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"Look upon the fields in which I grow my Fucks...and you will see that they are Barren..."

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The staff of Monsters Intergalactic have had a long, proud tradition of scaring the crap out of children for generations, across many worlds, all for a good cause. In their history, they've run across very few they couldn't eventually take down.

But this one nine-year-old filly is...different. Despite their best efforts, she refuses to even show the slightest bit of fear, no matter what they do. So...it's time to bring out the big guns.

There is one monster so terrifying, so horrible, even the other monsters won't speak his name.

And he's about to meet his greatest challenge.

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Nice Monsters Inc. reference. I am disappointed that the Mane Six ( HEROES themselves) , or even Diamond Tiara didn't learn of this, and didn't help Spoon sooner. At least this "terrifying' monster has morals.

Comment posted by Irispony deleted Apr 19th, 2022

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It's very rude to promote your own story in someone else's comment section...especially when it has nothing to do with that person's story.

Edit: Just found out this is a bot, and will soon be deleted.

Oh. Well. This took an unexpected turn. I can only hope that Silver absolutely ruins her father the moment somepony else can secure custody of her. I'm sure Mr. Rich will be happy to have her over long-term.

A well-executed collision of two very different types of monster. Thank you for it, and best of luck in the judging.

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You're quite welcome, and thank you for reading!

I almost skipped this because of the one red tag, but I decided (hoped) it couldn't be too bad in only 1K words. While the implications are very dark, overall the story was satisfying.

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I appreciate your reading, but I have to ask: what "red tag?"

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...but I have to ask: what "red tag?"

The sex one. I generally avoid all similar tags. I try to write wholesome fics, and that's what I prefer to read. Sorry I wasn't clear.

Comment posted by -TheStoryteller- deleted Jun 10th, 2022

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Perfectly understandable!

If wholesome stories are what you prefer, then this Group, Rated 'E' for Everyone is one you should check out.

Most of my work tends to lean towards the more...hmm..."saucier" side of the fandom.

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If wholesome stories are what you prefer...

With some 5M words spread across a couple to-read lists, plus all the sequels not included on said lists, I can't say I'm "looking" for much currently. It seems finding potentially interesting stories is a lot easier than getting them read. :facehoof: On the other hand, reading all the 1K contest entries is proving an artificial boost to my completed story count. :pinkiehappy:

"Fire me, Boss! I can't take it anymore!" the hairy beast cried. His massive shoulders shook as he sat before the desk, buried his head in his claws, and sobbed like a little girl. "She's impossible! Nothing I do can get to her!"

His Boss sighed, then got up and offered him a tissue, which he gratefully took and blew his nose like a foghorn. "Now, calm down, Fleegon. You're one of my best Scarers! Surely there's something you haven't thought of?" the Boss offered hopefully.

oh hey, Monsters Inc.! or the same great concept reïnvented independently, either way, an awesome premise to collide with MLP and see what happens.

also, ironic that he is characterized as sobbing like a "little girl" when he's talking about how a little girl is difficult to scare!

One he'd come to meet was standing a few short inches from his face, with two red eyes like slits and a grin of glistening fangs. The Boss suppressed the scream about to explode out of him, but he did jerk a couple of steps back.

dang, when a creature scares the boss of a child-scaring monster agency so easily, you know it's good at its job!

That morning, Silver awoke with a start and sat straight up in bed. Something horrible was going to happen in her room tonight. She didn't know how she knew.

Silver Sense, like Pinkie Sense!

As night closed around Ponyville and the Spoon mansion, the little filly reluctantly made it up to her room on stiff legs.

it is kind of funny to imagine this small town having two separate families rich enough to have mansions and/or servants just kinda around

Unsteady hoofsteps approached the room, and a drunken stallion's voice called out, "Silllllver! Daaaaddy's home!" It then sensed the child's heartbeat shoot up, and she got out of bed and crawled underneath it with him!

"Move over!" she urgently whispered. "And shut up! He'll hear you!"

and oof, that would sadly explain why Silver has no fear at all of monsters, when she lives with one that is far worse. not quoting the next paragraph because it's doubly oof

Before he could start, Silver crawled out from under the bed and shouted, "No, Mister Monster! Don't kill him! Mom will cry!"

and augh, that is just so heartbreaking, that the child is thinking of protecting the adults in her life when they have shown that they deserve no such consideration and love. what an awful inversion, but so sadly true to life. really hate this world sometimes

"You are very brave, Child. I will be back to make sure you are alright."

"I don't think I'll be having any more trouble out of Dad from now on. But I'd love to see you again!"

i really do want to believe in this being a clean-cut, simple, happy ending, and i certainly hope that at the very least the Creature does successfully protect Silver from her father from now on, but augh. this true monster getting to just continue live his life as if nothing happened, only kept in line by a monster under the bed...

The Boss met the Creature for the report. He smiled up at It. "That scream she gave was off the charts! I knew you were the right Monster for the job!"

and heh, if that is all it takes, one would think there would be more collaboration between monsters and the children they are assigned to scare, and it would not take such horrific circumstances. or maybe this is the start of something new?


certainly lives up to the "Dark" tag, as lighthearted as the tone got to before the end. the eponymous Monster was a terrifying and horrible creature indeed!

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Monsters Inc. reference this is not it's a reference to a different comic that's basically the same thing just with no ponys.

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it was something i saw on youtube

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ivF7NQTZnRU&ab_channel=ComicLand heres the link to the youtube that starts with the comic i was thinking of

Ah yes, the "Charlotte and Mr. Monster" sequence as ponies. Quite good on the descriptions.

*blink*

I...was not expecting anything like this...other than her going thru or experiencing somthing worse than a mere monster trying to scare her...was not expecting a drunken dad like that tho...even with a child in the room I would not have let filth like that off the hook like that

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