A message to all who are following One does not simply have a crossover adventure in Equestria and to those who did not like the story · 4:55pm Dec 18th, 2012
Before we begin I would like anyone who knows someone on the site who took issue with my story to link them to this blob post, thank you.
As I write this I am also Playing Mass Effect so forgive any errors in this blog. You will notice that the first chapter of the story has been taken down. I want everyone to read this statement...
IT SUCKS!!!
It is awful for a good number of reasons, frankly I am slightly embarrassed by it. I suck at grammar and Pace but I'm annoyed with it because of a few reasons.
1) I have no excuse or this, I spelt 'Aragon's' name wrong. Everyone and their grandmother has told me this but I have fixed that at least.
2) Sauron wasn't meant to be in this. In my defence this is an alternate reality version so anyone's argument that it's weak falls flat on its ass because people (or ponies) can be very different in different circumstances. aka. Upbringing, environment etc.
3) Boromir was not written to character. I'm not sure why I wrote him as I did but I will definitely be fixing that.
4) Pace sucked. Don't worry though, I have a good editor who will be helping me in fixing these issues.
5) Although I know people didn't like the Big Daddy inclusion, please. Trust me. I do feel people were a but trigger happy on immediately hating that when they have no idea where I'm going with it.
Look, basically I am going to fix this story. I am rewriting the first chapter from scratch. Also I want to add comedy elements to it so I may be putting that tag up. I am going to fix:
- The Pace
- Boromir (so he acts like him so he won't say any slang)
- Rename anarchist pony
- Grammar will be looked at.
- Likely cut ties to my other stories (apart from Equestria needs a Doctor)
- Possibly lose Big Daddy.
etc.
Finally do you have any suggestions for the story?
Do you think more Lord of the Rings characters should pop up like Aragorn?
What ponies do you think Boromir should meet?
What do hate the most about the story?
Are there any redeeming qualities to it?
Let me know in the comments section below. i want to make this story really good and with you guys busting my balls (not to much) I think this could be really good.
I here by claim this comment section in the name of me! FIIIIIRST!
What Carnage didn't include in the blog: Now if you exuse me, I got someone to shoot
Me:
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Sorry for being a lousy pre-reader, I don't know what went wrong
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I'd like to see something between Shining Armor and Boromir, Those two might get along well.
I direct you to this.
But I liked it. ;A;
Well anyway, I will look forward to the rewrite.
Another featured author who claims his story sucked...FattyMagee fever is spreading.
I personally. Would. Like. To see the bigdaddy stay
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i didn't say I was definitely getting rid of it...
Yeah. The Big Daddie seems a bit out of place, but I say it could weave a MUCH better story if written and incorporated well. I don't really mind how the story went anyway.
I did find it a bit...weird but I would still stay, Pleased to see that some of the things will be changed/fixed as it will only strengthen the story.
But I wanted Boromir to slay the Big Daddy.
I think you should add more LOTR characters in, since this IS an alternate reality after all
Oh well, a rewrite is okay I guess, but here I was hoping for a unserious story but you're the boss.
PS: Rants about Aragorn's name being spelled wrong. Spells it wrong in the rant.
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625785 Yeah. It was stupid :(
So basically what you're saying is:
90% of rewrites suck more than the original. Sure this fic sucks. I agree, it sucks major ass. But it was a fun read. Rewrite it and in one way or another, you're going to lose whatever precious little detail that made it popular and fun.
You should just keep it the way it is, maybe change Boromir's lines a little to reflect his character better. That's it.
627946 When I say rewrite I meant "Just add and clean clean everything up" Nothings really being removed from the original chapter
Thats kinda not what you said... but ok.