Equestria's first interstellar ship is crewed by the best and brightest Equestria has to offer. Twilight Sparkle and her friends are determined to uncover the origin of the mysterious alien Signal, no matter what it costs. A comment-driven story.
Far from Canterlot and forced to work in gem mines for cruel Diamond Dogs, a young unicorn named Bone Marrow's pursuit of his cutiemark reveals a unique talent: raising the dead.
Two centuries after Twilight Sparkle's ascension, the pony races are nearly gone. The ancient kingdom of Equestria cannot be traversed safely, and deadly beasts roam the land. Will ponies recover from this horror, or is the time of their rule over?
Legend has it that on the longest day of the thousandth year, the stars will aid in her escape. There once was a stallion who faced Nightmare Moon and was sealed away with her. Now he returns in the modern age, hoping to find a new path.
She can swim far and wide across the waters of Equestria, but it's not enough. There are places above those waters, places she plans to reach. Where biology failed her, her mind would succeed. Equestria better be ready, because she plans to visit!
It just occurred to me that approaching you via PM may have been rather rude of me and for that I am sincerely sorry; I'm still learning my way around doing this sort of thing.
As I said, if you aren't interested in working on the story please just say so, that's perfectly fine, If you are interested I also realized I didn't explain what I needed help with on the story front. Again, sorry.
My main concern is grammar and spelling. Followed by the characterization of Celestia 7 Amira in the early scenes and a bit of Cadence at the end, that's all in the early and final scenes. I'm also concerned about scenery/action/dialogue descriptions, as i'm a bit worried I didn't put enough personality or clarification into some scenes or the characters. I left some notes on the Googledoc as well.
As I said though, i'm sorry if i'm bothering you and will stop if you ask me.
Thanks for the fave.
It just occurred to me that approaching you via PM may have been rather rude of me and for that I am sincerely sorry; I'm still learning my way around doing this sort of thing.
As I said, if you aren't interested in working on the story please just say so, that's perfectly fine,
If you are interested I also realized I didn't explain what I needed help with on the story front. Again, sorry.
My main concern is grammar and spelling. Followed by the characterization of Celestia 7 Amira in the early scenes and a bit of Cadence at the end, that's all in the early and final scenes. I'm also concerned about scenery/action/dialogue descriptions, as i'm a bit worried I didn't put enough personality or clarification into some scenes or the characters. I left some notes on the Googledoc as well.
As I said though, i'm sorry if i'm bothering you and will stop if you ask me.
i hope he gets better soon