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How is this an alternate universe story?
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Apologies. I misunderstood the tag. I removed it to avoid confusion.
could be interesting keep it up.
started reading it it's pretty nice so far
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Thank you! I appreciate you taking the time to read, any and all feedback and criticism!
Now this I've got to see; I'll be willing to see how good Z is going to be training with Rainbow Dash. When you view your world with an attitude of gratitude, you are training yourself to focus on the good in life.
I really like how you handle Spike. It's rare enough that authors include him at all, much less give him a chance to show off his enthusiasm, naïveté, and relationships with Twilight and her friends, and all without him even being the focus of the scene.
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Thank you! To be honest, his parts were some of my favorite to write in that chapter! I'm glad that you liked it. And thank you for the feedback! It's always appreciated!
So far so good, Serenity Southerland. This new chapter is going very well. I'm sure the doctors will figure out what's going on with Z's wings and I'm really hoping she'll do some great training with Rainbow Dash soon. Your dreams are what define your individuality. They have the power to give you wings and make you fly high.
I have this feeling getting her to fly will involve pushing her off a cloud. I mean that's pretty much the same as jumping into the ravine.
I would suggest (being a Pegasus) trying fish, but I imagine that would prove rather difficult to pull off. Having little to no dexterity, at the moment, and all.
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I'll definitely keep that in mind as an option in the future, thank you!
It's definitely not Rainbow Dash. Not this generation, anyway.
At home we call that, Teotwawki, for short.
I was under the impression that those who do can always find a friend.
Uh, sorry; wrong franchise.
The answer to all of the above is yes.
That would be a mite. Sorry; I'll stop being a grammar Nazi now.
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Thank you! I actually really appreciate that. It's hard to catch all the little errors since I'm my only editor.
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hey; it happens. Constructive criticism being a good thing, and all.
DEstructive criticism, however,,, Let's just say that once a comment on a story I had said, verbatim
To my lingering regret, I deleted the whole story. I was also literally speechless for the next half hour or so.
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That's awful! I'm sorry that happened to you. Have you ever thought about giving it another shot?
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I've... considered it? I might just reboot it, sometime.
Admittedly, that story had flaws, here and there, but I say in my profile description that I might make changes occasionally.
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If you decide to, I'd love to give it a read. I know harsh criticism can be really disheartening, especially since I have a hard time with self-doubt and being overly critical with my own self/work. Just remember that as long as you are happy with your work, and enjoy what your are doing, it makes it worthwhile, no matter what it is. And that will come through in your work as well.
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Well, you know what they say about being one's own harshest critic...
I do, however, have a few stories (some are even actually finished) with rather positive ratings. A few that I'm especially proud of are
- MLP: FiM
- Comedy
- Random
- Slice of Life
In the aftermath of Secrets and Pies, Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie are making up, when Soarin (who had followed the prismatic ponk to Ponyville) decides to add his two bits- MLP: FiM
- Comedy
- Slice of Life
When Rarity is invited to a fancy party, Rainbow Dash surprisingly feels the need to come with. Knowing that she's less than optimally classy, she turns to Princess Cadence (who is in town to visit Twilight) for help,- MLP: FiM
Casting your first major spell; something any unicorn filly or colt looks forward to!Oddly, this immediately occurred to me upon reading that line.
I think it's a great chapter, Serinity Southerland. I like it. I'm crossing my fingers if the doctor is going to check Z's wings that way, she can train with Rainbow Dash to learn how to fly. Everyone has the ability to increase resilience to stress. It requires hard work and dedication, but over time, you can equip yourself to handle whatever life throws your way without adverse effects to your health. Training your brain to manage stress won't just affect the quality of your life, but perhaps even the length of it.
It's curious how her wings are all but useless, her brain not knowing what to do with them, at least on a conscious level, while she was able to speak, hear, and read Equestrian as soon as she was dumped in the Everfree.
As for the unknown changeling, the portal makes it obvious this is another lost human. The mental torture takes this down a dark path quickly, however.
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As for her wings, that's coming rather soon. 😉
Dreams 2 is kind of more like a teaser for another story based in the same timeline. I haven't released that one yet, but I have the first few chapters worked out though, so I could begin posting that one as well sometime soon.
twilight sparkle, the royal handymare
after reading for about 10 chapters, i have to say this story wasn't my liking. but fans of five scrolls or silververse might find this right in their comfort zone.
this is story without body or social dysphoria as protagonist's body were preloaded everything including equestria-specific social instincts. home longing was downplayed and being dominated by anime-like gay baiting.
you supposed to giggles at how cute protagonist is. but i mostly cringe at it.
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I appreciate the feedback! I'm sorry it isn't for you, but I really do thank you for giving it a try, and you can always DM me if you have particular qualms or questions.
And you've lost me. Good start but random unwanted transgenderization and loss of identity turn me off.
Methinks something might be happening with the Princesses and her lack of magic soon.
Good chapter.
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I appreciate you giving it a try though! Thanks for taking the time!
Edit: Oh, there's also a grammar error in there, lol. Thank you for quoting that section.
I think you did a great job on your new chapter, Serinity Southerland, I really enjoyed it. The lotus sisters did a good job on Z's wings and I'm sure I'll be able to see that she's going to do some intense training with Rainbow Dash. Life is about being a versatile athlete and training in all realms of life.
Heh. My grandfather pulled an orchard up by the roots, one tree at a time, with a team of horses and block and tackle. He said the last one in a row was the hardest, because there wasn't a next tree to use for leverage.
I'm very much enjoying this story.
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I'm glad! Thank you for reading!
one of my uncles had a small orchard on his property, twenty or so trees. I didn't realize how easily they came up though, that's interesting!
Thank you! +1 point just for that
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I wouldn't say they came up easily. We do know how, ah, enthusiastic the CMCs are.
Admitting one's failings and owning up to them like this is admirable. It can be very difficult. But sometimes there's a huge difference between what you feel is right and what you know is right. This is just right, right?
As Fluttershy might say,"Baby steps."
As this is your first step into horse words will be leaving some stuff to hopefully help you improve when I actually get to reading this in a little while
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Thank you for taking the time to read a first time writer of horse words! As I am but a neophyte, but I shall accept and review any and all comments and constructive criticisms from my elders with grace and humility.
That's okay, I enjoyed it. (Squeal excitedly) I can't wait to see Zinnia training with Rainbow dash. I'm eager to see how it'll turn out! To fly we have to have resistance.
That's a hell of a statement!
Good chapter.
I don't think that's quite how it goes.
That brings to mind...
Oooh. Now that's what I call a metaphor.
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I actually borrowed it from an official post service
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I'm glad you like it