"When an hateful dragon looses his ability to fly and meets a Pegasus who just wants to help, what will happen? Will she heal his wing as well as his heart?"
It's a GarbleShy Ship and I hope every one enjoy's it. So with out further ado, Allons Y!
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"When an hateful dragon looses his ability to fly and meets a Pegasus who just wants to help, what will happen? Will she heal his wing as well as his heart?"
It's a GarbleShy Ship and I hope every one enjoy's it. So with out further ado, Allons Y!
It’s finally out! I love it so much!
FluttershyxGarble? Yeah, I almost hope I lose to your fic in the contest.
It's also 4K over the limit...
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I thought you wrote it could be stretched between 15K and 20K? that's what I read at least.
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Pretty sure he said 15K was the max, give or take. 19K is quite a bit past that limit.
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It was in the posts between Jake the Army guy and Purple prose. Jake posted this,
If Healing Wings still doesn't qualify, then I can't enter it. The story would suffer for it if I had to cut the word count that much and as an author, I can't do that. It's up to Jake the Army Guy, if he excepts it, then it's good if not... Oh well, that's the way the cookie crumbles.
Before I read this, what is the Gore tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?
i just dont see how that ship can sail he clearly thinks dragons are better and fluttershy wouldnt be able to handle his aggressive attitude
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there's a part near the end where a characters head gets crushed.
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Fluttershy dominated a fully grown dragon in the show, when all of the other more physical of the mane 6 couldn't. The Stare's effects aren't clearly defined so I took some creative license and it cowed Garbles more aggressive side and bolstered Fluttershy's courage. plus in this story he acts like a big meanie mc meanie pants cause he had a abussive childhood, His true nature wasn't like that.
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so you combined bully and tsunderer aspects thats an interesting combo i'll put it in my read later since i have to sleep for work now
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Thanks for giving it a chance. sleep well.
The fic is on the wordy side with a great deal of unnecessary details. I'll bet that if you trim the fat a bit, you can squeeze this story into Jake's 15k word limit. Here, look at this.
It's not important to note what time it is specifically, just that it's in the afternoon, so you can just say "It was afternoon as Garble..." This is also not a good time to describe him. A better time would be when Fluttershy first sees him. So rather than "Normally, the red-scaled, highland dragon teen would think..." It would be better to go for "Normally, he would think...". If you go through the fic with a fine-toothed comb, so to speak, you'll probably slash a good number of words from your word count.
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thanks for the input. I'll give it some thought.
Ah nice Rudolph the Red-Nosed Reindeer reference
Oh no you should never ever do that 😥
Fluttershy
And this is before we discovered that he had a sister name smolder which she mentioned during season 8 but we never got the name but then we got the confirmation in season 9 which that's still blew my mind
Fluttershy
Actually that kind of makes sense during the G5 how spike is a little different when he grew up well except for he's not a giant but whatever it's still pretty interesting
Okay I know this is way before smolder came to the picture but I'm sure she would never do that to garble
Yeah that was your fault on that one
Yeah I'm really glad that thorax made a huge difference not just only for his changelings but the other creatures out there as well
Garble
Fluttershy
How dare you say that you poor excuse for a dragon 😡
Fluttershy
Wow I got to say a very unexpected shipping but yet somehow I kind of like it this was a very sweet story although there was a couple of spelling error especially on Fluttershy and garble so it looks like there was a big huge storm and Fluttershy had to take cover from it but then she heard somebody got hurt and she was right but it turns out to be a dragon when she was afraid but she couldn't leave him out there so decided to heal him up and it's also turned out to be garble the first meeting was a little rocky but then they still starting to talk with each other and even open up about their past and I got to say it is pretty sad but pretty nice that they can talk to each other about this and Fluttershy decide for him to come along with her and then throughout the weeks on the road they started to have connection with each other even falling in love and once they reach to Appaloosa they finally reached to their patients which turns out the Komodo dragon was kind of sick but worse he was dying and the owner was pretty devastated but wanting to give him the last moment together with him and with that he passed away and it was nice of garble to do this for her but then things really escalated when his older brother attacking them and of course he's going to be one of those dragons are going to Rebellion against dragon lord ember and garble was overpowered by him but then when he saw his brother attacking Fluttershy he hits back in full force and he was about to kill him but Fluttershy stopped him for making the big mistake and he was showing Mercy but unfortunately the Dragon decided to hit back and Instant Karma basically got him killed and it looks like they're about to head back and they even fell in love with that 5 years later it turns out they got married with each other and have kids and it looks like garble and Spike let bygones be bygones which that's nice and I got to say this was a pretty cool story keep up the good work