While I still think that all that I wrote is horrible and written in style "say instead of show", I actually had a good laugh over some of scenes. I actually forgot that I wrote them and this helped re-view it in better perspective.

It was amusing.

It is fun to see "return of imaginary friends" (referring to this picture), remember their characters, what they do, why they do it. Their drives and fears. Recall the emotional states of every character in their life throughout their lives.

I think I have an idea.

There is not "not enough" details that I have. It is the "too much" that I have, which results in mind tuning out most of details and making scenes seem... Bleak.

Therefore, it's better to make a skeleton of a scene by describing major points.

Next step is add finer details to surroundings, tune in background.

Next, add emotions of every character in scene by focusing on just one in each run.

Move like this in interlaced images. They have rough details before completely downloading and then get less and less pixelated till seen in full glory.

Deja vu. Did I have this idea long time ago?