The manliness... The level... It's... Over 9000!

Well, this chapter was actually pretty good. though now I find myself having trouble thinking of the accent.

I'm starting to reconsider whether or not I should narrate this story; it's gonna be so damn long by the end.

Having started and finished this story in a single afternoon, that was...interesting.

Now that he has wings the sky rodeo can probably return without the fear of him falling to his death. Speaking of wings does he have to preen and do they shed? He should try to get a job with the weather so he can move out of Twilight's basement.

Seems the only company he can have that shares a similar mind to him is Celestia.They make for a dangerous duo. If he wanted to give Equestia the biggest middle finger in history he would share some of the alcohol that AJ is stashing. A drunk Celestia would probably equal a hilarious Apocalypse.

If Twilight ever found out who Z was...it would be glorious. On that note, what would Twilight get if she tried to summon another human with the spell? Would it work and bring an actual human and not a construct of Discord's creation?

Dat last paragraph... WAT

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These are diary entries. That means he keeps them hidden somewhere. If Twilight ever finds them and reads them... Well, he's hoping that doesn't happen.

Sigh, I don't even know what a Zorro is sadly. And I am curious about the letter cutie mark. 25 chances (if we stick with english) and a possibility is his name. But then again there is "I" for individualism, independence, etc. Are you going to bring it up later on?

Why does he write "because, fuck you" in his JOURNAL so much?

This is the best chapter yet! Damn I sound sexy when I read this with an accent..

1185913 i also had trouble with the accent, so i had read it in a Spanish accent it was brilliant!

1796826 Zorro is a famous fictional rebellious spanish swordsman...
you know what here is his wiki .-: Zorros Wiki :-. thats all the info you need on him.

HA! It's funny because I keep imagining you having a Scottish accent this entire time! I just couldn't help it!

Sadness, this is the first time a chapter has actually made me feel sad, in both a good and bad way.

I'm guessing the true letter of his cutie mark is "Q"?

Yeah, he's a sociopath.

This chapter, again, shows that his remark about how he didn't want a relationship built on appearances if Luna turned herself human was complete bull. He's perfectly capable of being attracted to them, just not their bodies. He was attracted to Twilight when she was a human (even if mostly because it had been so long since he'd seen a girl).

Also, despite him saying he was Scottish, I couldn't help reading this aloud in what I like to think was a damn good Antonio Banderas impression. Because no good sir, fuck you.

Tell me, my dear, have you ever before danced with the devil in the pale moonlight?

After re-reading this chapter, it occurred to me that she really did. Hah!

Well I guess now if he does turn pony and gets his cutie mark and twilight sees it he's fucked even if it is a different letter she can put two and two together

I sure as hell hope he's not dead. Even if he is partly discord.

For a guardian, Twilight was ranking about as well as the parents from Rugrats.

Lines like this are why I fell in love with you.

And my accent was scotish, because fuck you!

Tell me, my dear, have you ever before danced with the devil in the pale moonlight?

Really? After all of this time, no one mentioned where this reference was from? For shame readers. For shame.

Don't you know you should never rub another man's rhubarb?

“What is a name but what a stallion is called?”

Haha! I thought about castlevania here:
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Dracula: WHAT IS A NAME?! *glass shatters* A MISERABLE LITTLE PILE OF VOCALS!! BUT ENOUGH TALK, LET'S DANCE!!!

You know what's strange? Whenever I read Nav talk or think, especially the funnier parts of his dialogues, I imagen the voice actor of Sokka from 'Avatar: The Last Airbender' for him. I don't know why, it just settled with me, probably because I saw some episodes of 'Book 3' lately. Sure Nav is cursing considerably more than Sokka, but somehow I can't help but to think this voice would suite him, since he also share's somewhat of the same kind of humour (the sarcasm and the irony in his words). Although he'd sound more educated of course and has a better choice of words. Nav would also talk less in a high pitched voice (less screaming, Sokka does that alot) and gain a sarcastic undertone everytime he makes a joke.
If you dont know what I mean watch this:

I personally think 0:56, 2:53, 3:15, 3:43, 4:50 is the pitch level he would generally use for narration, talking and thinking.

3255836 Uhh, he has a dark, masculine voice, it was explained in the winter wrap up chapter 'There was a pause in the song where a dark, strong and masculine male voice would've fit perfectly.' Plus he has a southern accent, maybe not much but that's what we were told.

When the dancing scene came this song started playing:

Gonna be honest, I miss the old version of this chapter.

But this is nice too...

Why must you make me choose? Both the original story line and new one are fabulous.

I have to say that I really am enjoying these stories! They are all fabulously written and highly addictive.

There is one mistake I have found in this chapter, where Nav says: "I spit the wood out."

In the context of the sentence, I believe it should be spat instead. I understand you rewrote a lot of these so mabye it is from that? Anyway, I love the story and can't wait to read more!!!!!!!

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Fixed.

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This chapter's only eight thousand words. That's about half the size of my average chapter. And besides, surely that's not considered long. Aren't all stories like this? I don't really look at any others, so I just assumed this was average.

3697621 and yet they are soooooooo good

I really like this story but dam jaded much? (or hypocrite?) he tells her she needs to change with the times yet he himself refuses 2. I myself would see if the spell she uses to change me from pony to man could to change to a spell that would give me the best of both worlds a hybrid (because I'm weird like that )

3240693 Batman. 1989. Jack Nickelson. Classic.

...If I was smarter, I would have foreseen the beginnings of a very big problem that night.

Hmmm....for a smartass, you're pretty dumb, Navi.

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Um, link please? Also, enjoy the story. It's hella long, but also absolutely worth every second of reading. I wish you the best of luck...

Wow what an awesome chapter, and I can hardly wait to read the next chapter, but for now I must go to bed good morning, since it's 1:31 here

...I am REALLY surprised that Nav didn't get yelled at or dungeon'd for his foul standard language preference. That is all i'm saiyan (saying) for now...

Nav is about as dense as I was in Middle-school... and about as angsty too... oh, and derogatory for no reason...

You know what, Nav acts pretty much exactly how I was in Middle-school... but with a touch less weeaboo. You sure he's 18?

I'm twitching as much as someone diffusing a bomb, all these jokes, and mildly pushing off that sexual offense. I'm waiting for the next rape..... god help me.

3971889 Because dem ponies don`t know what those words mean...like f*ck for example...they just brush it off as a human thing...you know how ponies are man...
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Luna is best Princess!

Huh. Interesting. So this is turning into a problem...Luna is so falling for him, isn't she? And I just remembered this is all a plan of Discord's.
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Why did I put off reading this for so long? This is amazing.

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Luna is so falling for him, isn't she? And I just remembered this is all a plan of Discord's.

Oh shit, do I need to go re-read chapter 1? I don't remember the part about Nav and Luna in Discord's grand plan...

What say you leave that old relic behind and spend some time with the most beautiful mare in Equestria?” “Not interested.
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A flame will light a room. The moon lights the entire sky and all the world under it. And what is your flame, that will flicker and die, when compared to the moon, as eternal and unchanging as the stars themselves

You missed out,” she said as some stupid attempt at saving face or possibly getting the last word, since she turned around right after. “On a disease (speaking of which, on not of)

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4281544 It was never pointed out, yet, remember that revealing all your cards at once in a game of wits is never a good idea.

3697627 never change dude, never change

“...Sure. But don’t expect any poems from me.”

“A flame will light a room. The moon lights the entire sky and all the world under it. And what is your flame, that will flicker and die, when compared to the moon, as eternal and unchanging as the stars themselves?”

So much for no poetry, that was easily the most poetic thing I have read all year.

Uggh. I just don't know if i can root a "hero" that's so jaded and anti-horse. Here he is the only human in Equestria, hit on by ton of mares, and still just as cold and complaing as ever. The dude just seems miserable there. After nearly 10 hours of reading i was really expecting so see more things transpiring. Especially for a fic that promised clop chapters. Is friendship and shipping REALLY that tragic?

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The first clop chapter is chapter thirteen. Then sixteen, twenty-one, twenty-seven, thirty-two, thirty-four, thirty-five, and several more after that. This story is very, very big. Things take time. I think most normal people would be hesitant about having sex with what they see as animals, especially since Nav used to work on a farm and had to take care of these things. I'd also consider being depressed in a place like that a fairly normal thing, given how alone he is. Sure, there are plenty of friendly sapient things he can talk to, but at the time, he doesn't have anyone he can talk about dark things with. The ponies he's dealing with at the moment are innocent and too kind to deal with the stuff that's bothering him. That would be enough to make me even more jaded, I think. He does eventually get better, but it's not realistic to expect someone to get over something like that so quickly.