Rivet Turner is a maintenance pony living in Stable 12. One day while working he finds a strange message on a terminal and is thrust into the unforgiving wasteland of Equestria.
Yes it's cheap and yes it's poorly done. Looking back I really don't like it either. And I get that it was a joke about being in a hurry but kinda... I mean I go a month between updates and when I do their still under 7k words. Excuses I know but I'm still new to writing and finding time is hard.
3601030 Same here. I had a bad vibe the moment the doc insisted on bringing her. Aside from being cliche and unnecessarily cruel (did you have to give the poor pony a name, really?!), the doctor here is clearly a prime example of stupid. Didn't he realize that Apostace and his gang would love to take out the three of them (main character and others), and that the Wastelend is pretty dangerous, period?
I'd say, do the reader a kindness and either leave the pony unnamed or don't kill her off like that, but then that is your call.
P.S.
The way I expect the author's thinking goes: "Hmm, this story is a bit boring. Surely it needs some feelz! What should I do... *create new character* There we go, somepony of marginal importance. Now, to make something bad to happen to them. :{ *lightbulb* A buzzsaw to the head, that's just what I was looking for. *merciless murder of helpless character* Perfect, now my story has much more feeling!"
3601030
Yes it's cheap and yes it's poorly done. Looking back I really don't like it either. And I get that it was a joke about being in a hurry but kinda... I mean I go a month between updates and when I do their still under 7k words. Excuses I know but I'm still new to writing and finding time is hard.
3601030
Same here. I had a bad vibe the moment the doc insisted on bringing her. Aside from being cliche and unnecessarily cruel (did you have to give the poor pony a name, really?!), the doctor here is clearly a prime example of stupid. Didn't he realize that Apostace and his gang would love to take out the three of them (main character and others), and that the Wastelend is pretty dangerous, period?
I'd say, do the reader a kindness and either leave the pony unnamed or don't kill her off like that, but then that is your call.
P.S.
The way I expect the author's thinking goes: "Hmm, this story is a bit boring. Surely it needs some feelz! What should I do... *create new character* There we go, somepony of marginal importance. Now, to make something bad to happen to them. :{ *lightbulb* A buzzsaw to the head, that's just what I was looking for. *merciless murder of helpless character* Perfect, now my story has much more feeling!"
^ Obviously I hate characters dying, but still...