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Rereading my own work, I see so many little things I wish I had changed.
Meh. I may post an editted standalone version in a few days. Is there any rules against that?
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Not really, no. It was even said in the anthology thread to feel free to do so. I did it for my first submission, too, and will probably be adding Night of the Loving Dead to my own account soon as well.
Heck, if you do, I might just update this with your fixed version
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Hah. 'Friend'. I see what you did there
Not sure "dropping your weapon during a fight" is the right thing to do. Especially when fighting an enemy who's completely used to that sight
Well. This was a nice collection of shorts tied together by that "meeting in different lives" premise.
Though, that premise kind of fails for the second pair; Shutter says "I don’t really keep track of time since the bombs dropped", which implies he did keep track of time before the bombs dropped... which means they were alive at the same time as Lyra and Bon Bon
On the grammar /spelling errors side: nothing too hideous; just a couple of its/it's errors, a 'hoard' instead of a 'horde', a 'laid' that should be 'lay', and I think there's a 'with' missing in "I’m done all this fighting". Oh, and there's an extra quote somewhere in the aforementioned "keep track of time" line.
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Thanks for pointing out those mistakes. I'll be sure to fix those before I post the story to my page.
The dropping your weapon thing was more out of shock than anything. In my mind, if you're seeing the sun for the first time, you're going to be more than a little surprised.
As for the second pair, I'd originally meant the story to have each couple be more of a comparison than what I ended up doing. I thought I'd fixed all those little errors when I rewrote the second part.
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Heh, I know, I was just being cynical.
It turned out all right, anyway