So recently, I took part in a... unnamed scifi Youtube channel's Discord Server contest and learned some key things about how to give a criticism on a author/artist/media creator's ideas. I'm happy to name them if you ask me in private, but the reason for not naming them in public on this post will become abundantly clear when I get into this.
The Critique stood outside another home as the frantic children of all shapes and sizes scattered throughout Ponyville in series of cheers and quoting the famous little poem to politely ask for candy. Under the light of the moon, as if to spotlight him, he gave a smile. “Hello, everypony! I am-”
So this is my first blog post - about my first story that I am sharing. It's received a pleasant reception in its current form, which is actually really great to hear. I hadn't actually written anything since my English Language A-Level coursework a couple years ago, which was a short story. So it's strange to get back into the swing of things.
In light of something recently, I thought I would share a little story about myself, and some advice relevant to it.
I often mention—unprompted and at length—that self-reflection is crucial for personal growth. And not merely growth as a writer, but growth as a person. I have made many adjustments to my review formula over the years. But has that made things better? Or has it merely masked an issue that still persists?
So, with the last few chapters mostly written out, I'd like to do some revision on the already posted chapters. I'd like to know if anyone here has any criticisms that I might use to work on the story, because I'm my own worst critic, and I know better than to sit here for a month revising it instead of finishing it.
Here are some issues that I think are there but would like second thoughts on, because I'm not really sure how prevalent they are to other people...
For those of whom have been following me from the beginning, you may remember an old story by the name of Spacebound Equestria. Both back then and now, I use the story and its sequel as sort of a "guinea pig" set of stories, where I experiment on and improve my personal writing style.
The movie has its problems.
The villains are under developped, forgettable, one dimensional jerks and I just don't see the point in them.
Just keep readin'. Just keep readin'.
Last time, our killer angel, Gabriel, went after Christina in her home, only to be stopped by Cameron. He then used his powers on a woman named Tammi, who tried to seduce Father Stephen, then killed herself in front of him when that failed.
Wow! That was some of the best adventures I’ve ever had! Don’t you think so, Computer?
So, my most recent story Mute (not counting Scotch on the Rocks) I think, has done pretty well. With 89 likes to only 8, I think that's a win in my book. But, I recently got a comment that contains, practically a book on why that story is a 3.5/10.
Obviously this girl/guy had a lot of time on their hands.
You can still go see it in the comment boxes below the story, you can even see my reply as well. But, with that comment came a sudden realization. An epiphany if you will.