Within the walls of Stable Eighty Eight, a new kind of war has been fought. A kind of war the likes of which have never been seen within the magical land of Equestria. A class war.
7440136 I thought about doing that but the reason the chapters are turning out so long is because of how I'm writing them. My other stories follow the style you're talking about, but I wanted to change things up with this one. Sorry, but that's just how it is.
Wow, I loved how that scene ended up. It works a whole lot better with full context. Lucky's scenes do feel a bit rushed, sorta like she's abridging her Recollections of the events. But Reckless, his scenes seem to flow very well. I did enjoy the fact that it was very long, even though it took me a few days to actually read through all of it... it is rather hard to digest in one sitting. Can't wait to read more, let me know if there's any more parts you want me to take a look at.
An Omake for next chapter: Lucky's POV Reckless set me down on the roof, I was happy this was almost over. "You killed him." Razor Edge said in a hollow voice. Reckless and I spun around to see her leading a group of a dozen mares. Each look unsure but many were holding various objects that could be easily used as weapons. I got into a ready stance as the approached. Razor walked past us and looked over the edge. "He's dead, and these ponies killed him." Her hollow voice grew louder, for an instant I saw a smirk on her lips. I was ready to pounce, one false move and I would shove that bitch right off- "Bing bong, the Dick is dead!" Huh? Suddenly the mares all began to sing. "Bing bong, the dick is dead." "The dirty dick, the mean ol'prick" "Bing bong the dirty dick is dead~"
I think this chapter is too long, including the previous one! It would have been best if you just divided all of this up into 4 to 5 extra chapters!
7440136 I thought about doing that but the reason the chapters are turning out so long is because of how I'm writing them. My other stories follow the style you're talking about, but I wanted to change things up with this one. Sorry, but that's just how it is.
Brony on!
Wow, I loved how that scene ended up. It works a whole lot better with full context. Lucky's scenes do feel a bit rushed, sorta like she's abridging her Recollections of the events. But Reckless, his scenes seem to flow very well. I did enjoy the fact that it was very long, even though it took me a few days to actually read through all of it... it is rather hard to digest in one sitting. Can't wait to read more, let me know if there's any more parts you want me to take a look at.
An Omake for next chapter:
Lucky's POV
Reckless set me down on the roof, I was happy this was almost over. "You killed him." Razor Edge said in a hollow voice. Reckless and I spun around to see her leading a group of a dozen mares. Each look unsure but many were holding various objects that could be easily used as weapons. I got into a ready stance as the approached. Razor walked past us and looked over the edge. "He's dead, and these ponies killed him." Her hollow voice grew louder, for an instant I saw a smirk on her lips. I was ready to pounce, one false move and I would shove that bitch right off- "Bing bong, the Dick is dead!" Huh?
Suddenly the mares all began to sing.
"Bing bong, the dick is dead."
"The dirty dick, the mean ol'prick"
"Bing bong the dirty dick is dead~"
Why does this have so much hate? I personally really enjoyed it!
Any idea if or when the next chapter may be?
8687789 It's going to be awhile longer. Sorry, but I like to take my time on these chapters and they also tend to be very long.
Brony on!
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Oh there's no rush, I was just curious is all