This story is a sequel to For the hive, my mom and myself
After the events that transpire in Canterlot and Ponyville, peace has being restore and life has return to the normality that its used to be. But to prince Kabuto (now re name Caeruleo) the nightmare is far from over. Consume by guilt and remorse, Caeruleo must find a way to atone for his self proclaim sins if he ever wish to rest peacefully again.
Luckily for him the rulers of the lands as well as the main six will have his back whenever he liked it or not
Imma advise you to hold off on writing any more chapters until you can find yourself an editor, you really need one, like badly.
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Thanks for the advice, I will do that, and if not at the very least do quick checks on story and editions myself to try and improve, and believe me I'm being on the look out for them
This is good so far.
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Thanks, will try to improve on the grammar as I continue on with the story.
Yay continuation of the story! Keep up the good work I love it!
I've heard of strange hybrids like the bug bear, but a goat bear?
... was it Tirek?
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Je thanks for catching that I will change it now
Hmmmmmm... I smell something fishy, like a harem or herd rolling in.
DAMMIT, I lost the scent.
Jesus Christ man, there are so many spelling errors that this story needs to be taken down and redone from the ground up. Go to Grammarly or even Microsoft Word and get it fixed, sheesh this is painful as hell to read.
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Yeah my editor is working on it, but well those things take time I post this because I can't help myself, I just really like to write, and often times I do it really fast.
Please reread this, you have problems with what tense you should be in, and have substituted tree for three, that's just a couple of issues. Good story though I am enjoying the plot.
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Thanks I will, and apologies for that, I still on the look out for editors, well another one the one I have kind of disappear
Is he serious? That could just be Chitin in the video! And as for being brainwashed by the ponies. Chrysalis says he's her son, Celestia says he's her son, Chrysalis lies and plans to kill him. I'm not saying Celestia is going to, "but fool me once shame on you, fool me twice, I deserve it."
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Its more safe measures Chrysalis place on him. I will try to explain them later on so it makes more sense. Also thanks for the input I always welcome any comment and take to heart, already change it a bit so its more clear that yeah Chitin used something that force him to attack.
more?
Is this story dead?
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Possible, I don't know if continue it or not specially with my other stories but I thank you for reading it none the less and who knows maybe later on the line I put one of two chapters, but I wouldn't hold my breath
Hoping this story gets continued
How did she know his name?
continue it
I will love to read more on this. Please don't leave it on a cliffhanger.
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Glad you like it, hope I can get an end to it if possible but my writers block plus my other project would make that a tad difficult
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Okay, well I hope that after you finish your current story that you go back to your stories that are currently in a cliffhanger and complete them. Oh, which one of your stories is the one you're currently working on? Can't tell from their descriptions.