Found a few typos and grammar mistakes. On the summary:
Wether it's bounty hunting, mercenary work, assassinations, getting rid of monsters, or just delivering important mail, he does his job and does it good.
Whether.
Enter one job where he has to kill a psycho Steel Ranger with a hard on for killing, one of the many crazy people that will become his closest allies and best friends.
Since you are referring to someone specifically, I think it should be "closest ally and best friend". Singular, not plural.
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In the first chapter:
I turned my head to the right, seeing the mare from that I seduced into bed last night still sleeping soundly.
From what?
Maremis missile defense system
Maremi's. It needs an apostrophe.
and I was finally at the open gear shaped door of stable 37
Capitalize Stable.
We both jumped at the same time, sailing over the wagon mere inches from eachother.
Each and other needs to have a space between them.
"Stud, huh? I like it!." I was actually starting to like this mares personality a bit, aside from the insane killer part!
Mare's. Needs an apostrophe.
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After just the first chapter I must say I'm liking Tinker and...that's about it. Gunslinger doesn't seem all that interesting, though I do like the mercenary angle. Bone Crusher is just a psycho so far, not really my favorite character type. Though it was just the first chapter so hey.
Woah that's a lot of grammar mistakes! Thanks for pointing them out, I'll get to work on fixing them. I'm glad you like Tinker, and I can see where one would find Gun uninteresting. I hope that I can make him and the others interesting enough for you to keep reading about their adventures in later chapters!
Found a few typos and grammar mistakes. On the summary:
Whether.
Since you are referring to someone specifically, I think it should be "closest ally and best friend". Singular, not plural.
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In the first chapter:
From what?
Maremi's. It needs an apostrophe.
Capitalize Stable.
Each and other needs to have a space between them.
Mare's. Needs an apostrophe.
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After just the first chapter I must say I'm liking Tinker and...that's about it. Gunslinger doesn't seem all that interesting, though I do like the mercenary angle. Bone Crusher is just a psycho so far, not really my favorite character type. Though it was just the first chapter so hey.
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Woah that's a lot of grammar mistakes! Thanks for pointing them out, I'll get to work on fixing them. I'm glad you like Tinker, and I can see where one would find Gun uninteresting. I hope that I can make him and the others interesting enough for you to keep reading about their adventures in later chapters!