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Hello Zach, I have commented upon your work, but I feel this page requires more comments, and is more likely for what I'm trying to say...

My friend (please note I'm not trying to insinuate that down votes 'get' to you) all the down votes you have gotten are mostly due to the fact that your story is a FoE spin off, that it has gore, and that it has sex.

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All these votes mean shit all, I found your fiction to be well thought out, and to have a decent plot.

However...

Description is needed to be more prominent and

be more explanatory.

My Fic seemed almost doomed to fail, but then

the FoE community lent a hoof and now I have

a bunch of fans, and am looking forward to publishing my first chapter!

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Don't give up, Don't give in. They always look on the outside, Not whats within.

Ed

>>1872018720 No. My OC Keystrokes is not Steven Magnet. He is missing the 'stache.

>>1870218702

Steve: Slick back hair

Purple body

Brown mane

Fabulous mustache

Zachsparrow: Slick back hair

Purple body

Brown mane

Fabulous mustache?

>>1837918379  Care to elaborate?

Are you Steven Magnet?

>>1666816668 Sounds like a deal my good friend.

Listen here Zach! I think your writing has potential and is fine as is!

I feel the same about my writing  . . . .

So here is the deal, my friend. You critique my work, I'll do the same for you!

What do you say?