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Through scientific invention, Twilight shielded her eyes from witnessing the inevitable deaths of her friends.
And her wife.
It worked.
For a while.
In the latent space, Twilight searches for an image of Rarity she can still see.
An experiment in dramatic verse prose poetry. Sentences metered in iambic pentameter.
Written as an entry into the Science Fiction Contest III.
Cover art (and art within) illustrated by me.
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Am gonna read, but before I do so, I wanna say I really love your cover art <33 (and those of all your fics really)
This is absolutely beautiful. The concept is tight and heart-wrenching, the prose is lovely and very well-smithed. It had already earned a favorite from me long before I reached the final stretch, where you make use of all your tricks. Really just a stunning work. I think the image of Twilight briefly stopped my heart.
Best of luck in the judging - I see many accolades in your future!!
This felt gross.
(positively! Tho I feel I didn't do the poetry justice)
When I realized the I love yous were in every empty line and not just at the end
God damn that was incredible.
Amazing stuff! Very good use of a lot of artistic tricks, particularly at the end, but the part where Twilight takes different photos of Rarity stands out too. The concept itself is intriguing and heartbreaking, particularly once I realized the technological terms weren't metaphors.
Fantastic work on the art too.
I felt like this was going to make me cry when I read the description. I wasn't wrong. It was just crafted very thoughtfully. I will be thinking about this for a long while.
Holy fuck.
I'm going to need more time to review this but this is a masterpiece. Thank you for sharing it with me.
Hello, fellow contestant! Here's my review:
I see why this is so highly-rated. It is excellent. It takes a well-worn trope of "Immortal Twilight Outlives Her Friends and is Sad" and gives it a tragic Twilight Zone (no pun intended) style twist. The prose is also deliciously stylish and elevates the tragedy further.
For minor nitpicks, I think some of the dialogue sounds unnatural.
And, while I'm probably in the minority here, I don't think doing some of the scenes in poetry was as effective as just doing the scene in prose would have been. But that might just be subjective taste.
I do love what you've done with the interface and incorporating the faded text and images to represent the deterioration Twilight experiences.
Great job!