated Sunset's chat with Opaline after several failed escaped attempts as well as Sunset finding out about Opaline brainwashing Peach Fizz. The stuff between Sunny, Zipp, Misty and Izzy before Zipp went to check on Kendi was great too, as was Sunny and Starlight reassuring each other and the bit at the end concerning Zipp and Hitch.
I am really looking forward to more of this.
Whatever Opaline is doing, it can't be good.
Also, the key Misty got, I think the Wishing Tree must have a key slot somewhere, but I better wait and see.
Maretime Bay Idea list:
Hire more deputies
Security cameras
Turning Canterlogic factory into a radio station
Upgrade Sunny's Smoothie stand into a Smoothie store
Gym
Upgrade Maretime Bay's sheriff station into a huge
Maretime Bay's sheriff station with lots of jail cells to hold a lot of criminals.
Prison
Maretime Bay district court
Upgrade Mane Melody into a huge Mane Melody salon by hiring more mane stylists and hooficurists
Add that to your list.
Also the Maretime Bay's Sheriff station needs to have an interrogation room, training room, community room, locker room, gym, and a break room.
Hey there. Another well done job on this chapter. I definitely liked the work going into the dialogue, characterizations, (slight) action and future chapter set-up. REALLY enjoyed the stuff with Starlight training Sunny, Izzy and Misty on their magic, better illustrating their individual strengths and weaknesses (especially with learning more combat and defensive stuff). Sunset's thus far failed attempts to get through to Peach Fizz upon realizing she was under Opaline's brainwashing were also good, especially with Sunset continuing to be determined to find a way to escape.
REALLY looking forward to more of this.
THIS IS SO SAD I CAN’T WHY MUST YOU DO THIS TO ME
Peach Fizz, I love you but sometimes common sense needs to be kicked in here Also, when cooking PLEASE DO NOT be a Sweetie Belle and burn everything (even water).
Wait, is this dome like visible to other ponies that aren’t Opaline OR Peach Fizz? Because if it is, then let’s hope the Magic of Friendship will save Sunset! Also, what happened to that quest to find the Elements of Unity? We only got Hope and Empathy if I remember correctly.
It seems Misty is doing very well with her teleportation and transfiguration. Right now she has to master the shield spell along with Izzy has a hard time trying to master it, but I hope she'll keep doing it until she master it. Along with Sunset having some difficult stuff with Opaline. But I know deep inside I'm sure she can get herself out of here as long she believe in herself.
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To Peach Fizz, in her current condition, what Opaline tells her is common sense.
The sphere that Sunset is trapped in is transparent but it's basically like looking through glass. Anypony will clearly see it's there.
Effectively, picture a large transparent ball which is hovering around 2foot from the ground.
I mean, I’m sure in like the fourth or fifth part we’ll get the Misty and Alphabittle reveal. But Runcord IS Discord, so even if it doesn’t happen (slight chance though) Discord can probably make another key.
Wait... in Gen 5, the Dragonlands are like, FULL of life... but in Gen 4 the dragonlands were more volcano-y. What happened during that timeskip? Will we ever see Spike clarify what happened?
I’m still kinda creeped out on how Opaline got part of Fluttershy’s tail, also how is it still intact? It’s been there for like... 100 years give or take.
Oof, I honestly feel bad for Sunset, black water does not sound good at all. I have a feeling that Sunset will become semi-controlled, because I mean, It’s SUNSET, she has the will and power to break out of the trance soo
This. Is. So. PAINFUL. The cliffhangers keep killing me Anyways, will we ever see Sprout again? I miss Sprout, will he ever join the Mane 6? I know he’s redeemed, and Starlight could help him if he’s in like a guilt trance that he pushed down. I’m just going to pray, PRAY that Sprout will join the Mane 6.
Just for safekeeping...
I know it doesn’t fit, but Pipp’s D.I.Y hacks will probably work in a gen 5 fanfic.
Hey there. Thanks very much for the work going into the dialogue, characterizations and future chapter set-up this latest chapter. Definitely appreciated the gang initially thinking to use the magic key to find and rescue Sunset - even if the effort WAS a pretty big bust (of course, Starlight knew it probably wouldn't be that easy) - before deciding on going to the Dragon Lands. Also felt for Sunset when her efforts to cut through the sphere before Opaline got back also fell through. And, unfortunately, Opaline isn't wasting any time in getting Sunset straight into the brainwashing brew. The foreshadowing concerning the vines was also really good.
Definitely looking forward to seeing Opaline getting her comeuppance, even if I know that's not coming until Part Four.
VERY MUCH looking forward to more of this.
Uh-oh not good. (Biting my nails)
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Remember that only Starlight knows Discord and Runcord are one and the same.
Honestly, I didn't know what item to have for Fluttershy. Therefore, I tried asking https://www.fimfiction.net/group/50/the-writers-group/thread/534564/items-of-the-mane6
Pretty much got one response so went with it!
Yeah, with items from the Mane6 powering what Opaline is up to. Let's say things are going to be turning into a Nightmare for Sunset.
You'll all find out what has happened to Sunset when Starlight does!
Maretime Bay idea list:
Upgrade the flight school into a huge flight school with a lot of new obstacle courses for the pegasus to fly
Insurance agency
Maretime Bay Mail Postal Service
Sugery center
Bakery
Plastic sugery center
Mental hospital
Eldery retirement center
Restaurants
Cafes
Electronic store
Grocery store
Sport store
Candy store
Hardware store (with air conditioners and heat thermostats)
Boutiques
Medical center
Psychiatric hospital
Therapy
Physical therapy
Psychiatrist
Chiropractor
Dermatologist
Eye doctor
Cardiologist
Pharmacy
Temp agency
Strip mall
Shopping mall
Add all that to your list
I laughed at this for a concerning amount of time...
Well, nothing much to say here unfortunately
I’m hoping we’ll see Sprout in this part Or atleast a scene
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Don't worry, Sprout has not been forgotten. You'll see him again soon.
Spike Junior, The One Who Somehow Looks Almost Exactly Like Spike Senior, The Original Brave And Glorious
Actually... yeah, that sounds about right. I can see Spike overexaggerating the “Crystal Empire”.
No, no, no, no, no, no, no. Something definitely happened to Sunset. Firey? That kinda sounds like demon Sunset... What happened to you Sunset We need to get more insight.
Curse you, cliff hangers!
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YESSS MY BOY SPROUT IS GOING TO GET SCREEN TIME (happy cry)
Great job on the latest chapter(s) to this installment. I am certainly enjoying the efforts going into the dialogue, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Not really much I can say beyond good work including stuff from the canon "Isle of Scaly", except a few days early, with Ember and Smolder at least being mentioned by name AND with mentions of Blaize being in charge of security..
On to the next chapter.
Hello there. Again, this was a really good job on the dialogue, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Indeed, greatly enjoyed the dialogues with Spike Junor (yeah, him actually being the adult grandson of the original Spike makes a great deal of sense, especially with him only recalling the stories from his mother/the original Spike's daughter) - especially with Starlight catching him on the ruse. Also really loved the nods to the Crystal Empire. The stuff about Lava and Jade being under attack was a really good lead-off to the next chapter too. And now, we are going to see the ponies and dragons working together for the first time in over a thousand years against a brainwashed Sunset. I REALLY hope the others can help Sunset overcome Opaline's brainwashing and THEN they all help save Peach Fizz. .
But, anyway, I am really looking forward to the next chapter.
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Yeah, I felt having two trips to the Dragon Lands made little sense. The series towards the end felt very rushed and it was clear the writing team were struggling to wrap things up.
One trip to the Dragon Lands and do everything together made more sense. You then don't get Opaline sat around doing nothing. Her plans are really going up through the gears now!
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Part of my reasoning for pushing to get these two chapters out was to hurry us along to the next chapter. All is revealed to both the characters and the audience as to what has become of Sunset.
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Yeah. I could see those points. Of course, the main group (minus Starlight and Sunset who will have probably returned to their own timelines by that point) could still visit Scaly in the Marestream later on AFTER Opaline has been defeated. After all, taking Sparky to visit the other dragons from time to time, even if he stays with the ponies, would be a good way for him to learn a lot about BOTH cultures.
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Definitely makes a great deal of sense.
Fiery monster? Oh no, it can't be... Sunset, what did Opaline did to you?
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Oh for sure they should be able to make another visit in the future.
I am working out Part 4 currently and that will have more post Oplaine in it. I want to avoid Sunset and Starlight doing a 'okay bye' as soon as Opaline is defeated.
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Next chapter, all will become clear.
The story grows deeper and deeper every chapter...
We’ve got a Together Tree in the Dragons Lands now ! I sense a connection with Blaize and Starlight I feel like, since this new tree is from the seeds of the OG tree... will the elements like, sprout in/out of it?
Wish I had more to say, but I’m unfortunately late for time right now
Once more, you did a really good job on the dialogue, characterizations, (minor) action and future chapter set-up. Definitely appreciated the realizations concerning the encounter with Sunset's Nightmare form (though she isn't as far gone as she would like the others to think, given that she DID spare Blaize and Starlight and only grabbed the minimum of what her "mistress" ordered). Also liked Sunny giving that speech about how ponies and dragons are stronger together and how, as long as there is life, there is hope. And Zipp talking to Blaize concerning backtalking a superior DOES have some bits of hypocrisy in there given how she usually has very few issues with talking back to Haven (the Queen) - though, when Zipp does it, it's usually because she is making a pretty good point. And the notes of the further motivation concerning finding the Elements of Unity were also rather good.
Also adored Spike Junior making the observation concerning Sparky and the ponies and the working in the "Mane Family" song.
All in all, really looking forward to more of this.
The together tree is now in the dragon lands. Now, the real challenge is to stop Opaline and get Sunset back to normal.
Starlight should keep training Misty and Izzy on their shields; hopefully, they'll be able to master it.
Misty x Hitch?
(Squeal with excitement) The Together Flowers gave Izzy the element of creativity and Misty the element of heart. (Star eyes) This is so cool!
I can't wait to see what sort of element Zipp and Pipp will get, but I better wait and find out soon, along with the riddle that Sunny is trying to figure out. "What was missing something?"
Also, I'm getting the feeling that Nightmare Shimmer is attacking Zephyr Heights, but I better wait and see.
Another really good job on the dialogue, characterizations and future chapter set-up. The chats Opaline had with both Nightmare Shimmer AND Peach Fizz were appropriately chilling. Though I liked the discussions between the main group as they all made the return trip to Bridlewood concerning Starlight being able to use the Together Tree to return to the Dragon Lands/Isle of Scaly now that she knows the location of it. Also liked the reactions to Sparky's use of the word "Identify" and Sparky's observation concerning the Cutie Mark glows. Yeah, the Together Flowers with Izzy and Misty's marks as they recognized their Elements (Creativity in Izzy's case and Heart in Misty's) as well as wondering why Sunny was also being in that trance when there were only two Flowers. And, yes, the observation that it makes sense that there would be two Together Flowers in each of the three main pony cities (given those are the hometowns of two Element Bearers each) was also a good one before Zipp and Pipp got the call from Haven (which I have a hunch will lead to Zipp and Pipp finding their Together Flowers).
I am most certainly looking forward to more of this.
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Quite right on all counts.
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Well, we'll have to wait and see. But I doubt we're going to see too many ships beyond the canon stuff. This doesn't seem to be that sort of series.
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Yeah. Have to say that I'm getting that sort of feeling all around myself.
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You and me both
Finally got to reading this
I imagine Starlight’ll do some remark about Opaline stealing cutie marks. Wait, so will the necklace have 7 spots now? Or will there be a place for Starlight cutie mark individually?
This is it!
I’m going to guess that they’ll be using the elements to stop Opaline.
Aww, lil’ Sparky is growing up
This. This right here. Is this saddest line. “certainly not towards myself” WHO DID THIS TO YOU MISTY
Don’t worry Misty! Even if you might never know that Alphabittle’s your dad (though, I doubt that will happen) you still got Sunny, Zipp, Pipp, Izzy, Hitch, Starlight, Sunset to be your family!
ELEMENTS!!!
Ooh, spooky!
What is Sunny missing?! And why would Izzy and Misty do that!? Who are you and what have you done to Izzy and Misty! And why would you hurt Sunny?!
Hmmmm, maybe her element?
Theory time: Ahem, what if during the whole Opaline fight when she steals the cutie marks. When Hitch is fighting Opaline he gets his element? And when Zipp and Pipp reach the together tree in Zephyr Heights after their cutie marks are stolen, maybe they get their element? Ooh! And when we see Sunny fight Opaline next to the Together Tree, she gets her element after her cutie mark is stolen? But, I don’t know.
I’m going to guess this is Nightmare Shimmer?
Part 3 is so well made! The suspense! I cannot wait for the next part!
Nightmare Shimmer strikes again, I suppose.
Okay, I think that the unbloomed flower... is Zipp's, because maybe she doesn't have the bravery to fight Sunset? I don't know, but I'm sure it's Zipp's!
Misty already is going through the process of learning Alphabittle is her dad!
Cannot wait for more!
Another well-done job on the dialogue, characterizations, (limited) action and future chapter set-up. REALLY appreciated Sunny and Misty's efforts to get through to Nightmare Shimmer while the others tried to find a safe landing space for the Marestream (as well as the realization that the power being down in Zephyr Heights was the reason the call got cut off). Also liked the main group checked in on Haven and the others in Zephyr Heights. Also loved Starlight demonstrating just how absurd the "tennis ball to the horn" deal is concerning all but the weakest unicorns (much less one of Starlight's power). Of course, the notice of the Together Flowers meant for Zipp and Pipp was also well done. And it seems like Misty is starting to make the realization about Alphabittle being her father judging by her reaction to that picture.
At any rate, I am definitely looking forward to more of this.
Misty mastered teleportation and Sparky is doing a good job with using his words.
Also, looks like Misty knows the unicorn stallion and I don't want to spoil it.
And another thing, I can't wait to see Zipp and Pipp find the together flowers, I'm so excited to see what elements they're going to have. I could just explode with excitement to see what it is.
I really liked this chapter, and at the end Misty says she knows this pony, will she find out who he is?
Pipp had Zipp gagged I’m sorry
Pipp, how do you not know it was a Unicorn AND an Alicorn- it was Sunny! Your friend?
This song is the best one in the series I’m glad you included it here
Wait, what song is she referring to? I don’t think I’ve heard this one in the series before? Is it original?
I feel bad for Sunny, that experience must’ve been traumatizing even for a grown pony
Looking back, ponies with eyes completely white does not sound comforting at ALL.
Not this again I’m so sorry, Sunny
Okay, atleast Sunny isn’t getting hurt, so that’s good!
I mean, anyone wouldn’t want to hurt a friend. Wait, Sunset was holding back? Ooh, there’s still some Sunset in her!
Wait, did Ethereal Izzy and Misty mean that she was “missing” the like, information? ?
Something’s gonna happen with Hitch when he gets his Element, for sure
Oof, sad landing.
I’m really looking forward for more of this! I miss when you used to give me vague hints for next chapters