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Fallen Apprentice? · 3:29am

So I wrote a sort of one-shot to fill the gap while I'm working on Away From The Acres. It's fairly sad, from the response I've gotten so far, but I've only gotten positive comments, so I figured I would write a thanks to all the people that have read it so far, and another thanks for all the positive response it's been getting.

It's called Fallen Apprentice, and it may be viewed here. If you haven't seen it, I'd love to know what you think! When I can't think of anything to post for AFtA, I usually just write and erase short stories like this, so I'd love some criticism, since I went and posted it. Always looking to improve on writing.

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Fallen Apprentice

When all you love is lost, and no comfort great enough,

is there ever truly a time to seek death, before you deserve its embrace?

There was such a time for Twilight Sparkle, after her friends all passed away before her.

She was of royal blood, she was meant to have hundreds of years to live.

She did not want them... All Twilight wanted was to have her friends back.

Celestia is forced to come to grips with the true pain of immortality.

After all these years, there was no pony, no student she had grown more attached to than her faithful Twilight.

But Twilight's hoof was forced by the madness of loss, and Celestia's only option was to destroy that which she had raised from a foal, the one she had grown to care for as a daughter.

I know I probably could've added more to this, but I was inspired for only about an hour, and I thought that I reached an acceptable stopping point when my mind stopped producing coherent ideas. I hope you enjoy.

This story was inspired by the song "Fallen Apprentice" by Zykrath,

And the art, "The Fallen Apprentice", by Jamey4 of DeviantART.

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Away From The Acres

(Rated Teen for shipping, possibly not necessary, but caution is better than nothing.)

(Art drawn by me)

Big Macintosh doesn't know what to do when given some time off from work at Sweet Apple Acres. He goes into Ponyville for what seems like the first time in forever, and he ends up running into the mane six, who he hasn't seen in a while. He still remembers what they did for his sister last Applebuck season, and he intends to be the gentlecolt he always is, and thank them each. However, simple greetings and thanks can always blossom into something more.

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#433121 · 5w, 2d ago · · ·
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>>433115

Mine is my first successful story! And I just can't write anything else into it. I've hit a kill-point, and I truly want to continue it, but it makes me sick that I can't add any more. I know that feel, man. Except most of my non-pony writing is just poetry, but nonetheless. Writer's block affects us all, I suppose.

#433115 · 5w, 2d ago · · ·
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I know how you feel. I'm writing two other stories right now (not pony) and one has been under the writer's block on and off for almost 6 years... :pinkiesick: it makes me queasy to think about, because it's probably the thing that got me started writing in the first place.

#433103 · 5w, 2d ago · · ·
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>>433101

Indeed indeed! Still enjoying it, and still left wanting more after every chapter! Keep it going, good sir, and I pray that eventually, I can get over the writers block I've been experiencing for like, three months now.

#433101 · 5w, 2d ago · · ·
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So, belated thank you for fav on 'Chaser'! Also, thanks for the comments, and support.:pinkiesmile:  It's really one of the main reasons I keep doing this, knowing that ponies are out there enjoying it.

#413881 · 6w, 4d ago · · ·
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Thanks for the fav

#393316 · 8w, 1d ago · · ·
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Thanks for the favorite, Machiniman. It's highly appreciated. :moustache:

#353496 · 11w, 4d ago · · ·
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When are you gonna are you gonna update your youtube channel? P.S: this is definitely not averagejacklp...

#323952 · 14w, 3d ago · · ·
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>>323802

Thank you very much!

#323802 · 14w, 3d ago · · ·
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Thanks a lot for the fave!

Thanks again, for sending me your corrections on most parts! The way you write is very professional.

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