Assistance Call Out! · 5:41pm Feb 13th, 2019
Hello everyone! So, this is a first time call out for me, but I figured considering the story has so much attention and there are people that do want me to keep writing it despite my dissatisfaction with its quality, that asking if anyone would like to assist in a possible restructure of this story would not be a bad idea.
For anyone who is interested in the situation at large, please check out my comment posted on the story a few hours ago:
The future of this story is up in the air. Yes, these last few chapters were done fast to give readers what they wanted so I could forget about it for a little while and take a break. There were actauly 20 chapters written, 6 of them were cut and these most important ones re-worked to fix the context because it was starting to drag.
Right now most of the ideas I had for this a floating around, but there's a lot of things that could be considered wrong with it. Call it a negative response to things, a loss of current motivation or biting more off than I can chew with the uploads, but right now writing this is not really what I want to do. And I know as much as a story can suffer for things, writing it without the desire to right it is the worst things one can do.
If I thought it would do nearly as well, I'd take the whole thing down, keep the very start and then completely re-write, re-work and re-upload it. Make the plot more simple to follow, take away elements that I'm starting to feel more and more like they didn't work. Nevertheless, sorry to any of you have actually been enjoying this, but it's even starting to lose favor with me. There was a lot of things I did wrong here that I know I should have done better, and right now, unfortunately, the work is paying for my mistakes.
Regardless, as bad as times can be, there are still lessons to be learned here. I'll have to be more careful to ensure that any future stories don't fall into the same traps and really have to consider what happens to this. Safe to say, it may either disappear to get a complete re-work and hope people enjoy it more than or disappear altogether. An update next week is unlikely right now, regardless.
Now when I say re-work this story, I mean take it down, take it apart and put it back together with the same plot and idea only with better execution and more support from pre-readers. Looking at a lot of the issues that have been brought up with this, I can't help but feel that it seems if I'd have taken some more time to get opinions of chapters before posting, that things may have turned out better.
A few hours ago, I was pretty done with it, and about ready to just scrap the idea and try to get better results with a future story using what I'd learned from this one. However, while I still don't plan to write any more for a while, considering the stress trying to fix it and stay on the schedule has put me under, I'm not blind to the fact that a lot of time has gone into it and that is the reason I'm saying this now.
So if anyone is interested in pre-reading for this or stories in the future, ready to give honest opinions before they can be posted, then please let me know. I'm not about to give up on the story while there are people who do genuinely seem to enjoy it, but I'd much rather it be re-worked into a better state for everyone!
Nevertheless, thank you for reading!
I haven't had the chance to read your story as it is, but it sounds interesting. I have a couple of years of experience editing some decently popular stories. I don't have a huge amount of spare time, but I might be able to help out with pre-reading if you need it.
I'd totally be down to pre read. I usually have some spare time, and I'm usually able to catch a lot of minor errors. If you need help, feel free to ask!
I only got a few chapters in, but I love it, the way you weave words are fun and telling at the same time. You convey a lot with a few sentences and it shows how much good work you put in it, at least of four chapters in, I can say I like to read more, just been a bit of a busy month for me.
I look forward to reading more, no matter what you choose to do, I just hope you don't quit. 
I'd be down to pre-read. I've got more then enough free time now that I finished some stories.
Also just do what you think is best, if that is stopping and trying again in a different story then go for it.
O my the cuteness i love him.
5012738 5012461 5012489 5012551 5012561 So as you may have noticed the story had been taken down. Right now I don't know if I will just re-work it or delete it completely and re-write most of it to submit fresh. Basically only with the first two chapters and prologue remaining the same.
Anyone who does want to help pre-read, however, would be very appreciated. While it may be some time until there's a substantial amount of it to be pre-read. I'll be sure to notify anyone who's interested at a later date.
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I'm most certainly interested. Trying to become a bit more active and social. So this sounds fun to help out with. ^^
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I am indeed interested, give me a notice whenever and I'll be glad to give stuff a good once over!
I was rather a fan of the story and I do have prior experience as an editor and beta reader in my spare time. I'd love to help out if you decide go through with reworking it.
this explains the next button not working anymore, heh. i was enjoying the story so far the jump in time frame was an interesting idea. just finished a chapter and was going to hit next only for it to show me little derpy had apparently bust a hole in something and apparently lost it. was funy. now if you feel it could do with a restructuring after you destressify yourself then i'm all for it. take your time. i'm in no rush and i aint going anywhere. :3
... that seemed all over the place
For what it's worth I was really enjoying where it was going, and I really look forward to a more refined re-work of it if you end up figuring things out. Whatever you end up doing hopefully you feel better about it going forward.
What are these negative number next to the comment? Anyone know? Usually the first one to post gets a #1 not a -5, wtf?
Huh.. I was literally just about to read this story and I couldn't find it in my updates list. Thankfully I have email updates on, otherwise I would have lost it. I shall follow with interest.
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I would be interested in pre-reading, whenever that is, as I did enjoy the story a lot and I was looking forward to reading more. It was a genuinely fresh idea that reminded me of some more recent and successful isekai.
What part of this story did you enjoy writing?
What was the thing that made you say to yourself "I want to write this story." ?
5013786 Believe it or not, it was the adventure part that was coming. It really was just taking too long to get there. think I was trying to go for the effect of slowing tigs right down so everyone was just as shocked as the character when thigs suddenly kicked off again.
The changeling's character too, though once again it was taking him too long to get out of his mopiness. Looking at the parts that have been re-written for this already is almost starting to seem like a totally different story, yet still running off of the same concept. The pacing is faster now and characterization too, yet if the new version is posted I'm going to have a few pre-readers make sure it's not in the same place as last time.
5013786 5012489 5012561 5013221 5012738 5012461 So as far as I have planned everything post the end of chapter 2 will be reworked, the flashbacks will be kept in place and the chapter will be relatively the dame, however, more effort is going to be put in the like to the story's opening. I hope to have chapters 3 - 14 reworked and ready for anyone to look over pre-reading style sometime in the middle next week. After that, the story should be ready for re-posting and continuation. I will PM Gdoc links and details to anyone interested in helping out.
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Adventure? That sounds indeed different. It seemed more like a mix of Slice of Life and possible Adventure in the future. It definitely would make sense then to restructure it to serve the adventure part better. I assume the many scenes from the past did slow down the adventure as well. Anyway, if you want I can offer my help with prereading, or anything else you need help with.
5014113 Thanks, if you managed to read the previous version in this new version I'm basically planning on keeping the first 2 chapters and prologue, then time jump to have him wake up on the day everything goes wrong with a little exposition in the new version of chapter 3. So no Canterlot, and no flashbacks. We'll get all the characters how they are eight years later, not thirteen and characterization will be based on their reactions to each other as well as the MC.
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Yup. I have read the previous version. That is how I stumbled upon this blogpost. Certainly sounds promising. Only question I have is, what is MC? Maybe I'm just overlooking something obvious since it is close to midnight right now.
5014164 Oh, sorry. I only just learned it was short for main character too
. Saw people throwing it around and was like... What?
Hi, so I had a tab with this story open in the background in a sort of reading queue, the description really interested me. I finished some other stories, returned to the tab, and refreshed, wanting to finally read the story, only to see a 404. Even if you think the story was bad, most people seem to have really liked it, judging by the final 458:29 like:dislike ratio. That is REALLY good, even if you think otherwise.
I still want to read this story, do you have any google doc or archive somewhere?
5014458 The story will hopefully be back by Tuesday the 26 or a few days before. The re-write is simply changing a few pieces of characterization, a few parts that were dragon done pacing and re-work the flash back so they make sense.