There's been something wrong with the moon, Princess Luna is certain of it, but can't put her hoof on what the disturbance is exactly.
Her older sister Celestia, also known as the Princess of the Sun, try to ease her fears and concerns but without any success. However, the sudden and unexpected arrival of the Arwing and its pilot, the legendary Fox McCloud, push the topic to the back of her mind. Yet, the help of an otherworldly biped, one that can also fly, could be the perfect thing she needed to investigate the strange activity on the space rock.
On the condition they manage to repair the All-Range Fighter, of course.
This story takes place after Command and just before the end of Season 3.
All rights belongs to Nintendo and Hasbro for their respective characters.
I haven't even read this yet but I'm going to give you a thumbs up because this has Fox McCloud in it. My favorite character EVER!!!!!
I find this story really interesting. But do yourself a huge favor and get a proof reader to read over it before it is posted. There are spelling mistakes and grammar errors every so often. If you want, i could be the proof reader. Just trying to help, i'm sorry if i sound like an asshole.
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Nah, you don't sound like an asshole at all. To tell you the truth, I'm an average french student who work hard to improve my english because I really love this language. I'm know that I'm still making some mistakes and a little help is more than welcomed
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Awesome. For me to help, i need you to give me the chapter before it is posted via Google Doc, if you use one.
DO A BARREL ROLL!
This has potential. I'm keeping my eye on this. And for a non-native speaker you're not bad.
I came here to read a StarFox fic and I was not disappointed. You're doing pretty good so far. Keep it up, and don't let anyone tell you otherwise.
It's good to StarFox again, now if only Nintendo would make another StarFox game.
great chpt
More fics need Star Fox in them.
Luna: "I control the moon"
Fox: "Neat! And I fly around it"
3811413 *make another GOOD StarFox game
3964559 Even better.
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Don't worry, I'm actually working on it
Nice starting of the story. just finished all 3 chapters today. good job. im looking forward to the next.
Nice chapter. My only problem is that Politic should be 'Politics.'
4073851 & 4074204 Thank you, I corrected it ^^
Sweet a new chapter
I can't wait to read the next one.
The story updates a little slowly but there's definitely a lot of places you can go. Also, the inclusion and mention of Nightmare Rarity is nice, including the comics into cannon. Really looking forward to where this goes.
As long as you're accepting corrections, you wrote "kind-sized bed" when it should be "king-sized bed".
A few spelling errors here and there but nothing to deter me from reading it.
Let's see where this goes.
I can forgive if you wrote Scootaloo a bit OoC, but to be fair, being saved from imminent danger does create an amount of gratitude. Also, 'able to made' should be 'able to make.'
I think my favorite part of this chapter was when Fox interacts with the guards under him. As small as it is, it has a significant amount of charm with how Fox treats those under him and represents the growth that Fox gained during the Star Fox series. I love this chapter to say the least of it.
4148443 Thank you for indicating the misspelling, I corrected it
I had some difficulties to write this part of the chapter because I didn't want Fox to be a jerk by talking like this to them.
Good work. Mission Complete!
What about Pinkie?
You know, I thought I'd be a bit annoyed that there isn't that much action right now, but I'm actually enjoying it. It's very interesting to see a contemplative, even strung out veteran Fox. Keep it up.
This looks good for business!!!
Again, I love how you showed just how mature Fox has aged in mind as a progression into the Star Fox series. The fact that he was humble enough to praise Spike for his adventures rather than gloat in a snarky like he would have done in 64 is proof of this.
4294312 You'll see
4294375 Don't worry, there'll be some action soon. It's a StarFox story after all!
4294945 He's aging and after all the adventures he lived, I think it's completely normal than he become wiser and less cocky. He was acting like this in Assault (Fichina and Corneria missions are very good example) but he can stay a little bold and brave from time to time.
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And this is why I love the story so far.
Hmm...good work.
This is getting interesting. I predict a Lylat Cavalry in the future.
i hope to see more soon
Ah Andross, he let his own literal lust for Fox's mother make him an orphan.
good work, but i wonder who the two mystery ponies are.
so how many chapter are there between now and them arriving at fox's location?
Rainbow Dash vs McCloud... this is gonna be good
..I am slightly disappointed that Wolf didn't tag along..
I squeed at the ending.
Falco, Krystal and Lucy all reforming Team Star Fox. It's wonderful.
4507613 Ditto, but I get it. He probably would've just shown up, gave his respects, told him to watch his back, then left.
Also, the Changeling Queen? Chrysalis is coming? I kinda hope she isn't going to be our designated vilainess. I'd like it to be more interesting.
Excellent chapter. And I'm happy to see you chose the Arwing from Assault. I actually have the game (and I actually got 100% game completion and unlocked all weapons, stages, and characters.), and the aircraft design really is the best the designers created.
4507419 lol I'm already imagining the air race in my head.
She's gonna go wild.
4511343 dude you too... that game was the best of th SF saga (my opinion)
4513082 opinion agreed.
It's not bad by any means, but it needs some work. The pacing in this chapter specifically. "Hey, I just met you and all, but can you take care of some important business for me?" Doesn't really feel natural.
I know you just updated, my good sir, but can we please have moar? I love this story too much to let it die away.
Solid chapter, though it has a handful of grammatical problems; words repeating here and there, or using the wrong word altogether. Nothing major, but it's there.
IT looks like Luna is start to falling for Fox.
Well then... Krystal's going to be mad when she finds out about Luna.
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