What do you get when you cross a down-on-his-luck earth pony, an ex-Enclave pegasus mare and a naive unicorn from Stable 6? One of the strongest friendships forged in postwar Equestria. (Spin-off of "Fallout: Equestria" by Kkat)
That was a great chapter. The whole scavenging part made for a good trust exercise for the group and when the building turned out to be a slaver base, that was a good twist. Nothing says bonding with your group like fighting for your life.But then this happened...
[Fizzy's horn erupted in a shower of purple light, launching forth a supersonic beam] Really, a supersonic beam? Why not a magic laser like the alicorns? That would be something a unicorn normally couldn't do. I know you can give your OC's any power you want but making weaponized sound with her horn, something that doesn't normally make noise without hitting it on something, just seems out of place and weird. You probably have your reasons for that particular power and I can't wait to see what you have planed for it but for now, it just seems weird. I can see her getting lot of headaches from that, poor girl.
4572931 I made a bad choice in wording for that section. I was pretty tired when I wrote that. But trust me, there will be an explanation for what happened. Sort of.
4575188 I like your new cover pic. Dirt looks ready to take on the world, Night Shade looks like she doesn't know why he has all the guns and Fizzy... She looks like she's eyeing up Night Shade? Is this a small hit of what's to come! If it is, I hope for Fizzy's sake that Night Shade is playing for the same team otherwise she's going to get crushed by her crush.
That was a great chapter. The whole scavenging part made for a good trust exercise for the group and when the building turned out to be a slaver base, that was a good twist. Nothing says bonding with your group like fighting for your life.But then this happened...
[Fizzy's horn erupted in a shower of purple light, launching forth a supersonic beam]
Really, a supersonic beam? Why not a magic laser like the alicorns? That would be something a unicorn normally couldn't do. I know you can give your OC's any power you want but making weaponized sound with her horn, something that doesn't normally make noise without hitting it on something, just seems out of place and weird.
You probably have your reasons for that particular power and I can't wait to see what you have planed for it but for now, it just seems weird. I can see her getting lot of headaches from that, poor girl.
4572931 I made a bad choice in wording for that section. I was pretty tired when I wrote that. But trust me, there will be an explanation for what happened. Sort of.
4575188
I like your new cover pic. Dirt looks ready to take on the world, Night Shade looks like she doesn't know why he has all the guns and Fizzy... She looks like she's eyeing up Night Shade? Is this a small hit of what's to come! If it is, I hope for Fizzy's sake that Night Shade is playing for the same team otherwise she's going to get crushed by her crush.