12:40 am , Hell yeah , Sleep can wait!

Huzzah!!!

The Father isn't a raving lunatic!

Oh yes, a sequel!

Read later or during work... Read at work or read later... Uhhh...

Higher priority first, reading nao!

And an post-read edit:

Woot, great start to the new story! Let's see where it'll go from here, how Twi will react, how everypony else will, and how he will react once he realizes he actually knocked out Luna and not Nightmare

yay!

Dude, more.

Yay

SQUEEEEEE!

Kick his ass. I'm getting that funny feeling I get when something aint right about a pony.

Don't let the autocorrect fool you, plural of pegasus is pegasi.

YES ITS HERE!!!. *ahem* sorry about that. i loved the broken mare and ive been waiting for this.

Wohoo! This story is awesome. If... if that's ok with you, I mean no, if you don't want me telling you the sequel is amazing, I'm fine with that, it's just... I hope it's ok with you.

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Updates.  Tick tock.

I think that when the stallion explains himself everypony will understand.

I mean, Twilight did try to kill the princesses. He only knocked one out.

Although he's not brainwashed, thinking Luna was the Nightmare is a perfectly reasonable mistake.

I look forward to more!

The sequel is starting?!

Yay!

ayaaaaaa update!!

I am ever so minorly concerned that the stallion will turn into a Gary-Stu. It's just a vibe I got from him being such an awesome fighter, tracker, guard, piece of stallion beef hunk-a-hunka *eyebrow wiggle*. So long as his crazy paranoi that everyone has to be working for the Nightmare sticks, I'm okay.

Loved the first story, and really enjoying the sequel so far. Dash is best Guard Pony. Sorry Shining.

Yyyhhaaaa! Sequel!

Fuck yeah.

Update? YAY

I love where this is going, keep it up

I... I'm so happy... the sequel is HERE!!!!!

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Sequel!! Awesome!

Seems like Twilight's getting used to be being a mom, even if she still has some problems with it. Can't wait to see the confrontation between Twi and the stallion

One of my favorite stories has a sequel!

Have some moustaches.

wow. Very nice, as usual. :D Here. Take this!

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YES!!! When I saw this I practically yelled  "Oh, S***!" and my brother looked at me like I'm nuts (which I am). I can't wait for more.

Yeah, the sequel's up!

Well now I know that it's not my OC. (even though it matches him in every way except for being a unicorn)

Look forward to seeing how this turns out.

Also, the stallions theme song should be: Boulevard of broken dreams (You know, the "I walk alone" one)

>>14052721405272

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Does the synopsis have way too many rhetorical questions?

Is it boring and uninventive?

Does it give away too many of the story's developments?

Yes, yes and yes.

Also, learn how to punctuate your dialogue. It's not that hard.

And to think, this got featured...

Oh heck yea! a sequel! I read the broken mare and i'm like, OMG MOONLIGHTS FATHER IS AN INSANE CRAZY PONY and i still think that

1. yes a sequal!!!!!!

2. holy shit this is going to be good

I thought Moonlight was just, ”created,” by Nightmare. Didn't expect a father. Kind of suspect he is brainwashed, though.

The father escapes and the mother complex returns

I know just the right overused gif for this . . .

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HUZZAH!

The story is now here!

Add it to the ffavorites immediatly!

I am very happy this got to the feature box. I would not of found the first story this is a sequel to, if not for that. Now I have 2 new stories on my favorite list and another writer to follow. Yay!

Oh... My... Glob...

My only realy complaint is that you used the word "adorable"... I just don't like that word period.

Certainly interested. Let's see, what do I think? Well, if Nightmare could create 'life' with magic, I doubt she would have needed Twilight at all, so it makes sense she would have sought out the best possible specimen of magic, will, and physical strength to sire her new body.

But one would think that a missing guard pony of such skill would be big news... maybe not as big as the disappearance of a mare like Twilight.

The only thing that shocks me how the stallion could 'not' be aware of who Twilight is. I mean... This is the mare who put down Nightmare Moon's first return... defeated Discord, and is technically a member of the royal family. That unicorn has got to be an Equestrian Celebrity.

>>14077611407761

who indeed.  who indeed.

Yay!

The Needs Of Life

-Gaming

-Alcohol

-MLP

-Dubstep

Which one is the most important

>>14064881406488 Well, let's assume NM picked him because she wanted all of those traits so she'd have a strong foal

>>14082051408205 hey that was supposed to be my gif! lol oh well i got one noone else does...

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this here is Luna's personal Liberty Launcher...

EDIT: this is a pic not a gif....

>>14093861409386 i find you adorable.... lol had to say it i had to :3

Needs Moar Cowbell.

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Which reminds me.... I'd REALLY like to see a Fic where Anti-Guy stumbles into Equestria....

Glad to see a sequel up! Let's rock this stallion's world! And Moonlight's! Onward!

Well, one chapter down. Now where are the rest?!

>>14052841405284 far as we can tell

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>>14097441409744

Judging by his actions  and knowledge, one would assume he's military, possibly some kind of secret ops or a cleanup agent. He knows magic to track someone down, he knows just how to fight and escape, and patients. Plus he's not from anywhere near Ponyville so I would assume some land beyond the sea or whatnot.

At any rate, if he disappeared while on a mission, especially if it's a secret mission, not much would be known about his disappearance other than by the government that contracted him, and if he is a secret agent, then said government would keep quiet about the whole thing and keep it under wraps. Kinda like that whole Mission Impossible line: "IF anything happens to you, the government will disadvow any knowledge" blah blah blah.

>>14111961411196

True.

But he's awesome, in a Jason Bourne kinda way.

>>14063891406389

Agreed.

Nightmare Moon plans many moves ahead of her opponents she had to have anticipated that her plan with Twilight would fail, and it seems a little too convenient that the Nightmare forgot to refresh the enchantments on the Stallions restraints... allowing him to escape and go straight to Twilight and her foal.

After all, why would she brainwash one and not the other?

I hope you update soon or I'll be really sad

>>14115711411571 Yes, but you have to remember. Nightmare was banished to the moon for 1000 years, returns, was immediately purged from Luna by the Elements of Harmony, spent a year recovering her strength and lying in wait for an opportunity, continuously used her power to keep Twilight under control, and then purged by the Elements of Harmony yet again. That's gotta take it's toll on your body and mind, being hit by the Elements three times.

>>14121051412105

Yeah, but unless she has SOME plan then there's not much of a story beyond a bit of drama over no one trusting the stallion (unless the author decides to pull something entirely new into the story)

Also Twilight may have banished Nightmare Moon and broken free from her control, but it's not much of a stretch for her to relapse if Nightmare Moon or her minion(s?) get their hands on her again. Her, her foal, and the stallion are all possibly still under a bit of her influence, and there's no proof Nightmare Moon didn't do anything else during the year she controlled Twilight (and we know she was back in Equestria for at least some of that year).

Then again, the tags are romance and adventure. It's possible that nefarious plans are entirely done with and this story is just one of recovery and such.

>>14052721405272 Sleep is for the weak.

>>14129991412999

True too. I'll give you that. And there's also possibilities of Nightmare finding someone willing to accept her power for some form of revenge as well.

You know, i was afraid to read the precuel, since i have some adversion to any fic with a "sad" tag. But i am glad i decided to take my fears out of the window and read it, because i enjoyed it a lot. And now reading this fic with this promising start... I wanna know where this will lead...

where are updates? i like this but want updates.

This is really entertaining, I can't wait to see where it goes. Damn you for keeping me up until 7 in the morning!

Ooh he clocked Luna good.

>>14067981406798 That action figure can't make up its mind on wether or not it wants to be captain america, spiderman, venom, or deadpool.

perhaps you could take some more time on this story? i think the premise is worth the effort and im sure all my fellow bronies will agree?

Maybe, maybe not.  More than likely turn into an obsession with her.  He'll probably abduct her and keep her locked away somewhere in a gross imitation of a family due to his fractured state of mind

10 Bits says he knocks out a guard, steals said guards armor, infiltrates the farm, gets close to Twilight and Moonlight, and just as things start to look up for him, something goes horribly wrong and he gets royally fucked!

This stallion's father of the year material

FOR THE LOVE OF GOD AND CELESTIA!

Update or i shall do unspeakabley horrinble things to you.

>>14196831419683  Heh... gimme some time, this is only my second pony fic and I want to make sure it's readable.

>>14196831419683 YOU BETTER DO IT AUTHOR WE DON'T KNOW WHA HE MIGHT BE CAPABLE OF!!!  

>>14052841405284 That's always a plus

>>14199541419954 if it's written in english then it's readable to me

All hail the feature board for informing me of this amazingness

Can't. Stand. The. Waiting. Urge. To. Kill. Rising.

i keep coming back hoping for a new chapter. I'm like a recovering drug addict who is dating crack

Losing. Sanity.

Well, here's your sanity back.  Update!  

Not my best work, but we have a first encounter!

And so the plot thickens... This stallion is an interesting character. Cant wait to see more.

(claps)  Yay!  New Chapter!

I this story so far.  Just out of curiousity ... you'll be updating soon, right?

>>14263501426350 Wrong! This was great. Couldn't imagine it better.

Oh my, the plot thickens...

I love where you're going with this.

Keep up the good work!

>>14263501426350

It's, it's beautiful... O_O

Keep going! :D

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Maybe not your best, but I liked it!!! Twistalker is awesome.

I'm glad there isn't much time wasted getting him near Twilight, but promising to more or less stalk her was pretty silly. They obviously need to talk more.

Also, why exactly IS he on the run? He didn't commit any crimes besides hitting Luna (which I'm pretty sure wouldn't be held against him given the circumstances). The only way it really makes sense to me is if Nightmare Moon conditioned him to avoid the authorities. His comments regarding whether or not he would attack the house are more than a little suspicious in that light.

>>14263981426398 To the point of oatmeal.

Don't trust him don't trust him don't trust him!

Something don't smell right about this guy.

like i said take your time with this story make it last... though please update frequesntly

Keep this shit up!

>>14264841426484  Or molten rock.

>>14265201426520 Or oatmeal.

Man poor guy. To be used like that, it's got to be horrible. I can only imagine what he's going through.

>>14263731426373 >>14263981426398 There's a dirty joke in there somewhere about this being how this all started... but I'm not coherent enough to flesh that joke out. :|

I love how he's so concerned about Twilight and Moonlight. I hope things go well for him though

Well, at least there are soldiers around. Someone has to protect the farm from ze Germanes.

My desire...is for more...but my Logic says to allow you all your time... evil evil desire...sometimes i love you and sometimes i hate you. BACK TO SUBJECT!

BRILLIENT chapter do as you do! best luck and smiles the smiles of happiness!

[size=32][/size]MOOOAAAAR

>>14263501426350 Sanity. Returning. Urge to kill lowering.

>>>14264941426494 well he has been imprisoned for a year, covered in blood stains because of the beatings, probably running non stop for like 2 days straight while looking for twilight. of course the guy would smell like shit he hasn't showered for a whole year

Hmm... I like this guy... But... I don't know... What are you planning author?

impresive to say the least