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I like the smell of this fic so far...
Onward! To satirical victory!
This was beautiful to read! You keep on writing this!
Oh man. The worst terror of all - a player character. And Equestria thought the fallout was bad...
And like the poster above me, yes. I was strongly tempted to upvote just from the cover and description. Had to read it, though. :P
Not going to lie. I was sold just from the cover.
This is an ingenious idea and from the description alone i'm left wondering how on earth did the myriad of FOE spin-offs not produce such a pure, simple and brilliant a concept?
On my to read list.
btw "Maybe I'd wait until I we could see Colton before offing them" only noticeable mistake, last line.
4105 words of pure entertainment.
You even made the "explaining something everybody knows about" part funny. This story is awesome, keep it up! :)
Oh, F*ck me that is funny!
Cant wait to see what kind of shenanigans will sprout from this. Though I am actually surprised that no one has thought of doing 'actual gamer' reactions to this.
Okay, now DIS gun b GUD.
*grabs popcorn, settles in*
3434765 Thanks! I'm normally quite good at catching mistakes while I write, but I can't catch everything, and because this is NaNoWriMo, more things are probably going to slip through than normal.
Ooh, not often you see a sociopath protagonist like that. Nice one.
Oh… my… fucking… god. I've been waiting for a story like this forever. Good show, good show!
I love this so far
Oh my god, yes! This is fucking glorious! Wishing you luck on your NaNoWriMo challenge, I'll be following the entire way.
You know, I actually kept that BB gun in Fallout 3. I wish there was a "Nerf or nothing"-esque perk that could make the BB gun useful for more than just setting off landmines.
Also, I'm hoping Atom's not ACTUALLY racist, and just hates everypony equally, like a good little delinquent should.
I think I just came...
All I want to know is when do you plan you updates cause I NEED TO KNOW!... When to get the popcorn ready for ;D
Hrm. Interesting. I like the way it ended, and exploding foam darts is good fun. Always nice to see more comedy surfacing around the FoE Fanfic space.
Here's to hoping things are super mega ultra fun in upcoming chapters. ^.^
The amount of effort it took not to burst out laughing while reading this ... you have no idea.
Nice to see I'm not the only one writing an FOE story for NaNo!
just started reading. and exploding foam darts that has got to be something pinkie pie came up with
Fun story. I recommend. Over.
Finally got around to starting this one. Looks like I'm in for a crazy trip
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Is anyone else getting an Ace vibe from Atom?
Which is a shame, because I used to love the smell of napalm at about 3:30 in the afternoon. It smelled like a moderate improvement in our position. And now nopony uses napalm at all!
I get the feeling you do a lot of that.
(I'm a little afraid that if I tell her Nerf guns don't explode, she'll prove me wrong.)
Kind of an odd claim to make when your species controls the weather and can change it at will.
It's one of those games with deliberately difficult controls. Like QWOP, or that octopus game.
I wouldn't expect the Wasteland to be very friendly to jokers who hide in bushes shooting random ponies with toys. You should cherish this moment; it's probably the only time in your life you'll ever get shot with a Nerf gun.
Why did I say it, even parenthetically? Why did I play God?
Ahh, the shitty Liverpool weather, rains 99% of the time.
Saw the other story featured, decided to read this one first. Really liking it so far.
You know that it is a good fic when it have you laughing out loud by the forth segment XD Instant fav it is!
I am a really big fan of NERF, even been part of an alpha test for how to mix the board game necromunda with NERF, and it was like one of the best things that I have tried in forever. I must admit that I will be disapointed if I don't read "Nerf this!" as a battlecry at some point or another
Nitpick:
"A hurried to the top of one hill and lay down." Should have been an I
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this typo made it into the print copy and it makes me so sad
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meh, in Indiana a light drizzle is a good day. if it is not raining or snowing it is winding really hard. i have literally had to hold my umbrella in front of me to shield from sideways rain.
if i ever become a gamer (ala Han Jee-Han) i will strive to achieve this perk so i can laugh at my enemies and come back and tell you about it.
Well, this is off to a legendary start.
hey, i remembered his name. of course, not alot of options on where to go with Sandy for a stallion so not really surprised.
Two paragraphs in and I already know this story’s gonna be awesome.
Also, it takes place in Britain, which is really cool as well.
But satire, especially satire on a story such as FO:E, I feel is going to be awesome.
"war sometimes changes".
well, every new weapon and many new inventions have changed the WAY wars are fought.
but the reasons for wars STARTING have always been the same: the ego of a leader.
oh, Robert Heinlein once said that wars are caused by Population Pressure...
So before I continue to write the rest of this chapter review, I need to get something out of the gate that should be addressed. I was going into this fully expecting to dislike this. A lot.
Like I knew that the author of this work really did not like the source material (and hadn’t actually read it himself by the time of writing this), and since I’m someone who REALLY enjoys the original in spite of its flaws, there was a really big compromise in me wanting to write a review about this. It’s actually why I held off from reading this work for years.
But now, after gaining the courage (and curiosity) to read this… I was actually surprised that I didn’t come out of the first chapter hating it with a fiery passion.
It had some nice stuff… but it was really boring.
So right off the bat we get introduced to Atom Smasher (who I will henceforth nickname ‘Horse Caulfield’ since she gives off that vibe), who basically is just the most self-centered and pretentious brat I’ve come to expect from pegasi characters in this setting.
She explains about herself in an exposition dump, and then just… leaves her Stable… without anything funny happening except the fact that it was really easy to leave the Stable… which honestly isn’t really all that funny.
We then waste a whole scene establishing that Horse Caulfield can’t fly despite being a pegasus, and I was actually upset because not only was it a waste of word count… but it would’ve been far more funny if Horse Caulfield did everything in her power to hide the fact that despite having winged privilege… she can’t fly.
And that fact would only be revealed in a comedic moment where she’s put in a situation where flying could’ve helped her. Really lost opportunity there.
She then meets Hard Sell and Sand Dollar (writing this made me realize that they’re both capitalist horses), and I sorta did find the prank Horse Caulfield was doing to them a bit wholesome. But it then gets boring again with really dry dialogue where nothing funny really happens. HC is presented with explosive ammunition for her Nerf Gun™, and is offered a job of being a caravan guard…
And that’s it. Just a very inconsequential ‘and then’ sort of chapter.
The ending of this chapter would’ve been better if one of the capitalist horses offered to give this explosive ammunition in return for being a caravan guard for them, but the other then argues with them that ‘no we shouldn’t be giving this kid dangerous shit, especially since they just came out of the Stable.’
Meanwhile, HC, being the troublemaker she is, just sneakily snatches one of the ammo, tries to decide ‘hmmm, where should I shoot this at?’ while the capitalist horses are arguing, and then shoots a dart at a random direction that just so happens to hit a monster's den or something, and the chapter ends with them having to deal with that.
I’m not sure if I’ll actually read the rest of this story, not because I haven’t really enjoyed the first chapter, but more because I have a lot of other stuff on my plate. Not sure if this feedback would be appreciated but eh, I thought it wouldn’t hurt to write this.
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That's completely fair - the further this story recedes into history, the more apparent the flaws of its rushed writing become, and the more I tend to recommend to readers who bounce off the first couple of chapters of this one, to just skip ahead to Make Love Not War, since Duck and Cover isn't massively consequential from an internal narrative perspective, and MLNW just has a meatier story. Unless the voice grabs you or you're holding out for when the early chapter rust shakes off and the metacommentary starts kicking in, you'll probably just have a better time with the sequel.
killing people with nerf guns cool
I've only read chapter one and im dying.
XD its nerf or nothing indeed
In this story only the important/ funny stuff gets attention. Makes it really fun to read
Do pool noodles count?