Never edit your stories in a drunken state.
Even though English is not my native language, I still see and fix some punctuation errors. Though I fear of what else I could change there.

P.S. Also, why do so much bands I like starts with letter 'G' — Guns n' Roses (in English) , Gadyukiny Brothers (Braty Gadyukiny in Ukrainian) and Grazhdanskaya Oborona (in Russian)?

UPD: Actually, 'Hadyukiny' is more correct transliteration, but whatever...