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Well, whatever floats your "dingaling", down there with Pennywise, I ain't judging. Just being... NEUTRAL :P
And hey, everyone needs to make a living somehow.
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Nooooo. Not netruality, my weaknesses! But thank you for being understanding! If more people were like you, I wouldn't have to worry about laughing myself to death.
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Careful, now that you said that, they might purposefully try and make you laugh yourself to death...:P
Eww, anthro. Still pretty hot though.
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I don't normally do anthro, it's the craziest part about this story.
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Crazy is right, that kind of thing is just way to out there for me.
Soo, any chance we'll get to see what happened to Rarity?
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It's a possibility at some point.
I'm surprised by the hate that this story got for being a good one
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The hate fuels me
How do you die by accident in a snuff film? She didn't know what kind of movie she signed up for? She thought she was playing a different part? This Rarity tragedy is a mystery.
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You'll find out if I decide to write it.
(Aka, I need to think up some BS)
I really rather enjoyed this story! I especially like how eager they both were to do it, and how Velvet provided some additional kink with the setting, so many writers don't consider that setting the scene like that is so important. I had only three quibbles, heh.
First was that Twilight never actually filmed the deed, which seems odd considering the setup, you would think Velvet would want to make sure she fully achieved her dream. Maybe this was because Twilight simply used illusions for effect, so the camera wouldn't pick it up? Second was simply that Twilight stripped her nude right off the bat—outfits and uniforms and clothing in general almost always add to a scene, and Velvet hanging dressed in the student's uniform in front of Twilight, who has only her cock, balls, and breast exposed from the teacher's outfit, would have made that scene all the sweeter, to say nothing of Velvet wetting her skirt and socks by the end.
Third, at the beginning, Twilight mentions "having you back, with none the wiser." Though this point never really comes up, as Velvet is dead at the end with Twilight in no rush to revive her. Either this was never going to happen and Twilight lied, or she can revive Velvet at any point, leaving the door open for more Snuffy sequels. Either could use a couple lines of expansion, with either Twilight telling or Velvet realizing this is for keeps and the thrill of that, or Twilight making a note to revive her in the morning, or thinking of more ways for her and her mother to have this sort of "fun." At the very least, a line at the end about Twilight "needing to look up how to do that tomorrow and if it was even possible" would be nice, though it would leave Velvet's fate especially ambiguous.
Again, though, I enjoyed it! It's also much higher quality than your current Chrysalis story. You seem to excel at willing snuff especially, and if you keep writing that in the same vein as this, you may have a new follower!
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I really enjoy writing the Chrysalis story, but this was fun. My quality is a bit up and down because I struggle with several mental illness, and at my current pricing need to write 5'000 words a day, six days a week to stay alive. They told me "Nobody makes a living writing porn." And then I showed them by pushing my body well beyond its limits. I can't heighten my prices because of the fact nobody wants to pay too much, which means I sadly have to rush a lot of things. I am proud of all my stories however, otherwise I would just burn them or at least give the commissioner a discount.
I tried really hard on the Chrysalis one because it is something I am enjoying writing, and I am sorry that is not reflected in the quality for you. Anyway, thank you for the constructive comment, they always cheer me up.
Good ol' Terry.
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I like to imagine she died of something hilarious trivial and anticlimactic. Like slipping on a pool of cum and cracked her head on the table...