I've just posted a new chapter I finished while my internet is out! Hooray! They fixed the cell towers!

Michael's story is up next! Don't worry. He won't be a gary stu! He's not fully fleshed out yet!

In fact, he has some major flaws, which will be shown in the next chapter.

Please tell me what you hate about my story so much!!!

I can't take it when people downvote without saying why they downvoted it! Please tell me!

I have resubmitted my story. Please go easy on me.

It's gotten 4 downvotes already... Is it because it's too violent? Is the zebra too "edgy?"

What did I do wrong?