Failed Scare

by Moonlit Path

First published

The Cutie Mark Crusaders attempt to write a story for Nightmare Night. Blood, fire, revenge, and stupidity ensue.

The Cutie Mark Crusaders attempt to write a story for Nightmare Night. Blood, fire, revenge, and stupidity ensue.


Reading of Surfing Splash is not needed, but the first few sentences might be slightly confusing. Will not effect story though.
Takes place after Legend of Everfree, but does not contain spoilers.


Written for the Horror Story Contest

The Wisp

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“Wait. How did Rarity find out about it?” Scootaloo asked, kicking her shoes off next to Sweetie Belle’s. So far the school had been able to hid FimFiction from the humane 7, as they have been nicknamed.

“She caught me while I was working finishing that Twilight, Sunset story.” Sweetie Belle admitted, while the three of them sat down on Sweetie’s bed.

“Ah’m thankful Applejack doesn’t have a computer now.” Apple Bloom sighed, as she pulled her laptop out of her backpack.

“So are we going to do this or what?” Scootaloo took the laptop from Apple Bloom and logged into Sweetie Belle’s account.

“Hey. How do you know my password?”

“You’re predictable.” Scootaloo started setting up their new story, only to be stopped by Apple Bloom.

“Don’t ya think that we should write the story first, then create it? Ah mean, we don’t even know what it’s ‘bout yet.’

“Good point. So where do we start?”

“Open a new word document?” Sweetie Belle offered, earning her a glare from Scootaloo.

“Scootaloo, you said you have an idea for the beginning?” Nodding, Scootaloo opened up a new word document before pulling out a scrap of paper from her pocket.


“Dang it. Why’d the storms have to be so strong this time of year?” Applejack mumbled to herself, attempting to get her cart out of a pothole.

“Hey Applejack!”

The girl in question looked behind her to see Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle running up to her her. “Howdy. Mind givin me a hand?”

Noticing the stuck wheel, they both went behind the cart and pushed, while Applejack pulled. After a couple of attempts, they finally managed to get the cart out.

“Thank yall. Now what can ah do for ya?”

“Have you seen Apple Bloom? She was supposed to meet us at the clubhouse this morning, but she never showed up.” Scootaloo explained, looking around the market place for their friend.

“Haven’t seen her since breakfast. Ah’m sure she’s ‘round here somewhere. Yall know how easy that kid gets distracted.”

“That’s true. Thanks Applejack. We’ll find her...eventually.” Scootaloo picked up a couple apples that had fallen off when they got the wheel out, and placed them in the holding space under the cart. With one final sigh, they ran further into town, on a unexpected game of hide and seek.


“Hey can I take over? I have an idea.” Sweetie Belle took the laptop from Scootaloo, before skimming over she wrote again.


“Help!”

“Fluttershy?” Applejack abandoned her cart, and ran in the direction she thought she heard the scream, or rather high pitch squeal. After running for about two minutes, the farmer had arrived at the animal shelter.

“Fluttershy? Ya here?” Applejack started heading towards the front door to check inside, when she felt the air thicken. Looking down, she watched as a puff of black smoke started engulfing her body.

All senses left the teenager, as she clawed at her throat instinctively. Her lungs burned as the smoke started forcefully removing the air from her lungs, making it impossible to breath. Feeling light headed, she knew she couldn’t keep up the fight. A moment later Applejack surrendered and her world went black with sweet relief.

“Is she alright?”

"I think so. For now at least.”

Applejack started to open her eyes, the familiar voices sounded distant, but she knew they had to be close by. “What happened ta me?” The farmer groaned. She tried to sit up, only to find her body completely numb.

“Don’t worry. The drugs, or spell, or poison, or whatever that is wears off pretty quick.”

“Sunset?”

“Yeah, it’s me. Fluttershy's here too.” Applejack heard a faint squeak, before Sunset came up from behind her and helped her sit up. Sunset leaned Applejack against her shoulder, allowing her to look around.

“What in tarnation is goin on here?”

CRACK

“Um...guys?” Fluttershy whispered, staring at the crack that just appeared in the floor.

“I’m not sure. I woke up here, then everything went white and Fluttershy appeared. Then you appeared, after I had just gotten her up.

“Ah don’t understand. Is it some kind of magic thing?” Applejack held her hands in front of her, wiggling her fingers for a moment. Thankful she could move again, Applejacj carefully stood up with a little help from Sunset.

CRACK

“Guys…”

“Maybe. I would have felt any strange magic though.”

CRACK

“GUYS!” Fluttershy yelled, staring at the cracks that started spider webbing outwards.

“What’s wrong?” Sunset ran over to Fluttershy, but before Fluttershy could answer the floor had collapsed while a bright white field blinded them. As they fell, an icy sensation overtook their bodies causing their blood to start freezing.

After a minute of falling they finally hit something hard, knocking the wind out of them. The girls couldn’t help but just lay on the cold ground in an attempt to regain their breathing.


“That’s all I’ve got.” Sweetie Belle sighed, before noticing that Scootaloo had already taken the laptop back.

“Ya know, for someone who pretty much only cares about getting the ultimate adrenaline rush, ya sure can be a geek sometimes.” Apple Bloom couldn’t help but chuckle, as Scootaloo’s cheeks became rosy.

“I don’t know what you’re talking about. Writing can be a great way to get an adrenaline rush also. Although, I do prefer speed. Anyways, just watch and learn.”


“Girls?”

Sunset opened her eyes, noticing Twilight running over to them. “No, no, no, no, no, no, no! It got you too? Well of course it did, why else would you be here. Well I guess you could have…”

“Twilight.” Sunset croaked, trying to get her friend to stop rambling. “What’s going on?”

“I’m not sure. I don’t remember anything before waking up in a strange room, and then falling.”

“Hey Twi, we searched everywhere. There’s no way out.”

“Rainbow...yer here also?” Applejack asked, slowly standing up despite being lightheaded again. Looking around, she was surprised to see that most of Canterlot High had been there.

“Yeah, we’re all here. Well, we haven’t found Rarity yet, but Pinkie Pie’s around here somewhere.” Rainbow went over and helped Fluttershy up, while Twilight helped Sunset.

“Okay, I have come up with a couple of possibilities about our current situation. First, this is somehow all a dream. Two, this is some kind of magic. At this point, I wouldn’t be surprised. Third, this is one of Rainbow’s and Pinkie’s cruel pranks.” Twilight explained, helping wipe the strange powder off of Sunset.

“This isn’t a prank.” Everyone jumped as Pinkie appeared behind the group. Sunset, Rainbow, and Applejack were all taken back slightly. Pinkie Pie’s hair had deflated slightly, and they knew that only happened when Pinkie was upset.

“So um, does anyone know where we are? And why there’s so much...I think it’s chalk everywhere?” Fluttershy asked, grabbing a handful of the powder and letting it run through her fingers.

LET ME GO!!!!!

Everyone in the room looked up to see Octavia floating in the air by an invisible force. A black wisp manifested itself in front of Octavia’s face.

The wisp spun itself up and down Octavia’s body, creating a tornado shape before ripping her legs off at the hips. The nearby watchers were splattered with the crimson blood, while Octavia’s body started spasming uncontrollably.

“Please. Please stop.” Octavia begged, tears streaming down her face while her head started becoming fuzzy from the blood loss. A couple agonizing seconds later, the wisp swarmed her again.

Three large gashes appeared. One going from her collarbone down the rest of her torso, while two horizontal appeared at the end of the vertical gash. Slowly the skin started to peel itself open, as her internal organs begun to fall out..

Octavia’s eyes glazed over as the small intestine tied itself around its owner's body, pinning Octavia’s arms to her now exposed ribcage. Her liver, kidneys, lungs, stomach, and heart started to float upwards, while the rest of her guts shoved themselves back into the body. Blood dripped down the corpse as the wisp caused the body to already decompose. A putrid stench filled the air, causing multiple students to throw up.

Above the corpse, a black smoke cloud appeared. The cloud had started spinning quickly, as the organs flew into it. It didn’t take long for them to disappear from existence, while the cloud started raining blood over the entire room. A moment later the cloud dispersed, as Octavia’s corpse to burst into flames. The flames had originated off of the intestinal bondage, burning the corpse in half.

It didn’t take longer than a couple seconds before all that remained of the teenager had been a pile of bones. As the bones hit the ground they instantly dissolved into the same powder that covered the ground.


Sweetie Belle held her hand over her mouth, while running into the bathroom.

“Hey Scoots. Why Octavia?” Apple Bloom asked, ignoring the distinctive sounds Sweetie Belle had been making.

“Because Octavia is so snobby. Just because I don’t act all…” Scootaloo made quotation marks with her fingers “"fancy” as her, doesn’t mean she can treat others as if they were a dying diseased rat.” Scootaloo explained while handing Apple Bloom the laptop.

“Keep going, I’m going to check on Sweetie Belle.”

“Finally it's my turn.”


Everyone stood there in shock at what just happened. A full minute passed before Sunset finally broke the silence.

“I think I’m going to be sick.” Sunset whispered covering her mouth with one hand, and stomach with the other.

Looking around, Twilight noticed Fluttershy had fainted, and everyone in the room staring at her and Sunset; including their friends.

“A plan would rrreeeeeeaaaallllllllllllyyyyyyyy be helpful right now.” Pinkie started giggling in an attempt to hide her fear, while trying to wake Fluttershy up.

Out of the corner of her eye, Pinkie noticed a hint of a pinkish purple object laying by Fluttershy. Shifting through the bone dust, she revealed a hairbow.

“This...this is…Apple Bloom” Applejack started trembling as tears pooled in her eyes, pickking the hairbow off of the ground. However, before anyone could comfort the farmer they heard another scream.

Looking back towards the center of the room, everyone saw Silver Spoon being lifted into the air.

The wisp had started the same process as it had done to Octavia, although her relatively small size caused the process to go quicker.

“We need to do something!” Rainbow yelled, only to find herself behind held back by Applejack.

“It won’t do no good if yall get yerself killed also.” Applejack mumbled and tears started running down her cheeks.

“So what are we going to do?” Fluttershy whispered, trying to sit up with Pinkie’s help.

“Find Rarity, pony-up, and use the elements?” Sunset suggested looking over to Twilight who nodded, trying to hide any hint that she had been on the brink of hysteria; and failing.


“Hey Apple Bloom. How's it going?” Scootaloo asked, jumping onto the bed. Apple Bloom handed Scootaloo the laptop, while behind her she could hear Sweetie’s electric toothbrush.

“Not bad. Two things though. First, why Silver Spoon? Wouldn’t Diamond Tiara make more sense?”

Apple Bloom shook her head. “Ah enjoy my life a little too much ta go get murdered over a silly story.”

“Second, if you killed yourself in the story...does that mean you committed suicide?” Without saying anything, Apple Bloom reached over and hit Scootaloo over the back of her head while her friend just started laughing.

Sweetie Belle went over to her closet and pulled out a pair of shoes. “Hey Scootaloo, can you and your twisted mind finish up the story? I need Apple Bloom to help me get the chinese food, before they close. Besides, it was your idea in the first place.”

“Sure thing. Don’t forget the boba tea!”

Apple Bloom slid her boots on, before heading towards the door. “After last time, trust me when ah say that ah won’t forget it again.”

Scootaloo watched her friends leave, before grabbing the laptop and lying down on the bed. Let’s see. How about…”


“We looked earlier for Rarity. She isn’t here.” Rainbow sighed, before her pupils dilated. “You don’t think…”

“Don’t think like that!” Twilight snapped. “For all we know, she’s back in her shop working on a new dress.”

Everyone looked over in time to see Silver Spoon’s bones fall to the floor. Only this time, the room had filled up with smoke-like water vapor. Everyone’s vision went fuzzy, as the room they were in became the white field again.

A couple seconds later, the Humane 7 had found themselves alone in the music room at Canterlot high, surrounded by fake spider webs and cut out ghosts.

“What...what just happened? Rainbow asked, poking at one of the “ghosts”.

“Having fun?” Sweetie Belle poked her head into the classroom, with Scootaloo following in behind her.

“Fun?!” Pinkie growled. “How is any of this fun?! I promise that…”

“Fine, we get it. We did a lame job on the haunted house, and next year you can help us. You don’t have to rub it in our face.” Scootaloo mumbled, kicking a bass drum.

“Haunted house? So that creature, and everything earlier had been an illusion?” Twilight whispered, rubbing the back of her head where she had hit it during her fall. “Wait. Why did you keep knocking us out, and making us fall through the floor and…”

"We didn't." Scootaloo interrupted. Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle looked at each other, before turning back to the group. “Little kids are coming here, so we had to make sure it was safe enough for them. No one should have gotten hurt.”

“Maybe Apple Bloom did something for the older kids and teens?” Scootaloo suggested.

“We haven’t seen her in two days though. So when could she have done it?”

“Hey guys?” Everyone looked over to Pinkie PIe who had turned sickly pale.

“Where’s Sunset?”