I can see a steady improvement in the quality of the writing, especially for a very young beginner, despite still having some consistency issues I have noted before, it is starting to have a more coherent world despite being primarily focused as a fetish story. The only slight annoyance I have are the incomplete chapters which were updates regularly making it hard to notice any updates on the progress. Still, I hope you will manage to reach a satisfying ending for yourself. Keep up with the writing, I am sure this is a great learning experience for your next story you will write.
I can see a steady improvement in the quality of the writing, especially for a very young beginner, despite still having some consistency issues I have noted before, it is starting to have a more coherent world despite being primarily focused as a fetish story. The only slight annoyance I have are the incomplete chapters which were updates regularly making it hard to notice any updates on the progress. Still, I hope you will manage to reach a satisfying ending for yourself. Keep up with the writing, I am sure this is a great learning experience for your next story you will write.