Cozy Glow has opened a lemonade stand by suggestion of Twilight. Her techniques for reformation are gonna need some work.
Featured on 4/23/22
As a writer you ask yourself to dream while you're awake. As an editor you ask yourself how to change a story while leaving it the same.
Page generated in 0.095 seconds
Total duration
608 users online
920,099 hits today, 2,130,388 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Did you consider adding a profanity tag? I was rather put off by the multiple counts of swearing in the first 300 words, and surprised at such vulgarity.
11220352
Ah, yeah I’ll add that. Had it Teen rated because of that, figured that was enough to infer that it would be content that would need the rating.
... A smoothie.
11220363
Thank you.
At first the cover made me think that Teen came from some rather questionable sales practices. Buy the lemonade or I blow your brains out; Buy one lemonade, get a deadly weapon free; Ect.
I make Teen stories without profanity, it’s hardly the only cause of a Teen rating.
And here I thought she peed in the lemonade. Also, the story felt kinda, dunno, underdeveloped? It didn't even start for good and then it was over.
11220418
Yeah, I’m gonna be honest I threw this together to try and break through my writers block I’ve been on for the last few months. I felt like I just wanted to get the joke across and not have it get old, you can only threaten ponies enough until it gets annoying ya know. It was really based off of TomSka’s literal drink video. So, nothing too in depth to flesh out.
"You going to buy some lemonade right?"
Only if you throw in complementary hugs.
I laughed out loud.
The thumbnail makes me think Cozy Glow is dealing weapons alongside the lemonade.
11220876
BUCKING CALLED IT
Very 4chan.
I've never seen a story so perfectly capture this energy:
Um... What? Am I reading this correctly? Because I cannot tell what you meant for this to say.
11229333
Yeah, I could have worded that better. But the idea was "what would help Cozy Glow become reformed?" and since I suck at grammar I just threw in a semi-colon instead of a question mark or restructuring the sentence and the answer was supposed to be "selling lemonade".
11229440
Ah, okay. Thanks!
Well, Cozy probably has a bright future as a mugger. That's kind of better than megalomaniac who steals all the magic.