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Saffron in the wasteland? Madagaskar is hit with some bad weather and now Vanilla cost more to the pound than silver. I do not really think that anyone would care to pick flower stems in the wasteland, and if someone cared to pick them, then not transport them to the other end of the Wold trough a desert of ice.
PH tried so gosh darn hard to be like this story, to have the emotional impacts and showing how a shitty place the Wasteland can be. Too bad that the twisting of the knife in the emotional wound have no real effect on me by this point, having mostly locked down for most feelings, and are only in it to see the end of the ride. He have lost almost all by now, so I am honestly looking forward to see what he will loose next, even if I know that I won't feel for his loss in advance.
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"---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------" Consistency is key, and this is a different kind of chapter break than you normally use.
"Jezebel stared at Lyra’s hoof with a thinly veiled scowl. Her stone-grey eyes moved to me. “Symph, who is this?”" Linebreak
"Jezebel’s eyes twitched, and the smile on her face was beyond forced. “You certainly have a mouth on you, don’t you?”" Linebreak
"‘Chestra sighed. “Tell me, Lyra, what are your plans for the future?”" Linebreak
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