“Applejack, can ah sleep in your room tonight?” Applebloom whimpered.
“Are you having nightmares again?” Applejack asked, “I sent a letter to Princess Luna but I haven’t heard back yet. And o’ course you can darlin’ don’t sweat it.”
“It’s just - that filly we found in the forest,” Applebloom admitted, “Ah, know we weren’ supposed to go in the forest, but-”
Applejack sighed and hugged her sister close. “Oh Applebloom, yer heart was in the right place goin’ out tah save that filly, but you’ve got to think with your head sometimes,” Applejack lectured. “You saw what happened to that filly that got lost an’ hurt. What if that had been you? Ah’d never forgiven ma’self if somethin’ happened to you!”
Applebloom didn’t try to argue, she just hugged back and listened to the steady beat of her sister’s heart as tears welled in her eyes.
“She was so scared!” Applebloom sobbed, “Ah’ve never seen anypony that scared before. She was begging us not to hurt her, an’ then she tried to run away on a broken leg, an’ she started talkin’ all crazy, an’ then she tried to walk all the way back to Ponyville, and she collapsed an’ ah thought she was dead-”
“Hey, simmer down now,” Applejack comforted, “She’s fine, thanks to you. I went to see her at the hospital today.”
Applebloom pulled her face out of her sister’s coat to look her in the eye.
“Ya did?” Applebloom said with hopeful excitement, “Did she say anything about me?”
“Ahm sure she would thank ya if she could, but...” Applejack tried to think how to phrase it gently, “Well she weren’ up for sayin’ much of anything. She’s still a mite shook up.”
“Ah bet her parents were happy to see her at least.”
Applejack tensed up and didn’t answer.
“... Oh,” Applebloom could figure out what that meant.
“They haven’t been able to find her parents. She won’t even tell us her name, so she goes by ‘Green’ now.” Applejack explained, “How would ya feel if Green stayed here with us fer a while?”
Applebloom hesitated for a moment too long before answering.
“That would be fine, ah guess,” She mumbled. “She’s kinda... weird.”
“Really now?” Applejack raised an eyebrow, “Was she mean to you?”
“Well, no,” Applebloom said hesitantly. “Ah mean, she did say we weren’t never goin' ta get our cutie marks, but she apologized fer tha’.”
“Well, that wasn’t a very nice thing for her to say.”
“She did think we were timberwolves at the time.” Applebloom elaborated, “And she did apologize right after, but then she started talking all crazy and on the way back she kept calling us ‘kids’ and telling us to go on without her.”
“She must have been mighty confused,” Applejack said, “Ya’ll don’t look anything like timberwolves or goats.”
“She kept saying she was fine,” Applebloom was beginning to tear up, “But she wuz hurt real bad and she kept pushing us away when we tried ta help her walk, an’ she fell, an’ then she kicked Scootaloo in the face when she tried ta help her up. An’ she wuz wimperin’ the whole time and cryin’ but I don’t think she knew ‘cause she kept tryin’ ta tell us that she didn’t need help, an’ -”
“Shhh, it’s alright,” Applejack hugged her sister tight to her chest. “Ah know Green must have scared ‘ya somethin’ fierce, but Ah’m sure she didn’ mean to. She’s just... well she’s a very anxious pony and Ah guess that bein’ lost an’ injured must have frightened the wits out of her, poor thing.”
“Like Fluttershy?” Applebloom asked.
“Ah guess I bit like that, yeah,” Applejack responded. “She’s very frightened of other ponies right now, and she needs a safe place to live so she can learn to trust ponies to not hurt her. Ah was hoping tha-”
“Yes!” Applebloom said firmly, “Ah want to help her. If she needs to learn how to trust, she can learn from mah sister, the Element a’ Honesty!”
Applejack tousled her sister’s mane.
“Aww shoot, ah just remembered,” Applejack said sheepishly. “Ahm supposed to go to a meetin’ at the hospital tonight to see about helpin’ Green. Ya can sleep in Big Mac’s room if ya like, Ah’m sure he wouldn’ mind.”
“A meeting this late at night?” Applebloom questioned.
“Well, the Princess is going to be there,” Applejack explained. “Ah can try bringin’ up yer nightmares if I get a chance to speak with her alone.”
“Ya know what?” Applebloom said, “Ah think Ah’ll be fine.”
When we finally get to this meeting I think we will be getting quite a bit of information and definitely some interesting ideas of just what is going on here.
Shouldn’t turn down the possibility of magic god levels of support. Never know when it might come in handy.
Now we know her impact on the cmc
Make bigger chapter.
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Yeah, I think a lot of us got so caught up in Green's PoV that we completely ignored how the CMC would have taken that situation... They might be irrepressible founts of chaos, but they are still children.
this small chapter was a good idea to put in and for the next one you are working on don't rush it ;)
Oof
this meeting sounds like its going to be fun :D
Every time I see a chapter update I feel like a junkie. Gots to get me my fix. Great story so far! One of the best I've read on this site so far!
Let's hope Bloom doesn't come on too hard...
Ooh, nice to hear how it effected the cmc.
Thanks for the update, and take your time! It's worth doing right!
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Now we know the impact on ONE of the CMC, there are 2 others
Greens a doctor, not a secret agent.
There are people who spend their entire lives mastering the arts of deception.
Green isn't one of them.
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The most likely effect of compounding reader pressure to write more is that they feel over stressed and actually write less.
I really like this story too, but we have to allow them to write at their own pace or the quality will suffer.
Ouch. Yeah, the rescue was rougher than anything the Crusaders had to deal with prior to it. At least they have familial support to help there.
Take as much time as you need with the meeting. I'm sure you'll figure it out.
So short. *gags and tumbles* Nuuuhhrrr.
...Thank youuu.
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Scootaloo was in a earlier chapter shortly after dropping green off
Short but impactful. Next chapter will be epic if they get over everything they 'know about Green'.
Take your time. A masterpiece should never be rushed. Better two wait and get quality than a rushed job.
EA is the perfect example.
Time cant be cut without major damage!
Slow but steady wins the race
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I've seen James Bond movies.
Secret agents are Terrible actors; unless they're villians. ... This may be why the they called in the Elements (Knights of the Realm) to address the issue.
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7hPm4eiiD08
You think THIS show was weird, you need to watch The Prisoner
If you're having trouble writing it, I could help you!
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If you want to help out, jump in the discord server and you can have a look at my notes.
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I have a Discord but how do I join yours?
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I put the link at the end of some of the chapters rather than in the description since I didn't want to many people joining before reading. Here it is though https://discord.gg/ktG3yhM
Dang, I didn’t realize at the time that kid also refers to goats x’D
of course I’m familiar with the name, but the pony interpretation was lost on me
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IThe word originally refers to goat kids, the "child" meaning is metaphorical in a way, similar would be "pup" or "spawn"
Goat!
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Not sure if you meant to blank post, but your post is empty somehow...
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Yeah, FimFiction allows you to click the Post Comment and it happily makes an empty comment for you. 😵🥴
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Yep, its deffinitely ASCII 09, a.k.a. "TAB"
Im not shure this is aproppiated on Fimfiction's TOS or if mods will be happy about blankposting, but it appears to be a thing now
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What I don’t understand all those words you used.
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Unable to monitor electrical activity of the heart, amount of blood circulating in the body is very low, possibly has too much iron in the blood due to unknown body implants.
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I've never heard of haemochromatosis being caused by steel implants or shrapnel, I don't think the body can absorb much iron from pieces of solid metal. Could be wrong since I haven't researched this.
edit: Haemochromatosis actually causes iron to collect in your eyes and it looks kinda cool.
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Look at the brown/gold ring around the iris.
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That just made me laugh. I just get a kick out of every time someone is awestruck by me.
-DJ Hopper
And to answer the body implants
-The cyborg eyepiece is to help with his memory disability. Paraloxs all have photographic memory but he doesn’t. The eye pieces are made of a living metal that grows with him as his body grows. (So no iron harm because it’s not made of iron.)
-The cyborg fingers are just to have some physical reference when he uses his magic. Other paraloxs don’t need it but some prefer a physical reference.
-Also the strips keeps the body warm. They have to do this body reheat exercise to keep their body’s warm.
-He’s a winged earth pony. He has went through intense training and is able to fly if he puts enough earth pony magic into his wings.
I made a video of what his heart beat might sound like on a heart monitor.
So, apparently you can post comments without text
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Indeed, it is truly bamboozling
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The only thing I dislike about this story, are the short chapters. Everything else is a top notch.
Well I guess it is true, you can always trust a farmer to think kid only means goat, btw good job at the accents.
I like to point out that luna is now trying to help while before she literally tried to get mental help for a lost filly in a unknown forest, not answering the fillies actual questions about survival, plus the fact she admitted to not being able to start a fire.
So a lost filly in a dark unknown forest, freezing at night, with Timberwolves out and about, and luna does nothing and even claimed that she could keep her sleep to keep the dream going, thus killing the filly.
I wouldn't trust her ever, more so in anything relating to foals.
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Than i guess you could call this fic *takes off sunglasses* show accurate
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What was this about?
Poor CMC, they are way over the head back than.
But they Soldier on like true Crusaders 👍