Shadows of the Mind (Full) Gdoc

This project is a sequel to my EqG story "A Clean Slate for a Former Siren" with a Mature rating for violence, gore, and profanity. It's a Dark, Sad, Horror story that consists of 5 chapters and 34,380 words. The story revolves around the OC Azure Slate and Sonata Dusk going on a camping trip of their own apart from the main cast during the events of Legend of Everfree. Big Mac, Maud Pie, Aria Blaze, and Slates' friend Heavyweight join them on their trip to the local forest to try and get their minds off of their home lives and other responsibilities for the summer. That, however, takes a turn for the worst once night falls at their camp.

I'm hoping that an editor will be able to help me make my ideas more clear and exciting to the readers. I've also been informed that my writing tends to be stilted so if any advice can be given, I'd greatly appreciate it.