I'm still working on this. I've got two updates semi-finished and need to poke my pre-reader a bit more.

I also updated the tags a bit (for some reason I thought the Crossover tag superseded the Human one) and re-evaluated the rating. It's now Teen, same as all good Ar Tonelico games. A small story plan change is reflected in the characters bar.

Also I realized I never described what Mir's cutie mark looks like, so that was added to chapter 1. It'll be described again when it's relevent.

So before this week there was a bit in chapter two about Pinkie Pie. I had no idea what I wanted to do with her so I wrote a little bit, the gist of which was "Pinkie decides not to show up." This was pretty crap and one of the people who I asked to pre-read straight-up told me to get rid of it. I kept it though, because I wasn't sure what else to do. Pinkie SHOULD logically greet them because they're new in Ponyville, but I didn't want to because I had visions of how the easily-statled,

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